Reviews For What Hurts The Most
Reviewer: KateriBella Signed Date: 2007.12.03 - 10:30PM Title: What Hurts The Most
I agree with lecook4 -- it just stopped...like running headfirst into a brick wall. Definitely want to see where this is going between Harry and Ginny. I like the fact that Hermione is now wearing an engagement ring, but I'd like to find out how she gets it. I try not to pick on grammatical errors the first time I read a story, even though I have my Bachelor's in English (I know what it's like to try to get a story that's in your head out before you lose parts of it). Maybe I should be reading every story twice -- once for content and to see if I like it, the second one for catching grammar/spelling mistakes (I'm the one that my friends, who are all going back to school for one thing or another, come to and ask if I can proof their papers). Other than the abrupt ending, it's pretty good. Keep up the good work!
Reviewer: lecook4 Signed Date: 2007.01.06 - 10:54AM Title: What Hurts The Most
Uhm... you marked this as finished. Is it? Strange ending. It's just sort of left out there. Kind of like saying, "He walked into the room, and they all stared at him expectantly." - and then leaving it there and saying The End. *scratches head* Well, it was a good start, but I would definitely go back and flesh out some of it and especially the ending. It just leaves you flat, wondering what the entire story was about. I would also recommend getting a beta or at least have a second pair of eyes look it over for you. There are a few grammatical errors that could be easily fixed.
Reviewer: xo_morgie33 Signed Date: 2007.01.06 - 09:33AM Title: What Hurts The Most
I almost did a songfic with this song. =D. Your writing was okay, but it was very rushed, and the end was a bit of a ddisappointment. There were a couple grammatcal errors as well.