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Reviewer: I Love Ginerva Signed
Date: 2021.06.08 - 04:40AM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
So... If Harry is able to treat any attack as life threatening and retaliate with lethal force then his actions on the train were completely justified and snape didn't, legally speaking, have any room to try to expel or press charges against Harry
Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed
Date: 2017.01.30 - 07:42PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
Interesting concept of Harry being a War Mage and the rights and responsibilities of this title. Looking forward to reading how Ginny reacts to Harry over time.
Reviewer: mworth1019 Signed
Date: 2009.04.27 - 10:57PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
Man, Harry is like the terminator and dirty Harry all in one. I am not sure if I like this story or not, but, once I start I normally finish to the end....
Author's Response: It's less about liking the characters, I would suggest, than being interested in finding out why they are so dysfunctional in such key ways. There's a reason it was written in the manner you're reading it, but I'll admit that writing it the way I feel it should be written makes it take a lot longer to fully grok the picture. Cheers.
Reviewer: piltad Signed
Date: 2008.08.18 - 01:50PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
Bravo well done chapter really do enjoy how your writing this that is for sure though will say love this whole idea of a battle mage and really wondering where you got the idea or if you just came up with it on your own either way do think it will really turn the stroy into something else. Always really enjoy when people make Harry powerful like I think he should be.
Author's Response: You've left a whole chain of reviews. I'm going to lump them all together for one response . . .
Reviewer: knightsbridge Signed
Date: 2007.11.22 - 02:39AM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
Now I know where I read this...PS.net. O'll keep it there, just in case SIYE decides to go fown again. I mush prefer this site, and it's fun re-reading this again.
Darian
Author's Response: The big advantage to this site (SIYE) is that you can click the Entire-Story / Printer-or-PDF links at the top right of the chapter, and get the whole thing in one massive file. Makes it much nicer to work with when the sites are flakey. Did you manage to get caught up? Cheers!
Reviewer: Vermouth Signed
Date: 2007.11.08 - 01:04PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
Excellent. Excellent. Well done
Author's Response: And continuing . . .
Reviewer: krpton Signed
Date: 2007.09.30 - 01:03PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
u r a pure writer plz complwete tis fic its fantastic
absolutely stunning
plz dont abandon it
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Next chapter waiting for validation.
Reviewer: Prof McGonagall Signed
Date: 2007.05.07 - 11:06PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
I haven't laughed this hard in a looong time! My favorite line here:
“Well, then again, maybe it is working with Ginny. She’s certainly not angry with you for flirting, whereas she seems downright hostile to me..."
I really enjoyed that Harry pretty much just admitted that he was trying to flirt with Ginny...nice change from so many predictable stories. Since I am assuming this eventually WILL be a H/G story, I can't wait to see how you are going to manage that!
Author's Response: Yes, it will be a H/G story -- when the time is right. It will even happen in Part I of the three part series. Anyway, I'm glad you continued to enjoy the story. I hope to have the next chapter up sometime in the near future. Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts.
Reviewer: crazyredhead Signed
Date: 2007.04.16 - 07:51PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
war mage coooooollllll
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing.
Reviewer: Rocky235 Signed
Date: 2006.09.01 - 08:37PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
Your grammar is and your dialog excellent. Add a fun plot and what more could any reader ask for?
Author's Response: Thanks for reading, and leaving feedback. I've responded to all your reviews based on the last one you left...
Reviewer: Dragen Signed
Date: 2006.08.25 - 04:28PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
So a War Mage, I can't wait to see what happens with that... no wonder that Harry could make fun of Ginny and live to tell about it, I can't wait to see what she dose to him back... spceally after saying she like woman, that means war, and talking about war, I can't wait to see the prank were that's going to happen. Keep up the great work and update soon.
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback. I'm lumping all feedback for you under your last review.
Reviewer: hpf2114 Signed
Date: 2006.06.16 - 08:27AM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
No Review
Reviewer: Ima Quidditch Fan Signed
Date: 2006.06.06 - 11:06AM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
No Review
Reviewer: Treecat Signed
Date: 2006.06.02 - 01:32PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
This is really good! keep updating!
Author's Response: Deja vu?
Reviewer: Treecat Signed
Date: 2006.06.02 - 01:31PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
This is really good! keep updating!
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback.
Reviewer: Breanie Signed
Date: 2006.05.30 - 05:03PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
wow kuthgw!! and update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback. Two great betas have volunteered, so I waited to update until all the first chapters had been worked over as well. Hope it was worth the wait.
Reviewer: Chreechree Signed
Date: 2006.05.29 - 09:23PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
Oh, where do I start? The war mage concept sounds cool, but I’m wondering what Harry was alluding to about what his oath means in the long run. It seemed a bit grim. Like Dumbledore, I remain very curious about his mentors. He had Flamel, and I assume Lupin is one (his initials being on that book seem to reinforce this). Sirius would be with him as well now, but I get the feeling there could be several more (as there are definitely more than two since he said “a couple of you”. His letter “home” cracked me up with his remarks about selling pictures from his monitor. Of course, there were lots of fun moments, such as his antagonizing Ginny and Lavender, the knowledge he’s going to get it, and the terms of the twins’ surrender. I’m also curious about Harry’s conversations with Floppy about the sorting and founders. I look forward to all these things unfolding.
Also, I wanted to respond to your response from my last review. I was discussing this with a friend who has read your story. She wondered at the level of Harry’s knowledge and maturity. I responded very inarticulately that with the proper preparation and training that he could exhibit that level of confidence, etc. I like the way you put it much better. Remove Harry’s confusion and lack of direction, and see the person you have left because, yes, Harry has never been a wimp. Well said and very well done!
Author's Response: Ah, the oath. Life as a War Mage will have many long-term repercussions that will be revealed over time, as will more details on the mentors, prophecies, Floppy talk, and the usual hints that are left. Admittedly, some are rather subtle, and others are about as subtle as an air horn for an alarm clock, but...
You know, it's funny sometimes. I've known (and worked for) people over the age of 40 that I thought should have never made it out of high school. Their lack of maturity and plain inability to comprehend the world around them was so complete that to this day I am still baffled at how they ever got anywhere in life. By the same token, I've known twelve year olds that could hang comfortably with some university professors and did so in my presence.
Maturity is partially a measure of years, but to me is much more a measure of experience and the ability to internalize the lessons of those experiences.
For the Simponson's fans out there, the "Is my brother smarter than a hamster?" experiment shows a lot of very funny but deep insight. I'm glad the way I expressed the paradox helped you with your discussion. Trust me on this -- everyone is inarticulate. We all just have moments of coherence between the long bouts of confusion. (Now if that comment wasn't over the top...)
Reviewer: WaterLily Signed
Date: 2006.05.29 - 04:32PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
i like it! And i don't think you really desperately need a beta as far as ideas and grammar are concerned,,,just make sure you check your spelling and Canon spellings especially...
I look forward to more!
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback. It's funny how now being an author is making me more likely to leave feedback to others. Weird, that. If you catch any mistakes in spelling compared to canon, please do point them out. If no one tells me, I don't know. I've been looking for a dictionary plug-in, and have heard rumors of them, but can't seem to find the right google terms to land one. Any pointers?
Reviewer: murgel Signed
Date: 2006.05.29 - 02:37PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
Oh, I realy do not mind the length. It feelt quite appropreate.!
I realy like what you have done and am ´waitingfor more. Especially the slow and artriculate prepaerations you are doing with the H/G setting are very promising.
Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying it. Being posted on this site, you know that H/G will occur at some point. But there is no such thing as love at first sight. Other "L" words, yes, love, no. So I hope no one expects them to leap on each other and declare undying love coupled with an immortal soul bond that gives them vast new powers and reserves of knowledge that make Merlin look like a crack addict middle school drop out. (This is my sarcasm kicking in, just in case it wasn't obvious.) I'll just step off my soap box now. Yes, it is coming, but patience will be important.
Reviewer: harry 4Eyes Signed
Date: 2006.05.29 - 02:30PM
Title: Chapter 3: Declarations
Well personally it doesn't look like you need a beta....well everyone needs a beta but you are doing pretty well for someone without one.
I like this story, certainly original, reminds me of Jeconais's fic 'aftermath' only Harry has not defeated Voldie yet and also he has a better sense of humour than that version. but the idea of Harry being raised as a warrior is there but otherwise completely different.
I won't say much about the mentors, it sounds like if was Flamel and Remus with Sirius added later...might have more but not certain.
Whoa allot of Prophosy's you got there, the 2nd one has me intriguid, whonder who the flame lass is.
The last one is obviously referring to Harry and not Voldie, sounds like he has a choice to make, one of letting friend and love in and fight for that love or fight using hatred that will in end destroy him...but that's my take, could be wrong as I so often am.
Well love this so far
Update Soon
Harry
Author's Response: I'm glad you are enjoying the story. I did read Jeconais' abandoned Aftermath story a long time ago, and there were a couple of spin-offs that were tried by others. The only one that stuck with me as decent was Learning to Breathe, over at ff.net... I think that pretty much any Harry-can-fight is going to make people think of stories like that. It's an inevitable comparison.
That said, Harry here is not a warrior trained from birth. There are very sharp boundaries on what he can and cannot do. Anyone who has trained intensely in the martial arts (any style) for more than about four years will understand what those limits are. Many authors seem to like to write butt-kicking-Harry but have no clue how the body, and more importantly, fighting the body really work. I hope to avoid that here, since I know I spent enough of my life training weapons and empty hand.
As for your other comments... this is a classic Read And Find Out situation. Is any prophecy ever as simple as it seems on the surface? And, according to HBP, not all come to pass and those that are marginally correct are still optional to the participants. Doesn't that make it fun?
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