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Reviewer: My Wicked Quill Signed Date: 2018.09.06 - 08:46PM Title: Chapter 11 - Something Soon

"You and I both know, the minute that ring goes on my finger, I will only be known as 'Harry Potter's wife' for the rest of my life,"

I knew that was what was up with her. but again I knew cause it's classic Ginny. I love how you do them both such great justice.

Author's Response: truly the best compliment you could give a writer. thank you!



Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2018.08.25 - 08:30AM Title: Chapter 11 - Something Soon

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Wow! What a psychologically dark chapter. Poor Harry is circling the drain with his support slipping away, and has to be asking himself if he made the right choice not to move on to his next great adventure. Of course, one can understand Neville's decision. There is utterly nothing he could do to fix his parents’ situations and he is correct in stating, essentially, that vengeance is a poor motivating force in one’s life. In fact, living that way would destroy him over time, cost him his dream vocation of herbologist, and ruin his relationship with Hannah.

Ginny’s thinking appears to be more muddled. I wonder what great ontological distinction she sees between being “Harry Pooter’s girlfriend” and “Harry Potter’s wife.” Or does she plan, by remaining unmarried, to have Harry surround himself with beautiful escorts to all his public functions? But you’ve already shown us the workings of Ginny’s prideful character in this story. Suffice it to say I see nothing in Harry’s post-war characteristics, as you have written him, to make me think he would use marriage as a tool to keep “Harry Potter’s wife” off the Quidditch pitch. Otherwise she seems perfectly happy sharing Harry’s bank vault. I’d be more sympathetic if she lived completely on her own.

As for Harry, maybe he needs to grow up a bit and smell the steeping tea pot! Yes, he wants a family more than anything else and it is a terrible shame he has been denied this his entire life. But when he asks Ginny if it is working for him to try making her feel sorry for him, and he takes comfort in her reply of, “A little ...”, how sad. Pity has never been a true basis for romantic attraction, and desperation only turns people off more quickly. Ron’s comment about a daily proposal made my skin crawl. Would that not drive Ginny insane and Harry into total depression?

It will be most interesting to see the direction in which you will steer this story. Where it appears headed after this chapter is toward a most unhappy ending.

Finally, I don’t want to nitpick, but this chapter contains a flurry of grammatical errors ... misplaced apostrophes, including “you’re rather than your” ... mingled tenses within sentences ... homonym mistakes such as “here rather than hear.” These are common errors we all make, but I would hope someone would care enough to tell me about such things in my stories.

This is a fascinating piece of fiction! I look forward to the next installment!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!



Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2018.08.19 - 11:38AM Title: Chapter 11 - Something Soon

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Interesting and fun chapter! The wedding was typical Percy! I hope Harry and Ginny answer the wedding bells soon! That Rowle is truly a scumbag and he is definitely protecting someone and I'm not so sure it's just the Lestranges! Can't wait for the next chapter because I think this is a great story! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm having a lot of fun with the Percy-marries-a-Muggle-subplot :)



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2018.08.19 - 11:37AM Title: Chapter 11 - Something Soon

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A lot of things do not seem to be going Harry's way. I am sure it will all come out in the wash. I liked Audrey's weddinng.

Author's Response: Thanks for your review!



Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2018.08.18 - 11:15PM Title: Chapter 11 - Something Soon

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Oh dear. Poor Harry. It is going to be hard for him to move on. He lost so much more than his childhood. Which he never had! All because oh Voldemort and his death eaters.

Author's Response: Thanks for your review!!




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