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Reviewer: knightsbridge Signed Date: 2007.05.24 - 12:28AM Title: Chapter 2 Dreaming of Air
I've read your great, insightful reviews...but this is (Ithink ) the second story of yours I've read, nad it probably ttoo old for you to read comments.
The one thing I've sorely missed in the movies is the Hogwart's Express visitations by Malfoy and group. Granted, this one wasn't as funny as most in the books...but the boy just never learns.
My opinion of Dumbledore, after the third book, seems to be about what Harry's is in your story...Wind up your little weapon, and let him kill Voldemort...in the meantime let Malfoy have a go at him...for what? Practice?
Author's Response: i agree with you. i'm torn up with dumbeldore. i love him but he is what he is...a master manipulator. he wants harry to be as normal a teenager but he allows so many things to happen to him too. it's pretty psychotic if you think about it.
and yeah, the train scenes are the best especially the one where harry, ron, hermione, and even fred & george hit him with different spells at the same time. priceless!!!
thanks for the review...i know there are a bunch of spelling and grammar mistakes but it was my first story posted and i decided to leave it that way so i can see how much i've progressed.
carolyn
Reviewer: Spenser Hemmingway Signed Date: 2006.11.05 - 10:05AM Title: Chapter 2 Dreaming of Air
A green tail flugglestork? I thought that they were extinct. The dream that you employed was good, and naturally it has me thinking and asking all manner of questions, which of course includes "What did Malfoy do?" You need to be careful with your paragraph spacing in places. It is a common problem, and hardly life threatening though. The story is progressing nicely, and I can see how it is going to lead into the duel. Thanks. Eric B.
Author's Response: it's a common misconception that the green tail flugglestork is extinct and i think it's because people confuse them with their cousins, the blue tooth whumplestork.
Reviewer: Keira Azul Signed Date: 2006.11.02 - 12:08AM Title: Chapter 2 Dreaming of Air
Wooh, buddy, this is one loooooong challenge entry! I'm trying to read them all by the 15th, but if there are any more like this it will be a challenge in and of itself.:) I thought that sealed door was very interesting - you did a really good job on describing Harry's struggle for conciousness. Very interesting so far, and I'll keep you posted as I continue. Good luck!
Author's Response: hi! thanks for the review. i feel honored that you would even read my story because i've read yours and mine does not even come close! i enjoyed writing this story and i know that there is at least 1 contradiction in my story but i'll fix that at a later date.
but thanks so much for dropping a note. it gives me the courage to try writing something else.
oh yes, good luck to you. a few of my friends have read your story and they've loved it like i did!
carolyn
Reviewer: Tron Signed Date: 2006.11.01 - 11:39AM Title: Chapter 2 Dreaming of Air
Another good chapter. Good drama with the lack of oxygen.
Harry is right about how Dumbledore would treat the attack. Malfoy got away with so much during the six years he was at Hogwarts.
On to the next chapter! I'm glad they were finally validated so I could read them!
