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Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2012.01.29 - 04:32PM Title: Return To Diagon Alley

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Clever Harry. Got the Phoenix for free! I'm really enjoying this story.



Reviewer: foxfire23 Signed Date: 2010.12.27 - 08:21PM Title: Return To Diagon Alley

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Reviewer: mworth1019 Signed Date: 2010.12.19 - 10:43PM Title: Return To Diagon Alley

a bit too trite dont you think??? Nice but a bit much.. will keep at it though...



Reviewer: Larry Signed Date: 2008.10.09 - 11:54AM Title: Return To Diagon Alley

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I'm glad to see Sirius and Harry getting their wish to be together. Harry was cheated out of his God Father in other stories and this makes a nice change. Great read.



Reviewer: Kingslee Signed Date: 2007.09.19 - 01:32PM Title: Return To Diagon Alley

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I like your characterization of Sirius it seem to fit nicely with the book version. I was surprised by the appearance of the Phoenix. I'm glad to see that you included Ginny crush on Harry.



Reviewer: Cole Signed Date: 2006.09.05 - 05:04PM Title: Return To Diagon Alley

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I am enjoying the story overall, it has a nice flow to it, but I recommend that you get a beta reader, I'm seeing a lot of grammatical errors and places in which you use the wrong word, where it's obvious as to which word you were shooting for, but you used one that sounded like it, but wasn't quite right, and therefore doesn't make sense as written. Also be careful not to make Harry too powerful, I've read a lot of stories where Harry is now super harry, and nothing is a challenge anymore, that gets boring after awhile. It's okay to give Harry more abilities than we've seen him with before, and even build upon them, but try to stay away from making him invincible.



Reviewer: joes915 Signed Date: 2006.08.23 - 06:58PM Title: Return To Diagon Alley

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i liked the snakes being divided over voldemort as well since he is a parseltongue. its a funny thing that i never really thought of before.



Reviewer: Baby_Huey Signed Date: 2006.08.23 - 01:58PM Title: Return To Diagon Alley

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I really enjoy your story. However, you have managed to hit one of my pet peves. please learn the diference between there and their.

there?
–adverb
1. in or at that place (opposed to here): She is there now.
2. at that point in an action, speech, etc.: He stopped there for applause.
3. in that matter, particular, or respect: His anger was justified there.
4. into or to that place; thither: We went there last year.
5. (used by way of calling attention to something or someone): There they go.
6. in or at that place where you are: Well, hi there.
–pronoun
7. (used to introduce a sentence or clause in which the verb comes before its subject or has no complement): There is no hope.
8. that place: He comes from there, too.
9. that point.
–noun
10. that state or condition: I'll introduce you to her, but you're on your own from there on.
–adjective
11. (used for emphasis, esp. after a noun modified by a demonstrative adjective): Ask that man there.
–interjection
12. (used to express satisfaction, relief, encouragement, approval, consolation, etc.): There! It's done.

their?
–pronoun
1. a form of the possessive case of they used as an attributive adjective, before a noun: their home; their rights as citizens; their departure for Rome.
2. (used after an indefinite singular antecedent in place of the definite masculine form his or the definite feminine form her): Someone left their book on the table. Did everyone bring their lunch?

Author's Response: i actually do know the difference. maybe my beta reader is changing it and dont know the difference or that im just not concience of it.. i will look out for it in the future. wither wya by beta reader is doing a sucky job :P j/k mark i like you beta readign it. :) (just in case he reads this)



Reviewer: hpf2114 Signed Date: 2006.08.22 - 08:42PM Title: Return To Diagon Alley

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Reviewer: Dragen Signed Date: 2006.08.22 - 06:39PM Title: Return To Diagon Alley

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Great chapter, Harry has got three pets now, a snake, a phoenix and a owl, I love the story and how it is going... keep up the great work... I just hope Harry tells Ginny soon.




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