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Reviewer: hpf2114 Signed
Date: 2009.04.10 - 11:16AM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
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Reviewer: piltad Signed
Date: 2008.06.09 - 01:04PM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
Hmm well Daphne has had some horrible things happen to her that is for sure.
Reviewer: wave Signed
Date: 2008.05.16 - 11:53PM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
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Reviewer: Vermouth Signed
Date: 2007.11.12 - 05:34PM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
Phew, terrifying chapter. Well done
Reviewer: CodeRomance Signed
Date: 2007.09.22 - 08:27AM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
i hope harry will be ok...this is very nerve recking! argg
CodeRomance
Reviewer: leia Anonymous
Date: 2006.05.30 - 12:07AM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
well,well,well, whaterever did snape do? update soon
Reviewer: kokopelli Signed
Date: 2006.05.29 - 10:40PM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
I have been following this story with pleasure. If you want me to proof your stories before posting, drop me a line. You have a good sense of character and narrative, important in an AU piece. Keep writing, I'll keep reading.
Reviewer: Qt4167013 Signed
Date: 2006.05.29 - 06:15PM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
Whew that was intense! A brilliant start though. Can't wait for Harry to wake up. Loved the bit with sirius, all perfectly in character too! I like how your incorporating characters earlier than they were introduced in the books. Excited for Ginny to make an appearance too. Looking forward to the next part! (snape in love with Lily? hm i like it!)
Reviewer: CruciareMors Anonymous
Date: 2006.05.29 - 04:16PM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
Approved.
I particularly liked the background information on the war against Grindelwald and the way it interwined with WWII. You had already touched the subject, but it is nicely to see that you have everything thought out about the world you built for your story. Thumbs up!
Now, Minerva and Daphne... two very different ladies, two different stories. Minerva lost a lover to the war, even if she knew it would not work, but still, it hurts. That description about the way Dumbledore used to vanquish Grindelwald was very in-character too - it seems like the kind of spell he would use, instead of the AK. Also, that thing about Muggles fighting Muggles and Wizards fighting Wizards until Voldemort decided he wanted a bit more of mess was very good.
Back to the ladies. Daphne. That scene was powerful, congratulations. Of course, only something brutal could drive someone considered normal down such a road of revenge. Somwthing tells me she still wants to avenge her parents and brother's deaths, that anything she does will feel like it's not good enough, for she could not save any of the ones she wanted to save - and that may be the end of her. Just a thought.
"You know, you’re really boring when you’re in a coma, Harry. Wake up soon for your big sis, okay?" - now, that's what I call ironic humour. I guess Tonks will never change... *sigh*
That hurt... "He's not the son of James Potter" - I'm just so used to having Harry have a special relationship with his parents that I feel something's missing, even with Daphne there. Also, hum, what could be so horrific? What did Snape do to Lily? That was a rethorical question, I don't really want you to answer it, but still, I'm intrigued... and I love feeling intrigued ;)
Anyway, update ASAP! Take care!
Author's Response: No, Tonks really hasn't changed that much. That said, you saw really very little of her character in canon.
As for the relationship between Harry and his parents, it's an interesting question. But personality is not passed down through genetics. Even canon Harry is nothing like James Potter at his age. But GM Harry is such a radical departure, it actually makes Snape think twice about his old prejudice.
Reviewer: Tron Signed
Date: 2006.05.29 - 03:46PM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
Wow! A peak into the past of Daphne Dressler. Now we have a better idea of what makes her the way she is.
What did Snape do to Lily?!?! It must have been horrible if Remus and Harry would go after him. If it is what I think it is, Snape would deserve it.
Great chapter. You presented a chapter full of angst and horror with a nice dose of despair. The writing was well done.
I hope you have Harry wake up soon, even if he isn't completely healed. Also, I hope you have Ginny and Hermione figure out a way of getting to him. You could have Ginny go stay with Hermione and they would then go visit with Harry together. I can just picture stubborn Ginny refusing to go to Egypt (if that is going to happen in this story) because of the way her brothers view Harry.
Oh well, please update soon!
Reviewer: Horus Signed
Date: 2006.05.29 - 12:08PM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
love your series so far. I really hope we can get back to Harry's POV soon because im really curious to see whats going on in his head.
Reviewer: nevascared Signed
Date: 2006.05.29 - 11:19AM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
plz hurry up and finish
Reviewer: LolaPotter Signed
Date: 2006.05.29 - 04:28AM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
more secrets and harry didn´t wake up... argh! but good!
Reviewer: EmeraldFire Anonymous
Date: 2006.05.29 - 03:48AM
Title: Chapter 1: Atonement
Its sickening what people are capable of doing to others, Its amazing that Daphne has gone through all that and is still sane. Im pretty certain that most people would have lost the will to live after loosing as much as she has. Looking forward to more, including finding out how Harry is after waking :)
Author's Response: Daphne had friends to support her, to keep her going. However, the remainder of her life is to be driven by two things: Harry and Revenge. And trust me, she hasn't given up yet.
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