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Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2015.02.24 - 04:04PM Title: Chapter 1

Great story! I love how you worked the song into the story.

Author's Response: Thank you! I love your work. That means a lot coming from you.



Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2012.08.19 - 04:17PM Title: Chapter 1

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Love it! I can so imagine him destroying the wireless at the end. Great scene with Harry and Ginny as well :)



Reviewer: mysinger Signed Date: 2011.12.24 - 02:59PM Title: Chapter 1

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Brilliant!



Reviewer: Abraxan Signed Date: 2009.07.03 - 03:50PM Title: Chapter 1

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Cute story! And the idea of SNAPE taking a BATH, the greasy git - THAT's funny too!! ROTFL! I like this revision of canon better than what JKR wrote. Well done!

Abraxan

Author's Response: I'm sure he wasn't about to wash his hair. It would ruin the effect. I did enjoy writing this story, though. Snape's POV is so interesting.



Reviewer: ginny_lola Signed Date: 2009.01.03 - 03:51PM Title: Chapter 1

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I love this! Snape makes it even funnier - I don't know why, but I've never been able to read something with Snape in it without laughing my head off, even when he was dying (I sound terrible, but it was so true!) But I also loved your little thing about Harry asking Voldemort to be excused from the war. It just made me laugh - I love it!

Author's Response: Thanks so much. I really enjoyed writing it and love getting reviews. Glad I could make you laugh. I think Snape is hysterical too. Can't say I laughed at his death scene (I was too confused by the weird stuff oozing out of him--the memories) to laugh or be horrified. :)



Reviewer: jennyelf Signed Date: 2008.10.26 - 05:57PM Title: Chapter 1

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This is so funny. I love the Snape parts intermixed throughout the other scenes. Poor Ginny. This is what I always wanted to see- Harry really explain to her.

~Jenn :)



Reviewer: lilyevans_Jan30 Signed Date: 2008.03.11 - 02:17PM Title: Chapter 1

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This is just beautiful. Not only is the weaving of canon and missing moments done seamlessly, but your use of dialogue and description are very smooth. I have never thought much about Snape before as a character - it was really interesting to see this side of him.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! That means a lot coming from you. I'm a fan. Writing from Snape's POV was a blast. I'd like to do more of it.



Reviewer: Spenser Hemmingway Signed Date: 2008.03.05 - 03:32PM Title: Chapter 1

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This was a very nice interpretation of those events from Book Seven. I always wondered why it didn't follow a path closer to yours. I've always been an intense advocate of how much stronger Harry was with Ginny by his side. This interlude you provided him and us supports that assertion. Great things can be accomplished when we carry the people we care for inside. In this case it was even true for Snape. Thanks! Eric B.

Author's Response: Thanks for the kind words. I agree, you don't have to physically be with someone to draw strength from your connection to them. Love has no boundary. I never liked the break up, and had hoped to see a deeper relationship between H&G explored in canon. I'm glad we can explore it in fanfic since JKR didn't choose to go in that direction.

Author's Response: Funny thing, when I think about it...Harry and Ginny's behavior at the Burrow when they were first reunited was like they were still together. She was his immediate help and comfort from the second he arrived. If it hadn't been for Ron's interference, I think we would have had something closer to what I wrote, but with less interaction since Harry really couldn't just go back to the Burrow when he missed her. I'd have had them attacked by the DEs too, since I completely spaced on the name taboo. :)



Reviewer: Jim McGuffin Signed Date: 2008.03.02 - 01:16AM Title: Chapter 1

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Judged for competition.

This is certainly a fun challenge entry to read. And it's good how you were able to incorporate this into the DH canon.

Snape -- I've almost forgotten the special role he has in DH, since this is the first time I've read a retelling of DH from the greasy-haired professor's perspective. It's funny how the song on which this challenge is based is the song that's stuck inside Snape's head. LOL! Having Celestina Warbeck join up with Jagger in the song is a wonderful idea -- since so many different couples, after all, have sung it over the years/

Then we have a departure from canon as Harry appears with Ginny at the Burrow. As some of the other reviewers have pointed out, it would have been interesting to have such a scene in canon, so we could at least have seen what Ginny is doing, feeling, and thinking during the DH year. It's also funny how you reversed the genders, with Ginny as the "wolf" (see Sir Ollivander's description of the song) and Harry as the "mouse" here.

The ending is bittersweet, as we rejoin canon. Snape recalls Lily as he reflects on his mission accomplished -- and we now know that his feelings for Lily are the motivating force for his actions.

Overall, great job. I wish you luck in the challenge!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the thorough review. I enjoyed writing this story, so no matter how it does in the competition, I'm glad I entered. I appreciate the time you took considering it and all the other entries.



Reviewer: Dianne Signed Date: 2008.02.28 - 03:04PM Title: Chapter 1

Very well done story. It was very original in content and interesting to see Snape speaking to a photo of Lily, telling her that he'd done it. It all lends very nicely to the canon plot of DH. I laughed when Harry told Ginny he'd write Voldemort a letter, 'dear Voldemort, Dark Lord, Tom, He who must not be named ' etc. That was a good one. We got to see a little of the dedication Snape had to the Light Side as we never really got to explore in canon until the end for a brief moment. The characters were very in character and I liked how Ron was found and forgiven. Nicely done!

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm thrilled you enjoyed the story and even happier to know why you liked it. :) I enjoyed writing Harry's note to Voldy too. I love mocking the evil one...and particularly liked picking on his many names.



Reviewer: elaithin Signed Date: 2008.02.27 - 03:40PM Title: Chapter 1

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First of all - your title is absolutely brilliant. Very eye-catching.

As for the story itself.. man, how I wish this was how it had happened in canon. Great job! - Patrick

Author's Response: Thanks! That means a lot coming from you. I'm a big fan. :) Unfortunately, if this had happened in canon, Ginny would have brought Voldy and the DEs down on them the minute she assured Harry they didn't know he was there. I completely spaced about the taboo on the name. I blame it on the flu...or old age...or...yeah, it's a very similar alternate universe...that's the ticket. :)



Reviewer: hgfan1111 Signed Date: 2008.02.14 - 05:31PM Title: Chapter 1

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Very well written and my favorite story of the challenge so far. I love the way you've altered canon to fit the challenge and gave us a little glimps of what we all wished would be there for DH. I was going to point out the whole taboo on Voldemort's name, but another reviewer caught it I see. Well, it's AU anyway, yeah? Excellent characterizations. You even made me like Snape and I usually loooathe Severus Snape. Serves him right to get a song stuck in his head. Very creative way to include the song as well.

Excellent writing. I hope to read more things from you in the future.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the thoughtful review. Yes, I messed up with the taboo. It didn't even occur to me when Harry was composing his little note. :) I love to hate dear Severus. He was a real kick to write.



Reviewer: quinn Signed Date: 2008.02.12 - 01:02PM Title: Chapter 1

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Oh, fun. Well done. Enough with the rhyming, jeez. Good usage of everyone's favorite triple agent. I really enjoyed your story :) Good luck!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.



Reviewer: Mallori Potter Signed Date: 2008.02.12 - 12:47PM Title: Chapter 1

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Reviewer: irollam Signed Date: 2008.02.12 - 12:45PM Title: Chapter 1

Absolutly amazingly awsome!
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irollam

Author's Response: Thanks!



Reviewer: zequist Signed Date: 2008.02.10 - 03:28PM Title: Chapter 1

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Nice AU, really funny (especially the Snape parts!) and really sweet. Too bad we couldn't have had something like that in the book...not enough H/G was one of my few complaints about it. Think you forgot about the Taboo on Molyshorts' name (though it would've been ironic if Ginny had brought the DEs down on him in the middle of reassuring him that they wouldn't find him there), but since this is AU anyway we can just pretend it doesn't exist, right? :) Good luck with the voting!

Author's Response: Ha, ha! You did catch me with a blooper there. It's A/U, though...that's my excuse. :) I have my doubts about the unauthorized portkey as well, but Hermione's such a genius, we'll say she carefully figured her way around it. I should have remembered the taboo! Shame on me. I'm glad you liked it! Thanks so much for reviewing. :)



Reviewer: CassandraCross Signed Date: 2008.02.10 - 02:33AM Title: Chapter 1

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This was so cute! Frankly, I think this would have been a much better way to write it than the way she did. I like your version better!

Author's Response: Thanks Cassandra. It's that H/G time we're all suffering for. I needed that resolution, so I'm writing it for myself. I'm glad you liked it. :)



Reviewer: hopeless romantic Signed Date: 2008.02.10 - 12:10AM Title: Chapter 1

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This is just awesome! ;) I'm really glad Harry had a chance to meet up with Ginny and tell her he loves her. I always thought that Harry broke up with her more for him than for her. He loved her so much that there was no way he could go on and finish his duty if she was caught. I think Harry would've chosen Ginny above the rest of the wizarding world and he knew that, and that's why he broke it off.

Poor, poor, Severus. Tortured by Celestina and Jagger. That is a hoot. I'd never thought of them doing a duet together! Hee hee! That would be hilarious. And still dreaming of Lily . . . . That is just so sad.

Great story. I'm glad they approved it so quickly! :)

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. I enjoyed writing it, particularly the Snape parts. I've never tried his POV before, and I may have to indulge more often. He's fun.



Reviewer: hms42 Signed Date: 2008.02.10 - 12:09AM Title: Chapter 1

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Reviewer: Pooky Anonymous Date: 2008.02.09 - 11:57PM Title: Chapter 1

I forgot to mention I really enjoyed Harry and Ginny's interaction in this story, especially Harry's decleration of love for Ginny! Just had to add that!

Author's Response: Thanks again!




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