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Reviewer: Jim McGuffin Signed Date: 2007.09.13 - 04:58PM Title: Prologue: Night In The Library

Oh, a few final comments:

The chapter is called "Peter Potter," yet Harry introduces himself as "Harry Pan"?

Also, the Washington Redskins play (American) football. There are baseball teams called the Atlanta Braves and the Cleveland Indians -- the latter appearing in Spenser Hemmingway's entry.

Author's Response: Yeah, the Peter Potter / Harry Pan thing was a deliberate inversion. As for the Redskins... well, I'm barely up on British sports. American sports aren't my forte at all. ;-)



Reviewer: Jim McGuffin Signed Date: 2007.09.13 - 04:55PM Title: Prologue: Night In The Library

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Judged for the competition. You completed this fic just in the nick of time, eh? I leave my review here in the prologue, since that's where everyone else left their reviews.

You begin, like most of the other writers, with Ginny reading other books in the RoR. But unlike the others, you decided to give more detail on what other books are in the room. I've actually heard of many of them -- my mother being a huge Peabody fan.

Your usual sense of humor manifests itself through the fic. Indeed, this is the first time I've read a fic that's filled with so many jokes that a separate chapter is needed to explain them all! LOL! (I've only read kschneyer's one-shots, so I've never seen his "cheat sheets" either.) You're the second entrant to cast Romilda Vain (sorry, Vane -- couldn't resist) as Tinkerbell, but you're definitely the first to cast Ron as Tiger Lily! LOL! Also, I can see that you wanted Lucius Malfoy to be Hook but, bound by the challenge parameters, you had Snape change into Lucius. What a loophole. LOL!

I also notice how you like to turn spelling errors into jokes, such as "Processor" Snape, also the "Hair" of Gryffindor! LOL! (I still remember "viola" from your last challenge entry!)

Overall, excellent job. Unfortunately, there's no Humor category, or this fic would be a shoo-in, but still, I wish you luck in the challenge!

Author's Response: Oh, the extra chapter doesn't explain all the jokes, or even all the obscure ones - just the ones that are external references or where certain additional information is needed to fully get the joke... There are plenty more to spot. :-D As for Romilda, I'm always very careful not to read challenge fics - even in the validation stack - until I've submitted my own entry, so that's definitely a case of congruent development. Given the jealous dynamic between the two in both canons, I'm surprised that more didn't pick her... And yup, Lucius is a much better fit. And in a dream, anything can - and does - happen... ;-) The hair and processor gags... well, I just couldn't resist. It's dangerous to put feed lines in front of me. Anyway, as for the categories, there are still plenty of suitable categories left. I reckon Megs or Eric will take Adventure, and Megs has - in my view - Romance sewn up, but I rather hope I've got a stab at Overall and/or Creative. Here's hoping... ;-)



Reviewer: Katastrophe Signed Date: 2007.09.11 - 01:20AM Title: Prologue: Night In The Library

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Judging for the Challenge.

Great story with many amusing innuendos and undertones. The only problem I really saw was that Snape was supposed to play Hook.

Good luck in the competition! ~Michelle~

Author's Response: But he did! The challenge didn't specify for how long....



Reviewer: quinn Signed Date: 2007.09.05 - 10:12AM Title: Prologue: Night In The Library

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You rock. I think I bruised a rib.
Great entry! Your ability to throw in insane references without losing the plot, all the while maintaining a consistent voice in the Adams/Python and yet still Barrie realm was amazing. I'll definitely need to read the other stuff you've wrtten.
The Col. Bogey hex is one of the best things I've read. Ever.
Thanks for making my morning. Good luck!

Author's Response: Glad you liked it, and I hope you enjoy the other stories as well - they all tend to lean toward comedy, even the more serious (though less insane than this one) ones, so you've got more of the same to look forward to. Try Hollywood Or What? first - it's even more bonkers than this one!
Thanks!
Andrew



Reviewer: GINNY__POTTER258 Signed Date: 2007.09.02 - 08:15PM Title: Prologue: Night In The Library

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Judged for competion:
"Romilda bloody Vain-sorry, Vane, slip of the tongue-" Nice!
Urgh the only thing i didn't like was Ginny moaning at the hot chocolate...i heard chocolate is an aphrodisiac but that's a bit much..i've read worse in fanfictions though... : )

Author's Response: Hehe - nothing to say it's a sexual moan, is there? (But yes, fair enough, that's the intended implication. I've been doing that a lot lately - deliberately sneaking innuendo and implications in under the radar as a dig at the overly conservative "Think of the kiddies!!!" brigade on FAP... ;-)



Reviewer: running_swift Signed Date: 2007.09.02 - 01:24PM Title: Prologue: Night In The Library

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Since the site decided to log me out last time, I'm having to do this again. See the time I spend on you?? XD Anyway, what I had said was.... I particularly like that dig at Barrie in the last sentence :P
Wonderful, as always. I think this might be the best scene-setting anything that I've read. Ever. The hot chocolate! I swear, if you know how to make me one of those, I'm making my way to yours XD And then I was going to ask if you really think Ginny would like the DW novels... or is that just because you like them? :P Hehe just kidding...
But yes, extremely well-written, as always. I shall to the next chapter where my brain shall surely break... (Oh, and I still think you should do Earnest) ~LIsa

Author's Response: Earnest would be tricky - while Ginny would make a good Cecily and Harry a good Jack, Ginny would make a dreadful wossname and Harry an abysmal Algy. So both couples are buggered...



Reviewer: Elizzza Signed Date: 2007.09.01 - 11:27AM Title: Prologue: Night In The Library

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Promising start - so far you're the winner on my list. I wish I had that library - and the hot chocolate with cinnamon. I am looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Ah yes, I enjoyed writing the library. And the chocolate was an experiment; I once knew someone who made hot chocolate like that, and described drinking it as... well, let's just say that she liked it a LOT, and that any more detailed description than that in the fic would bump the rating up. ;-)



Reviewer: oeyp Signed Date: 2007.09.01 - 07:28AM Title: Prologue: Night In The Library

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Reviewer: enchantedsleeper Signed Date: 2007.08.30 - 04:53PM Title: Prologue: Night In The Library

Looking good so far! I'm assuming putting 'Ginny' in the extract of Peter Pan instead of whatever it's supposed to be - Wendy, I assume - was deliberate. Hope you write more soon!

Author's Response: Yup, very deliberate; by that point she's already starting to drift off to sleep. Anyway, plenty more to come - and much, much sillier...



Reviewer: enchantedsleeper Signed Date: 2007.08.30 - 04:40PM Title: Prologue: Night In The Library

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Looking good so far! I'm assuming putting 'Ginny' in the extract of Peter Pan instead of whatever it's supposed to be - Wendy, I assume - was deliberate. Hope you write more soon!



Reviewer: Dianne Signed Date: 2007.08.29 - 09:11PM Title: Prologue: Night In The Library

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I adore how you described the ROR and the hot chocolate and you had me laughing when Ginny found the trashy romance novels with the heaving and all. I can't wait to read more as this is a very enjoyable story and you've really done a wonderful job setting it up. Oh, and the walls punching back was a stroke of genius and very canon like!

Author's Response: Ah, I wondered if anyone would spot the wall gag. And yeah, I couldn't resist putting Mills & Boone in there - although I managed to avoid "throbbing", which otherwise seems to be terribly popular with them. Thanks!



Reviewer: CheddarTrek Signed Date: 2007.08.28 - 06:33AM Title: Prologue: Night In The Library

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Hey, wow, I'm really liking this so far. Your style of writing is very good, well above that of most fanfiction writers, and I'm definately enjoying your sense of humor. I especially liked the way that you worked Rowling's books in there, and the bit about sappy romance novels, but my favorite part was about people in spaceships who avoided speaking in complete sentences. Nicely done!

Also think it's good that you used the start of the story to establish that Ginny is at Hogwarts and Harry is off fighting, that gives us a general idea of when this is going on and a sense that if Harry is off risking his arse then Voldemort is probably hanging around.

Great job all around, I look forward to the rest.

Author's Response: Hehe, I wondered how many would spot the Kirk gag. ;-) Thanks!



Reviewer: Spenser Hemmingway Signed Date: 2007.08.27 - 08:12PM Title: Prologue: Night In The Library

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As far as I'm concerned, you could win the Challenge with just that description of the hot chocolate. Now I'm going to have to recreate in tomorrow morning. One of those things that are sacrificed with marriage and children is the overstuffed chair by the glow of the fireplace, soft music in the background, said chocolate or a good dry wine, and all this with just the right book. You've painted a memory for me. I'm leaving my wife and family to move into our local bookstore. Thanks! Eric

Author's Response: High praise indeed - thanks!




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