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Reviewer: GREYWOLF Signed Date: 2010.03.26 - 01:58PM Title: Preparations

I recently came across your story, and I have enjoyed Mer's adventures. There is a problem, however, that I want you to be aware of.

I know for the purpose of your story you need a conflict between Mer and her Dad, but you are making Harry come across far, far too harsh.

First off, its OOC. Remember this is the boy who looked in the mirror and saw his heart's true desire was family. And you recall what Dumbledore told Snape, that in appearance he was like his Dad, but in temperment, like his Mum. Lily was described as uncommonly kind.

Second, and this is unfair since you're not a parent and can't know. Parents exalt in their childrens accomplishments. For Harry to respond the way he did when he found out Mer had made seeker comes across to those of us who are parents as just plain silly.

I know you don't want to go back and rewrite the whole story, but I believe you would do well to try to tone down the conflict between Father and Daughter for the rest of the story.

Author's Response: You're actually very right about this. I started this story more than three years ago, when I was still in high school and frustrated with my own overprotective, oversensitive father. My views towards him have mellowed a lot since I've stopped living at home, and I think throughout the story Meridy's views towards Harry have mellowed out too--just as my portrayal of him is softening. If I ever rewrote this story, I would probably change the harshness of Harry's characterization in the beginning, at least a little (because if I changed it a lot, then the entire premise of the plot would be ineffective).

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