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Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2017.02.02 - 06:26AM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
Very interesting dinner party at Harry's house. He certainly has been surrounded by fascinating mentors for many years now.
Reviewer: piltad Signed Date: 2008.08.20 - 04:23AM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
Very good chapter really like Harry's group he has and love the story of how he got to David since it always drove me crazy that in Cannon he never got picked up by Social Services I mean even in cannon he was abused. Though I will say was displeased that you didn't tell us what he did with Umbridge.
Author's Response: You've left a whole chain of reviews. I'm going to lump them all together for one response . . .
Reviewer: The Seeker Signed Date: 2007.05.24 - 08:41PM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
This chapter provided some needed context with Harry's previous or other "life" -- his foster family and his mentors. I was glad to see that the problem wasn't so much the mentors, but with a 15-year old boy, who is being placed in a very challenging and fluid situation. Again, your plot machinations are impressive.
Have to comment on the mentors: a muggle (father), a werewolf, a goblin, a vampire, and an animagus escaped convict. Sounds like your usual advisory board. It's a jolt to think of Remus and Sirius on opposite sides -- a least at this point -- from DD, but it seems that may moderate from its current position.
It's quite uncomfortable to have Harry virtually be an island unto himself at Hogwarts, since, in canon, he almost always had Ron, Hermione, and DD for support, as well as Ginny, Neville, Luna, and the Twins to lesser degrees. You are creating a distinct universe, but it makes for a very edgy feeling at this point. I hope something develops support-wise so Harry isn't confronting everyone all the time.
You're creating a very intense environment that draws the reader in, since it is so different from canon and we want to find out what this very different Harry does. Very impressive! -- Jim
Author's Response: I've moved all your comments (PM and here) into one long review.
Reviewer: Wooster Signed Date: 2006.09.18 - 08:06PM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
For this chapter, I was enamored of your original characters - Harry's gang of mentors are truly excellent - thrilled that you kept the muggle foster father - I rather liked him - and ecstatic that your views of golf (or at least Harry's) so closely parallel my own. Great chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and leaving feedback...
Reviewer: Rocky235 Signed Date: 2006.09.02 - 11:52AM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
You and your betas are doing a good job with grammar and typos.
I thought I'd seen all the best stories, then bingo, here you are.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading, and leaving feedback. I've responded to all your reviews based on the last one you left...
Reviewer: aprilmoon92 Signed Date: 2006.08.08 - 02:10PM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
Really new perspective into the Potterverse, I'm enjoying this story greatly so far. Rock on... although I hope he resolves the situation w/ ginny soon, eh?
Author's Response: Thanks for leaving feedback. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. The next chapter is just pending validation, so hopefully you''ll get your next installment quickly.
To resolve the situation with Ginny is a bit of a problem. On the one hand, the situation and his understanding of it is unclear. On the other hand, it's still very recent in everyone's mind. Bear this in mind over the next few chapters... there won't be pointless angst, since I loathe that, but it also won't all be magically fixed in one short talk...
Reviewer: ginnypotterforever Signed Date: 2006.07.29 - 11:07AM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
OH WOW. This is probably the BEST fic I've ever read. GREAT STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!! Can't wait for the update!
Author's Response: Thanks for the feebdack. For the record, I'm back from travels, and am playing catch-up at work and in life. I'm hoping my betas have free time, since I'm about to bury them in material. Stay tuned!
Reviewer: Roxy Signed Date: 2006.07.18 - 01:12AM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
Great work! I really became hooked with your story earlier today and just couldn't stop! You've got some great ideas working. I can't believe Harry is so anygry all the time, but having Sirius's presence around, I could see how his personality would be different from canon Harry. I also like your Ginny. She's the way I would like JKR to portray her own. She doesn't give us much detail about her Ginny, which I don't like. I think you're doing a great job with it. Can't wait for another update!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading, and for leaving feedback. Harry's mind set is that way for a reason. Many of those details are forthcoming, but yes - the AU premise makes Harry rather different from canon. I'm also glad people seem to react well to this Ginny as a character. She's hard to write well, but this AU has a few things that modify her that have yet to see the light of day... making it challenging to keep everyone on their toes, as it were. Thanks for the feedback.
Reviewer: nevascared Signed Date: 2006.07.17 - 10:36AM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
damn that sucks! i like this story
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it. Sorry the update is going to take another week, but hopefully you'll find it's worth the wait. Please bear with us, it's only temporary!
Reviewer: Treecat Signed Date: 2006.07.16 - 02:22PM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
I volunteer for Britpicking work, as a Londoner. How does it work?
Treecat
Author's Response: Thanks for volunteering. I'll be in touch soon!
Reviewer: KEDme Signed Date: 2006.07.16 - 11:04AM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
I picked up your story tonight and spent several enjoyable hours emercing myself in your universe. While Harry's personality at first was hard to get used to (he seemed cold, heartless, unconcerned for others' feelings, etc.) I liked the changes in him as the story progressed. I also like his interactions with Ginny and her personality, and I liked the blossoming relationship forming there. The prank war, to me, seems pointless. There are so many more important thing to consider. And I miss Ron. Hermione has had more screen time, but I find myself really missing the trio moments. Fred and George just can't compete. Bringing Ginny into 5th year was brilliant, and I loved Neville's bravery in the last chapter. Here's hoping that things start to look up soon for Harry and that he gets Umbridge fired quickly. But I suppose Harry needs someone to fight. You've disposed of quite a lot of the oposition already. I also liked Harry's new family and how they all seem to take care of him. Too bad canon-Harry never had that. Hopefully your Harry calms down a bit and starts to mature. I just hope the hat doesn't sort him into Slytherin, lol, when it's all said and done. You wouldn't do that, right? Looking forward to your next update. ~K~
Author's Response: First and foremost, thanks for taking the time to read. I know that as an author, your time is pretty limited, so... whether you continue to follow or not, thanks. And thanks for the thoughtful review...
The great thing about your review is that I can't officially respond to it in many ways. Which means you're asking or thinking about some great things. The contrast between Ch1 and the most current chapter I hope is quite apparent in how Harry is mentally. Does he know how to fight? Yes. Does he know how to use magic? Yes. But does he know how to deal with the life he's living? He's definitely a loose cannon at this point.
The prank war does, in fact, have a purpose. It's a bit silly on the surface, of course, but... I don't like to do things for just one reason. There can be no "trio" moments, unfortunately. The premise of the AU won't allow that to form. However, you can expect something much like the trio, simply with a different number than 3, to be formed over time. The really frustrating part is that we're 70k words in, and only a few days have elapsed. So developments with Ron, for example, which will still need some critical events to form, are not easily seen yet.
As for the opposition... they may be off the screen... but that just makes it more fun when things happen, now doesn't it? Keep your friends close...
As for the rest, I provide my standard disclaimer: Whistling Innocently.
Reviewer: Treecat Signed Date: 2006.07.13 - 02:18AM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
Tis good, I like Edgar, keep updating!
Treecat
Author's Response: I'm glad Edgar has turned out to be a popular character... he has some fun lessons and history to reveal.
Reviewer: GWeasley Anonymous Date: 2006.07.13 - 12:18AM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
As always a great chapter with much to make us think :)
I loved the Vampire joke and the whoe golf thought (I soo agree with that)
Have fun on your trips and I can't wait to read the next chapter :)
Author's Response: I'm glad you're still reading, and the level of reader mental involvement isn't turning the core people away. Edgar is (hopefully) going to be a lot of fun to work with.
Thanks for continuing to stick with it.
Reviewer: witowsmp Signed Date: 2006.07.13 - 12:13AM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
Interesting background! I can't wait for the next chapter! I hope Harry and Ginny talk some more!
Author's Response: The next chapter will bring about some more Weasley interactions... but the scene most people are probably waiting for happen very soon...
Reviewer: Breanie Signed Date: 2006.07.12 - 11:04PM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
this was definitly my favourite chapter yet - the relationship with remus and sirius is just brill!! kuthgw!!
Author's Response: I'm glad you're still enjoying things. It's a complex dynamic between Harry and his mentors.... and it takes me a while to work out the nuances in writing. Sorry it slowed down that chapter.
Thanks for sticking with me.
Reviewer: Sovran Signed Date: 2006.07.12 - 10:29PM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
That was fun. Actually fun. For a no-action chapter, that's a big accomplishment.
How does it go? "Empty chairs at empty tables," isn't it?
I very much like the idea of Harry having a father figure that is not Remus, Sirius, or Albus. I look forward to his role, even if it's just peripheral (I'm not saying I think it will be).
Finally admitting things, are we? It's good for the soul, you know. The soul is important. You can't have anything without soul, and if you damage your soul, it may not grow back.
Well done, per usual.
Author's Response: Action without action, plans without plans, and bodies without souls. Very complicated, sometimes.
It's not so much empty chairs as musical, and where the secret guest is...
My soul is incapable of admissions in and of itself. Properly applied with beta pressure, however, it's been known to look the other way as details get slipped in. But damaging a soul is nothing something to be sold lightly.
Reviewer: hpf2114 Signed Date: 2006.07.12 - 10:28PM Title: Chapter 11: ... and Perspective
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