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Reviews For If Lily Lived

Reviewer: partypooper Signed Date: 2007.12.23 - 05:16PM Title: Chapter 2: Coming Home

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aww wut happened!!!!???? i liked the old snape!!!!! oh well i hope your update soon!!!! the old snape from the first chapter!!!

Author's Response: im working on an update now... snape has changed because of lilys death... he cant bear to think of her, and in turn, harry



Reviewer: GodricsPhoenix Signed Date: 2007.11.25 - 09:09PM Title: Chapter 2: Coming Home

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OMGsh!!!!!!!! THat was an AWEOSME two chapters!!!!!!!! PLEASE update SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: unfortunately i have tons of schoolwork so the next update will probably happen in late December :( im sorry about that



Reviewer: griffindorechicky101 Signed Date: 2007.11.25 - 08:19PM Title: Chapter 2: Coming Home

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omg this awsome!

Author's Response: thanks gianna! <3



Reviewer: Prof McGonagall Signed Date: 2007.08.30 - 12:40AM Title: Chapter 1: The Boy Who Lived

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Nice twist here! I am sure Ginny would have loved to hear Ron say that...for once she's not "someone's sister"...
Can't wait to see where you will take this story! ;-)

Author's Response: Yes, thanks! For once, ron is "Ginny's brother," not the oter way around...



Reviewer: aryell Signed Date: 2007.08.30 - 12:38AM Title: Chapter 1: The Boy Who Lived

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I like it!!! And cool how Snape could have been his step-father.

Author's Response: I know...................... Thanks!



Reviewer: James Evans Signed Date: 2007.08.29 - 08:30PM Title: Chapter 1: The Boy Who Lived

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mmm, good start, a bit rushed but good notwithstanding...one question though: why make Lily survive only to kill her off so soon after, even if you did a favor to her by not letting the wedding be completed...Lily and Snape??? Oh c'mon...lool
update soon and keep up the good work,
Ruben (James Evans)

Author's Response: Well, did you read DH???? Cuz it does mention more than just platonic feelings between the two fo them.................



Reviewer: Kezzabear Signed Date: 2007.08.29 - 05:49PM Title: Chapter 1: The Boy Who Lived

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It's a good premise but it felt quite rushed in places. I am confused why Lily did die as I thought it was about her not dying. How does her not sacrificing her life make Voldemort still die? I can't see Severus letting Harry go tbh. In Canon his eyes haunted him cos he never *had* Lily, if he did have her Harry's eyes would be more of a comfort, so i guess I don't really buy that bit. I think because it's too rushed to explore the emotons of it all.

I do think it is a good premise but a bit mroe exploration of the motivations and emotions of the characters could make it even better.

Author's Response: Sorry about the rushedness. The story was about Lily living. She lived long enough for Harry to get to know and love her... Severus felt irrationally guilty about Lily's death. He blamed himself for not seeing it coming.... Kinda like Harry felt responsible for Sirius' death in the fifth book.



Reviewer: Sakabatou Signed Date: 2007.08.29 - 04:51PM Title: Chapter 1: The Boy Who Lived

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You've got a good start off and a good idea. The part with Lily going to Severus... I could see it happing since they were best friends, but I think Lily wouldn't run off from her husband, James's, side; Either Sirius or Severus would have to pull her away, and don't forget, Severus called her a Mud Blood, so she would have to get over that. Whether she did or not, we're not sure since J.K. never got into it, but we can guess she didn't. since she hooked up with James.

The wedding with Severus and Lily... again, yeah I could see it happening. Poor Lily though. She survived Voldemort, but Bella ends up killing her. I like that, but I would have liked to read a little more about Lily before she was killed. I would have liked to have read about Harry growing up around Severus and how the two acted around each other.

Sorry to sound like a critic, but after reading about Lily and Severus being best friends, I myself thought about how life would have been like for Harry if Lily and James, or just one of them, would have lived.

Oh, well. Good idea, good job, and good luck on your story. I will watch for your next chapter.

Author's Response: I think James was half rebound, half true love for Lily, so I just thought of putting them together. I didn't think about Sirius or Severus pulling Lily from James' side. Good point!!!!!!! Sorry about the rushedness. I didn't really notice it!!!!!



Reviewer: potteronpotluvhim Signed Date: 2007.08.29 - 04:23PM Title: Chapter 1: The Boy Who Lived

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lily ended up dying anyway =(

Author's Response: I know... But the whole point was that Harry got to know his mother before she died.




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