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Reviewer: GinervaMollyWeasley Signed Date: 2013.09.22 - 06:16PM Title: A Winter's Evening

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I love this. And I completely agree with your thoughts about using the challenge as inspiration. I love how "Baby, It's Cold Outside" outlined the story without being too cheesy and ruining the characters.

Great Job. :)

~GMW



Reviewer: Hippothestrowl Signed Date: 2013.09.21 - 03:29AM Title: A Winter's Evening

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This is nicely written and a fun read over breakfast. At one point I thought Harry had charmed the floo powder to smash deliberately! (my wicked, devious mind!)

I didn't see the original challenge so I don't much care whether it fits or not. I definitely agree they wouldn't use the expression "Baby" - I hate it when fanfics use what feel like OOC expressions. (Interesting to speculate what terms of endearment they would use - probably none in everyday use because true affections do not necessarily need such.)

I like the ending. I expected they would just spend the night together so that was a noble twist!



Reviewer: Torak Signed Date: 2008.03.14 - 02:51AM Title: A Winter's Evening

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Nicely adapted, with the lyrics elegantly woven into the characters and story. Would have been nice to see more of them, but there are certainly enough hints of them there to make your concerns moot.



Reviewer: Spenser Hemmingway Signed Date: 2008.03.05 - 11:48AM Title: A Winter's Evening

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I have to wonder how really cold it is in London. Having lived in Oregon for so long, I guess that I don't think about winter temperatures as much as maybe someone in Arizona. I really enjoyed the situation you set up for the couple, and the picture in my mind of the Finnigan party was very good. I'm a bit surprised that the Wizarding world doesn't have more access to different transportation. Still, it worked in this case and I liked where you finally steered Harry and Ginny. It was a cute ending. Thanks. Eric B.



Reviewer: Dianne Signed Date: 2008.02.28 - 03:47PM Title: A Winter's Evening

I liked your story. I thought the two drink limit for Apparating was very clever as a reason that Ginny couldn't leave. So was dropping the Floo Powder. It was also funny when you implied that Mr Weasley might not be the only reason that Ginny has six siblings. Also, trust Harry to get the wrong hand when proposing. It's so like him. You have some clever ideas here. Thanks for sharing your story!



Reviewer: kingbobrules Signed Date: 2008.02.28 - 02:16PM Title: A Winter's Evening

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Having read the other comments about this story (and of course the fic itself!), I'm afraid that I do have to agree that this story doesn't really fulfill the challenge requirements. I would say that it is still in the spirit of the challenge though, and it did make use of some of the song lyrics, but I think you may need to go back and have a look at some of the more precise instructions, like the need for the mouse to make up an excuse, for instance. It was also quite a short piece without an overhelming amount of plot, though techinichally adequate. If you had a bit more time before the deadline to introduce some more challenge elements to the story and further develop the scene, you might have a story that's a little bit more like it on your hands, but I suspect that this close to the challenge closing it's probably a bit late for that. Don't be too dispirited though - we can't learn from mistakes if we don't make them.



Reviewer: Penny Flamel Signed Date: 2008.02.28 - 12:59PM Title: A Winter's Evening

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I don't think it fits the Challenge either, and it's nothing to do with the words 'baby', alot of other authors didn't use those words either. Ginny, not Harry breaks the jar but it supposed to be Harry trying to make her stay.



Reviewer: jblakew Signed Date: 2008.02.27 - 06:11PM Title: A Winter's Evening

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I didn't think this really followed the challenge also, it badly needed a beta (or at least a proofreader).




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