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Reviewer: knightsbridge Signed Date: 2007.03.21 - 12:40PM Title: Chapter 1: Victory

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Looks like it will be a good story. I agree with the rest...NEVER depend on spell check. If it's a word, it will pass it through. You need to actually read what you write, since some of the errors would be obvious.

I would probably read this story, errors or not since you have a good idea going.

Go for it!!!



Reviewer: xhpluva4evax Signed Date: 2007.03.08 - 10:37PM Title: Chapter 1: Victory

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Hmm. I would suggest looking into getting a beta before posting more chapters, as there are some spelling and grammar errors distracting readers from the plot.

Otherwise, the plot seems... okay. It's a little out of character for them to immediately jump into bed, even if they've loved each other for ages...

So yea. With a beta and a little slower pacing, I'm sure that this can turn into a great story.

-alex-



Reviewer: Little Miss SciFi Anonymous Date: 2007.03.08 - 01:30PM Title: Chapter 1: Victory

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very good cant wait to see more!



Reviewer: bookworm19 Signed Date: 2007.03.08 - 12:45PM Title: Chapter 1: Victory

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Huh? I'm a little confused, but I love the story! hope you update soon! :) it's great!



Reviewer: MyGinevra Signed Date: 2007.03.08 - 12:36PM Title: Chapter 1: Victory

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Good story, erotic but not sleazy. And the "line out the door." was funny. The typos distracted from the story a little.



Reviewer: ThelostWeasley13 Signed Date: 2007.03.08 - 11:47AM Title: Chapter 1: Victory

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Love it! Are you going to keep writing this story because I love storys like this. And a good twist now and there doesn't hurt, like her getting the potion but it not working or something like that. Now that would be fun. Well keep going and I'll keep reading and reviewing.



Reviewer: redheadwannabe Signed Date: 2007.03.08 - 12:21AM Title: Chapter 1: Victory

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