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Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.12.05 - 06:52AM Title: Chapter 1
What a wonderful, little anecdote. I loved it.
However, it saddens me a wee bit that Harry has probably already made another selfish choice, to watch Ginny for another year on the Marauders map, and to let her face her bad memories of Hogwarts alone. But that's another story.
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed!
I think Ginny going back to Hogwarts would probably be her own choice, and it would be selfless of both of them to do their best to make it work and do what they need to do.
Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2017.12.01 - 01:06PM Title: Chapter 1
A charming, beautifully touching glimpse into the moments we all wished we could have seen. Your phrasing took me right in there, almost (but fortunately not quite) to the point where it felt like I was intruding. Very much hope you continue to share your talent with words!
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed!
Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2017.12.01 - 06:41AM Title: Chapter 1
I am not sure about the use of the present tense. It reads a bit like a voice over in a film scene.
Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2017.11.30 - 11:30PM Title: Chapter 1
Very sweet! Good characterizations - I like the fumbling and uncertainty merging into certainty. Very nice!
