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Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2009.04.16 - 10:43AM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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aww, sweet ending



Reviewer: HPnewbie Anonymous Date: 2006.07.28 - 11:25AM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

MY FAVORITE SO FAR . . . you had a few spelling mistakes but the story made up for it!!!!



Reviewer: Hope G Potter Anonymous Date: 2006.07.27 - 04:56PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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AWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!! I



Reviewer: HPnewbie Anonymous Date: 2006.07.27 - 02:39PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

i really liked it was REALLY good!!!!



Reviewer: HPnewbie Anonymous Date: 2006.07.27 - 02:39PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

i really liked it was REALLY good!!!!



Reviewer: HPnewbie Anonymous Date: 2006.07.27 - 02:39PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

i really liked it was REALLY good!!!!



Reviewer: HPnewbie Anonymous Date: 2006.07.27 - 02:38PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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i really liked it was REALLY good!!!!



Reviewer: madeye232 Signed Date: 2006.01.19 - 03:27PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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An enjoyable story, but there are some major English errors, both in a linguistic sense and in terms of Britpicking. Research prior to writing a story - whether original or a fic - is at least as important as the writing itself, and checking the right currency for the location should really be considered an absolute minimum. Characterisation was fairly variable; while the Big Four were fairly accurate, Luna felt extremely strange and very different from her canon persona. Other than that, there were only a few bits that felt odd generally, like five steaks for a whole picnic - even if they do feed twenty people each, which they certainly won't - or "hamburger" being used to mean the raw mince. Sorry to complain so much; I hope you take my feedback in the spirit it's meant, as an aid to improving your writing. The story was far too amusing to be marred by sloppy writing, and it deserves an update once you've got some more practice in.



Reviewer: beth Anonymous Date: 2005.12.10 - 04:39PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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realy liked it great idea ill give ya a 10



Reviewer: Raine Signed Date: 2005.11.18 - 07:27PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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Awwww, please keep writing, this is soo cute!



Reviewer: star dust Anonymous Date: 2005.11.02 - 02:50AM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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That was really cool! A while ago I read another story where they had a muggle picnic. Was that what the challenge was? That bit at the end was really sweet and Harry giving the girl all those eggs was sweet too.



Reviewer: Torak Signed Date: 2005.09.18 - 07:08PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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An enjoyable story, but there are some major English errors, both in a linguistic sense and in terms of Britpicking. Research prior to writing a story - whether original or a fic - is at least as important as the writing itself, and checking the right currency for the location should really be considered an absolute minimum. Characterisation was fairly variable; while the Big Four were fairly accurate, Luna felt extremely strange and very different from her canon persona. Other than that, there were only a few bits that felt odd generally, like five steaks for a whole picnic - even if they do feed twenty people each, which they certainly won't - or "hamburger" being used to mean the raw mince. Sorry to complain so much; I hope you take my feedback in the spirit it's meant, as an aid to improving your writing. The story was far too amusing to be marred by sloppy writing, and it deserves an update once you've got some more practice in.



Reviewer: halliepotty Anonymous Date: 2005.06.15 - 06:43PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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I say, I think I am becoming a huge fan of your work! Happy Writing! */rhyanne



Reviewer: Zelthian Signed Date: 2005.04.25 - 09:50PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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Reviewed for the contest. I like the "give Harry away" bit. Good luck!

Author's Response: Thanks =D



Reviewer: amblewat Signed Date: 2005.04.21 - 07:52AM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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That was well done good luck!

Author's Response: thank you =D



Reviewer: KikiDeeDee Anonymous Date: 2005.04.16 - 02:25PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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Interesting submission, different characterisations of the usually shadowed characters. Good luck. Kiki

Author's Response: Thanks



Reviewer: Sabine Strohem Signed Date: 2005.04.14 - 07:59PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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Very cute--I liked the H/G dilemma, sweet and original. Although, I have to say, my favorite part HAD to be the Creevey brothers brainstorming;the butterfly-catching and who-can-take-the-best-picture-of-harry were hilarious contest ideas! Good luck in the challenge! -SS

Author's Response: Thank you =D I REALLY enjoyed writing about colin and denis! Luna was great to. I'm gald you liked it. Thanks for reading!



Reviewer: xaphania Anonymous Date: 2005.04.11 - 08:32AM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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Excellent story! I LOVED your characterisations of Dennis and Colin, especially the recurring butterfly game! I also really liked Luna's part in the story: rather random, but worked really well. The Harry/Ginny fluff was lovely as well! Good luck in the competition!

Author's Response: Thank you =D



Reviewer: chocolatePrincess Signed Date: 2005.04.10 - 08:20PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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I liked it!!! I think the whole Idea was awsome nevermind the mistakes...I'm pretty sure i got tons of them in my story too!!! I liked how you used Luna in the story line, she seemed a bit out of charactor at some points but you made it work for her...

Author's Response: Thank you =D I'm glad you liked it!



Reviewer: Jim McGuffin Signed Date: 2005.04.10 - 01:20PM Title: Pointless Arguments and a Lovesick Picnic

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This is the longest fic submitted to the challenge thus far, and I enjoyed every moment of it. I laughed at how Ron was afraid to touch the raw food. And Luna was great in the story, from making Hermione jealous to checking the weather. It makes sense that predicting the weather would be under Divination. In fact, come to think of it, Luna sounds like exactly the type of witch who would be interested in a subject like Divination. A few nitpicking notes: - Easter is always on a Sunday, not Saturday. Don't worry, you can just say that it is actually a pre-Easter picnic. - You state that Harry's classes ended at 3:30 on Good Friday, but actually, the school should be closed for Easter holidays (spring break to us Americans). - Susan Bones, not Sarah. Sorry if I sound harsh there, but in the end, the good storyline outweighed the errors by far. I wish you luck in the challenge!

Author's Response: Thank you! =D I know about the easter thing...Dunbledore says that since Easter is Sunday why don't we hold the celebration Saturday...=D No you weren't to harsh, actually very nice. Instead of flaming me totally you gave a...review with pointers? =D Thanks




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