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Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2018.06.08 - 05:16PM Title: Chapter 1 Ablution

Well when it comes to harry he seems fine but then again if the scare is a itching then something must be twitching!!!!!!kutgw



Reviewer: Duecing Signed Date: 2018.05.28 - 12:32PM Title: Chapter 1 Ablution

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revisited Quantum Leap recently, Sam always had to right the wrongs of misguided crap dealers!!!



Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2018.05.13 - 07:27AM Title: Chapter 1 Ablution

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Enjoyed that! My one criticism from a writing perspective is the abrupt transition from the MoM flashback to Harry realising that he is 'pacing' in the Headmaster's office. This seems a bit unrealistic (almost like he awoke to find himself pacing) and a bit of a missed opportunity. In 50-100 words, I think a smoother physical transition could be used to sew a few more seeds as to the novel mental differences arising from the possession. In my opinion, anyway.

I also made a few grammatical changes to your chapter and sent you a PM for your personal records. I don't really expect the PM to work, so if you get a blank message and would still like the info, you can let me know.



Author's Response: You made my day, Both the praise and critique. Thank You. And feel free to edit my Grammer any time, GHL

Author's Response: took your advice, some anyway. Smoothed the transition from portkey to pacing, But added nothing blatant about improved mental capacity, That will be a slow progression. He is a grieving teen and will work through that before he notices any changes.



Reviewer: DoubleDeuce Signed Date: 2018.05.12 - 01:17PM Title: Chapter 1 Ablution

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No Review

Author's Response: /shrug



Reviewer: JJamieDupane Signed Date: 2018.05.12 - 07:27AM Title: Chapter 1 Ablution

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Interesting. Very Interesting. Please keep up this wonderful work!

Author's Response: Thank You, JJ. Glad you appreciated it.




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