This is an interesting story concept, and seems to be reasonably well-written. However, there's a few things that bother me. One of them is the pace at which everything is happening. In my opinion, it's a bit too fast. That, and none of the characters seem to question what is going on, they just roll with it. Also, sometimes things aren't explained at all, such as the 'fetches'. We eventually learn they're sort of 'clones' of Harry and Ginny, but there's no "how", "why", "when" or "who". "why" is obvious, the rest is not.
The biggest example of this is "Baby Harry". I understood that somehow, Anwen was put into a slowed-time hideout by "The Goddess", but I highly doubt anyone has any idea what is up with Harry's baby version. Nor should Teen Harry. Yet at no point until now is Harry even the least bit confused or surprised by the appearance of a baby copy of himself.
The way to remedy this would be to either explain on-screen what happened (if there were any explanations in the story, they happened off-screen, like when Albus tells Minerva), or have Harry question when he's going to learn the reason there's a baby version of himself at some point in the same chapter as Baby Harry and Teen Harry first 'meet'.

After that, you can postpone the actual explanation as long as you want. It's just that it doesn't make logical sense to me that everyone, especially Harry, rolls with two versions of him existing at the same time. I know we're dealing with gods capable of stopping time and reversing death so there's lots of weird things going on even from the characters' perspective, but even if nobody is weirded out they should at least be curious.

Another thing you might want to be careful about is defining the limits on what the God and Goddess can do. For instance, is there a particular reason that the entire family isn't in a fast-time area, an opposite to Anwen's "slow-time" refuge? I mean an in-story reason, the reason from a writer's perspective is clearly that it would be too convenient.

However, one thing I really, REALLY liked was Ginny's explanation of how Harry ended up dealing with his grief over Sirius. The idea of him sitting up waiting for the Sirius constellation to rise, just before Sunrise, just struck a chord in me. I think I might use that idea in one of my stories (with a reference to you, ofc).


Author's Response: Wyrdflame, thank you so much for your detailed review. I hope that the chapter I just posted will answer some of the questions you have. The baby Harry vs Teen Harry are explained, as well as why Albus kept both of them in different timelines. There are other nuggets of truth in there which might help you. I haven't written a whole lot of stories where Sirius died (I have a whole epic about the Marauders and these women on another site that is over three-quarters of a million words), and he lives in the whole thing. I wanted to explore ways Harry might deal with that grief, as it seems in the books no one helps him at all. The rise of the constellation seemed like something that could happen, just so he had that small reminder. Thank you again for your review, MNF

It's so good to see a new chapter of this story from you! I can feel teen-Harry's happiness at getting to be part of the family he has missed out on while growing up with the Dursleys. I love his early memory of the music box, since it's such a positive one. Well done!

Author's Response: HI dearie, thanks for reviewing. Glad you like it, MNF