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Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2017.02.05 - 08:55AM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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Curious why Harry has not pressed Ginny more specifically about her problems. He really needs to know what is going on with her, especially if, as I suspect, it relates to all of them generally.



Reviewer: hpf2114 Signed Date: 2009.02.14 - 05:48PM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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Reviewer: marinepotterfan Signed Date: 2009.01.18 - 11:15AM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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I have enjoyed reading this stoy, I hope you update soon.

Thanks for Writing
MPF

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. It's been a long time, I know, but the next chapter will be going up within a few days.



Reviewer: Aragorn Signed Date: 2008.09.26 - 05:08PM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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This is a great story...which makes the long wait increaingly frustrating. If it were more ordinary, few would care.

Nevertheless, I appreciate the time, effort and dedication such a creative endevor entails...and hope that you find the inspiration, stamina and time to bring it to full fruition.

Many blessings...and good luck....

Author's Response: I do feel guilt about the delay. It's been a long year for me, with a lot of events in life going on. That said, the next chapter is in the proof-reading final beta stage, and should be going live in a few short days. I keep a running status on MetaFic (check my author page for the link), if you want a more detailed view of things. Thanks for being patient, I know it's been frustrating to everyone. And it's been frustrating to me, as the author, for not having the time to get the next chapter out.



Reviewer: piltad Signed Date: 2008.08.25 - 01:39AM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

Well I don't quite who to blame with the prank I think he has it wrong and that it is actually Ginny but we shall see hopefully you get more time on your hands to updaate this more often and you don't let it die like alot of good authors do.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. It's been a long time, I know, but the next chapter will be going up within a few days.



Reviewer: HGRHfan35 Signed Date: 2008.08.07 - 01:16PM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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Let's start by saying I love this story and it 's on the fav list for sure.
Just a few remarks from my part if you don't mind.
Sometimes the dry theory in this story makes me yawn and I do have to say I do read it. It's important to the story but I'll read it in the morning, fresh out of bed so I'm fresh and the brain is willing to contain information. lol
I love the humor in this story. It's quite dry and british and that's my style completely.
Remus's letter at the end is dated 15 sept 2007? Are we skipping 10 years or did I miss something here. Think I must because no one else in the reviews has commented on it I think.

Thank you very much for your wonderfull story and I do sincerly hope you didn't mind the comments but I like to leave reviews that state more than amazing or fantastic although those words do apply to your story for sure.

Untill next time, Thanx. C

Author's Response: I can appreciate you struggling with the theory aspects. A lot of readers do. At the same time, I believe it's important to show that you can actually put logical (to a point) boundaries on what magic is, how it behaves, and then use it appropriately. So many authors just hand-wave, and the magic becomes a Deus Ex Machina tool, rather than an integral aspect to the story. I could write the theory in a more fun/engaging way, but then it wouldn't feel like a textbook -- and I'd feel obligated to work it into a chapter as dialog of explanation. The textbook approach may be dry, but given how long the chapters are, I thought it was a much safer and simpler method. Sorry for that. You're not alone in the frustration on those parts. Good catch on the letter. I need to fix that. Obviously I shared the error with my beta team (which isn't small), and we all had egg on our faces for that slip. Mea culpa maxima. Thanks for reading and reviewing. It's been a long time, I know, but the next chapter will be going up within a few days.



Reviewer: wingnut1974 Signed Date: 2008.07.09 - 10:06PM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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Great Story. Can't wait for more!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. It's been a long time, I know, but the next chapter will be going up within a few days.



Reviewer: lkc159 Signed Date: 2008.07.01 - 08:50AM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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Reviewer: BioHazard82 Signed Date: 2008.04.04 - 11:23PM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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Great story so far. Can't wait to read more in the future!

As to the 'I love Harry Potter' thing, is it water thats setting it off? Seems so to me.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. It's been a long time, I know, but the next chapter will be going up within a few days. That's a good guess on the prank source, btw. Time will reveal how well you did :)



Reviewer: hms42 Signed Date: 2008.03.24 - 12:03AM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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Reviewer: Paulovna Signed Date: 2008.03.03 - 07:56PM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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I enjoyed it immensely - you've done an awesome job of creating an AU. now just use it! as this was part I, i _assume_ there will be a part II emerging eventually..... please?????

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. It's been a long time, I know, but the next chapter will be going up within a few days. And yes, there will be more parts -- this is 1 of 3. Cheers.



Reviewer: thrushwolf Signed Date: 2008.01.27 - 11:45AM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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Alright, i don't usually review stories i read here but i felt compelled to do so because it has been a very long time (and a lot of reading) since i have been this engorged in a story. First of all i applaud you on intellectually stimulating me. Most of the stories i have read are good, but they fail to go into any sort of depth such as the kind you have woven around your story here. I love how you are not portraying Harry as a weak-minded depressed kid like so many people love to do, and instead took his character and made it something different.
My only suggestion for this particular story would be not to lose track of your characters. There are times when reading when i get the feeling that Harry is less than human (as in he is always in tight reign of his emotions which is admirable, but almost inhuman)
And the ONE thing that i would ask that you would change if at ALL possible is to give Ginny/Harry a bit more attention! I was eagerly awaiting a romantic development between them, but it is very drawn out in your story i feel. Granted your story is more content driven (which is awesome don't get me wrong! I would just love to see it mix a bit) but if you could possibly give them a bit more attention that would be an amazing compliment i feel.
Cheers, and do keep the chapters coming if you can.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. It's been a long time, I know, but the next chapter will be going up within a few days. You raised a lot of issues in your review, so let me hit a few of them to help you out a bit. First, remember that in story-time, it's been roughly three weeks for the characters. In that time, you've had battles, Riddle, character assassinations, abuse of power, and much, much more. Things are a little too new and volatile for the H/G dynamic to form and run away. It's coming. And the timeline in the story is moving faster, too. But think about it this way - you spent roughly 400k words in canon getting to the point of Book 5. By that time, you had built up huge bases of information about the characters, their lives, and everything around them. Here, you're starting from zero, where the names are the same but the characters are all different -- large or small differences, but different -- from canon. So I had to burn almost 250k words getting the scene laid out, and it's still unfolding in dimensions. This is the issue of Part I to the story. By the end of Part I, many questions will be answered, but a lot more will be asked. However, the setting is mostly in place, and I don't need the miles of background information . . . just a few hundred yards or so. I'll try to keep the characters that are salient in place, and when I can skip a bit with background on others, I will. Just to keep it tractable. Look at the half-treatment Floppy gets, and he's instrumental to the story. You're right, it's a lot of characters to keep track of, but I find the hard part isn't keeping track of them . . . it's keeping them in the story while the narrative remains tractable. Thanks again. Cheers!



Reviewer: knightsbridge Signed Date: 2008.01.21 - 06:38AM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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Okay, finally caught up. I honestly don't this the name "moshpit" puts anyonyone off. Personally I would opt fot than name rather than some childish HP character name...and there have been some PIPS.
I suppose what I like most about this story is that it's wrtten in adult language (I fear many an Oxford English Dictionary were in use while reading this. If I were a girl, I would be doing a happy dance, just to see kids learning something!), Now, I get to ask a question: Where is floppy during the battles? Kind of hard to go round with a silly looking hat on, during a battle, unless you want the enemy to laugh themselves to death and save you the trouble.
I have told a lot of people about this story, including Abraxon, who really doesn't read much other than other FanFiction Authors.
She wanted something short and a bit of a giggle, so I hope you don't mind...I told her about Cel's "The Right Time."
Sonce I have you on Story and Author Alert, they will let me know when thie next chaper is up.
BTW, I have no problem with you rewriting canon, Jo left a lot out, as you pointed out.
Till next time,
Darian

Author's Response: The author name comes up every now and then, but it goes way back for me. I spent enough time in the pit, it's home away from home. The fact that readers may need a dictionary is a plus in my opinion -- heck, half the fun in writing is finding the right word, or slipping in a usage that people don't expect. The other half is just weaving a tale of threads that interlink but you can't quite figure out what the picture is until the last thread is placed. Floppy is around in battles and other places, though he learned after the first one that being a typical hat is a bad idea. That's why he takes other shapes more routinely with Harry. Thanks for reading and reviewing. It's been a long time, I know, but the next chapter will be going up within a few days.



Reviewer: cheetahyoda Signed Date: 2008.01.19 - 08:40PM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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good chapter update soon please! 9/10.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. It's been a long time, I know, but the next chapter will be going up within a few days.



Reviewer: brad Signed Date: 2008.01.15 - 09:13PM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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Okay. We still don't know who's pranked Harry with the magical lemmings, right? Although the chief suspect is Molly Weasley. Looks like that's one that's gotten past Harry's defences.

Enjoyed very much Hermione's scientific approach to locating Harry's Fidelius-protected quarters. HATED Ginny's being able to 'sense' him, and surprised he didn't ask straight how how she did whatever she did. Please please please don't let it have been a case of a 'bond' or 'connection' between them. You wouldn't do that to us, would you? That tracking charm he found? Yeah, that must be it. Whew.

I've obviously forgotten things from the previous chapters; had Harry's ability to apparate around Hogwarts been addressed before? 'Cause it surprised me too, as well as Hermione. Loved the brief appearance of the suit of armor. :-)

Riddle's communique was chilling, and Harry's response to what it portended, his reorganisation of his training of the others, Ginny's panic, was all very effecting in winding up the tension.

Lots of things happening in this story; this tale is a prime candidate for a prompt re-read once it's finished (or maybe even before).

Author's Response: Ahh, the lemming caper. That will be as clear as mud at midnight by the time you finish Ch28. Which is as it should be. Other stories give answers, so I feel almost compelled to give questions. Is that evil of me?

Now, Ginny sensing Harry has nothing to do with bond, connection, or any other fanfic cliche. Have no fears. In fact, I don't think anyone has ever taken this kind of approach to the situation before in the same way, though there are similar things out there in places using other terms or labels. Here's a hint: it's not Harry-centric. And no, Ginny's not stalking him with tracking charms. Other people are. Nudge nudge, hint hint.

Now that said, the Apparating thing -- I really don't see why people haven't figured this out yet. JKR did it in canon, even! She just didn't follow the logic to the conclusion. (Well, assuming she was using logic, and not just making something convenient for a moment.) As for the rest . . . I am eagerly anticipating your thoughts post Ch28. Which is, erm, long. Cheers.



Reviewer: ssariesen Signed Date: 2008.01.15 - 05:50PM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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Reviewer: slickrcbd Signed Date: 2008.01.15 - 05:22PM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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I read this chapter when you posted it on PhoenixSong, and am wondering why you keep reposting it several times a day to SIYE? Or is SIYE just malfunctioning and sending me several alerts a day with no action on your part?

I don't have much of a review to write. I enjoyed the chapter, and thought it was a good piece of writing. Nice work.

Author's Response: Sorry, you got caught in a massive code malfunction of the SIYE system. When stories reached a certain level of "Favorite" status among readers, the email notification system took too long to process the list. It kept resetting itself, and starting again. This was compounded by the way chapters are validated for posting here at SIYE, too. When the archivist validates it, it tries to run the update scripts. Since the script timed out, and it failed to validate, the archivist would try again - and again - and again - and . . . you get the idea. Then other archivists would try to see if it would work for them. It took one of the techs a while to figure out what the problem was, and they had to rewrite the backend a bit. Sovran's MOO series also had the same problem. I guess there are drawbacks to being popular. Anyway. Thanks for reading and reviewing. It's been a long time, I know, but the next chapter will be going up within a few days.



Reviewer: ravenclawchaser68 Signed Date: 2008.01.14 - 12:30PM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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I just got caught up on the last couple chapters of this, and I really enjoyed them. The ongoing prank against Harry is intriguing, given the limited access to his rooms. He thinks it's Mrs. Weasley, but I'm wondering if maybe Hermione might have enlisted the house-elves to help. Although if they still hate her for SPEW i suppose that wouldn't work.

Overall, there's a lot of tension in this story, which makes it hard to stop reading. I'm dying to know what's going on with Ginny, and then of course there's the minor matter of Voldemort. Great work so far. Thanks for writing,
Jay

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. It's been a long time, I know, but the next chapter will be going up within a few days.



Reviewer: rahat5810 Signed Date: 2008.01.14 - 04:46AM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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Very good action. Good plot. Too much complex. Too long story. But all in all a good story. I am curious that after 27 looooong chapters you have covered only a few weeks of Harry's fifth year. How long it will take you to complete this story let alone other parts?

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing. It's been a long time, I know, but the next chapter will be going up within a few days. How long will the story be? As long as it needs to, really. It spans three parts, of which the first is the most complicated and lengthy. I keep a sort of commentary on it at MetaFic, along with a "where the story is at" note from time to time. Part I is close to being over, relative to how many chapters it took to get things rolling properly.



Reviewer: _kb_ Signed Date: 2008.01.13 - 09:08PM Title: Chapter 27: Ashes

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Uh, I vote for Luna doing the prank on Harry; I would find that very funny for some reason. :-) I also like they way you write Luna in this story. There's something about her "weird seriousness" that I find fascinating. Another interesting chapter, despite the fact that you are still just dribbling the clues about Ginny out. I guess we'll just have to wait for that 1 chapter down the road where you finally reveal all. :-) Kevin

Author's Response: Luna? Now that's something no one has suggested previously. You know, it's amusing to me how many people want the answers to Ginny handed over, immediately, and no more gimmicks. Would it help to know you'll get more hints in Ch28 (due in a few days)? Or would it help to know you'll get a big chunk of the story in just a few chapters? Luna's fun to write, and fun to try to think like. It really can give me a headache sometimes, but usually I find if I just let my own sense of humor run wild, I can write what I want to say in a truly outlandish manner that just screams "Luna!" at me. Glad it works for you, since you're stuck with reading it. Cheers!




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