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Reviewer: sabradan Signed Date: 2010.11.09 - 04:54AM Title: Prophecies and Plans

Great stuff. Absolutely brilliant. It's taken me nearly 3 weeks, but I've just read through the complete serie sof this so far. Its all very, very good. Keep up the good work. Though, I wonder why Molly and Lily are so set on making the wedding after Ginny is 17, since, after all its just for show anyway...they're already married. I also wonder how long it'll take for Ginny to cause a bit of commotion at school by not answering the teachers when they call her 'Miss Weasley' causing a 'Miss Weasley/Mrs Potter' identity problem. Just sayin'. Anyway, keep up the good work. There are, like in every chapter you've done thus far, a few 'American-isms' but they're so irrelevant to the story, and so intrinsic to how you write the characters, that it doesn't really matter much. If I had to worry about/change anything in these characters/chapters, it'd be the dialogue. Sometimes, especially when one of the characters is doing the whole 'summation/recap/explanation' thing, they seem to revert to very formal sounding language, almost lecture-like. I've lost count of the amount of times this character or that one says something along hte lines of 'Well, I'll tell you (x person) how I did (y action). Why, all I did was....' or 'What happened was...'. They also seem to over-explain things at times; things that, to me, seem like they would be intrinsic-common knowledge to the characters doing the conversing. You don't need to explain, for example, in dialogue between two magical people what 'x' is, if it something all the characters know. We, the readers, will probably know what it is already (if we've read the books/other info out there), and if we don't, will probably be able to figure it out based on in-text clues. We're generally a pretty smart bunch. And, if you still think we won't understand/know what it is, put it in an A/N at the end of the chapter. I'm just saying that that might make your dialogue flow a teensy bit better. One more final thing before I go. One thing--er, ok, two things that have been irking me to know end about the way these characters interact is just how over-the-top pretentious they can sound, sometimes. You always have them refer to their homes by the building/houses' name, if it has one. Potter Manor is always Potter Manor, even if all the people involved in the conversation would be able to know/infer that 'home' refers to 'Potter Manor', etc. It just seems a bit stilted and pretentious to me. The thing is, in Britain, people do still name their houses, even us 'common folk', though its a practice more and more 'old fashioned' and less in favour as years go by. But I digress. While we may name our homes, we don't constantly refer to them by that name. If I live in a home called 'The Gatehouse' when I tell my, let's say, wife, that its time to go home, I don't say 'It's time we were headed back to the Gatehouse', no, I would say something like 'Let's head home'. See the difference? Basically, house names are used primarily as parts of an address. I mean, they're used in conversation, and company, but usually not with family/super-close-friends-who-may-as-we ll-be-family. Savvy? The last bit is the whole constantly referring to Sirius and Remus as 'honourary uncles'. We all know they aren't blood related. But I don't know anyone who has a person who fulfills that role in real life (myself included) who refers to their 'honourary uncle'--either outloud or mentally--as an 'honourary uncle' usually its just whatever they grew up calling them. If they were 'Uncle Dave' when they were five, they'll be simply 'Uncle Dave' when they're fifty. Just those little nit picks, really, everything else is top quality, man, and its great stuff. Keep it coming, and hopefully we won't have to wait too long for an update.

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Reviewer: charlz1983 Signed Date: 2008.09.12 - 01:21PM Title: Prophecies and Plans

oooh ,very interesting! noticed your rating, and i presume things are going to be get heated with ahrry and ginny????

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Yeah, it will get more physical soon.

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Reviewer: txreina Signed Date: 2008.06.24 - 09:42PM Title: Prophecies and Plans

I really loved the first one so I thought I read the second one.

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Reviewer: BeyondRedHorizons Signed Date: 2007.10.05 - 10:08PM Title: Prophecies and Plans

I was never really worried about Rose and Ti, simply because the earlier prophecy made it fairly clear that Harry'd be defeated by Voldemort if either of them had died. I don't know why I'm having trouble warming to Rose/ Neville (it seems pretty obvious that you're heading in that direction), since they basically mirror the canonical Ginny/ Harry, but something about the pairing rubs me the wrong way. Maybe it's just that it obviously sets up Ti/ Maggie, and he is, at the moment, a much more developed character than she is. Ah well - I will trust that you know what you're doing, since I've really enjoyed this so far.

Author's Response: Yeah, I know Ti is seen more than Maggie but trust me, it'll be better. Thanks for the review.

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Reviewer: marinepotterfan Signed Date: 2007.02.14 - 10:01PM Title: Prophecies and Plans

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Reviewer: peskypetunia Signed Date: 2007.02.14 - 12:23PM Title: Prophecies and Plans

I am so glad to finally see this fic. I love your style and rich embellishments in your plot. Glad to see you back up and running. Its a great beginning and I can't wait to see things play out! Hurry up! =)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I hope you got my message.

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Reviewer: hjp74 Signed Date: 2007.02.13 - 01:21PM Title: Prophecies and Plans

of i read you first story but never reviewd hand so have been looking forwar to the star of the next on.

defenatly like the start what with a quick review of the last year & some info on ginnys and rose part just to bring me back up to speed.

I feel that harry may be a bit to optomistic on his view of the minestry (pleas have umbrideg in this she may be one of the most evile charecters but she dose spice thing up a bit)

However the best bit was the whole scean from voldermorts point of view very well done & am defenatly looking forward to seeing voldermort plann put into action he defenatly seams more pro active in your story which can only be a good thing.

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Reviewer: GinnyMarie Signed Date: 2007.02.13 - 07:15AM Title: Prophecies and Plans

YAY...its finally up...woot...

i like it so far, and cant wait until the next chapter comes out...

update soon!

dotn really have anything else to bring up, so ciao!

~Ginny M~

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Reviewer: Myrkul Signed Date: 2007.02.13 - 06:52AM Title: Prophecies and Plans

Welcome back! This is only beginning so I can't say much about this chapter. "HP and the Twist of Fate" is one of my favourite fanfics and I hope this will be even better:)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I hope you'll like the story as it unfolds. There will be some surprises, I hope.

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Reviewer: hot48cricket Signed Date: 2007.02.13 - 12:28AM Title: Prophecies and Plans

You're back!!!!!

Good start. I can't wait to find out why Harry was able to destroy the dementor in the thrid task. (Are you going to answer next chapter?)

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