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Reviewer: jk_salmeier Anonymous Date: 2008.05.23 - 12:52AM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
This story is so funny. I like that H and G are a bit different in this story, it makes the story work. I like that glimspe you have given us in regards to "Twelve Fail-Safe Ways"
Lets see Friends episode references. This may be a dangerous challenage as I have nearly all 10 seasons on DVD. I may have been reaching, but I think I found some:
"Could I be more of an idiot" Chandler from any episode
Crushing tomatoes - The One where Monica and Richard are just friends
Harry and Ginny asleep and being watched by first-years - The One where Ross and Rachel...you know or their first official date, where they wake up in the museum display.
Back rubs - The one where Monica gives bad back rubs "Goodbye muscles" (again, I'm probably reaching and you probably hadn't intended to reference this episode).
Rose petals on the bed and soft music - What Richard did to Monica when they where "just friends"
The triple succession of words Yes, Yes Yes, - Kathy when she bursts in Monica and Rachel's apartment thanking them for coaching Chandler.
I love what you did with this story. Great job with the humour and quippy lines. Sarcastic Ginny is awesome. Her coldness to Harry is very reminiscent of Rachel in "The One where everyone is not ready". Sorry I didn't find this story sooner. I love Friends.
love jk
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! You were close on the friends episodes - I am impressed! Couple more:
Crushing tomatoes was also inspired by the one where Monica was discussing a new restaurant with a guy who got turned on by her description of making a salad.
"Seven, seven, seven" is from the one where Joey is in a sperm donation study and cannot, you know, with his girlfriend, so Monica and Rachel try to teach him how to "be there for her"
And yes, the whole thing was inspired by The One Where Everyone is Not Ready - I was actually going to originally end the story with Harry doing something akin to "drinking the fat", but after a while the story just moved in a slightly different direction. I love Friends too, so this was fun to write. Lilyevans_Jan30
Reviewer: hopeless romantic Signed Date: 2008.03.16 - 03:15AM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
Hahahahahahahahaha! Hope you update soon!
Reviewer: swimsocceg Signed Date: 2008.03.13 - 07:46PM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
oh this is cute poor harry please update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review - another update will be along shortly, as soon as I finish editing the next chapter in my other fic, Taking the Train.
Reviewer: tenorspaz Signed Date: 2008.03.13 - 07:22PM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
This is one of the funniest things I've read in a while! Love clueless Harry! Love bratty Ginny! Love fustrated Ron & Hermione!
Favorite line: Oh, you are an eager one, aren’t you? Well, too bad. You are nowhere near ready for Chapter Ten. So you will have to keep it in your pants just a little while longer. Believe us, you will be thanking us later.
Looking forward to Harry getting the upperhand...eventually.
~~Spazzy~~
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! The next chapter is almost ready. It is sort of a "bridge" to the second half of the story. Don't worry, plenty of cluelessness and sexual frustration to come!
Reviewer: Alanius Signed Date: 2008.03.12 - 11:16AM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
In response to your reply to my earlier review:
There is a difference between eating something bad, like rotten fish, and food poisoning. When something rots, bacteria multiply on it. These bacteria, while not healthy, are not very dangerous to your body.
Salmonella, on the other hand (=synonymous to food poisoning), is a bacterium was designed by ages of evolution to circumvent all your body's immune responses. These bacteria will reside inside your bowel system for ever, because your body has no hope of defeating them without antibiotics.
In case you couldn't tell, this is experience speaking. The evening immediately after I ate the contaminated sausages, I started feeling ill and I was sick several times. I also already had a bad case of diarrhea. The next morning, I didn't feel any better and I quickly found out that everything I ate, soon came out again. The diarrhea had only gotten worse. I had absolutely NO control over when my bowels decided to eject a small portion of what was in them (which, incidentally, was sticky, green and fluid). I ruined several underpants because I simply had no warning.
This continued for a WEEK. Vomiting 95% of what you ate, and running towards the toilet like crazy whenever you felt the green goo oozing out from between your buttocks. After one week, I went to the doctor and he put me on antibiotics. The symptoms immediately stopped, even though I had to watch my diet for a while.
My bowels have never been the same since. In any company, I am always the first one with diarrhea or the first one to be sick after eating something questionable. Thankfully, I have never had a repeat of that week.
I'm sorry if I seemed hostile in my earlier review. I'm easily (and justly) ticked off by people who underestimate food poisoning. You're basically advertising that it's OK to be careless when preparing food, because food poisoning ONLY lasts two days.
Author's Response: I am sorry for all your problems with food poisoning. I did not mean to imply that it cannot be dangerous and long lasting. However, this fic was intended to be a humorous story - and one set in the magical world. I doubt very much that anyone reading it would be inclined to take less care with their food preparation because they suddenly learned that they did not have to be worried about food poisoning.
Reviewer: DebbieO Signed Date: 2008.03.12 - 12:18AM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
Very funny...oh, that book! As if! This witch would be puking. I guess Gin was too, considering Harry poisoned her.
I enjoyed Friends, but was not so big a fan I can pick out all the references. This is a very fun read though. Holy cliche, Batman! I'm surprised Hermione didn't set some bats (or birds) on Ron after Harry read the excerpt. You are the wizard, you are on a roll...! :P
Reviewer: carolquin Signed Date: 2008.03.11 - 10:55PM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
i read the first chapter and i liked your story. poor harry, so clueless.
then i read this chapter and i kind of fell out of the moment with this story. ginny is a bit over the top and half way through i had to stop reading it because i was wishing harry would shove the broom up her arse. she's actually very mean spirited and very malfoyish in this chapter. and the whole thing about harry forgetting a silly anniversary makes her seem more like lavander than the ginny we love. i think she needs to be reeled in a bit because she's not really likable at the moment and i'm actually hoping harry runs away!
but i'll continue reading this story and see where you take it.
Author's Response: I have had a surprisingly large number of reviewers say things similar to you, that they feel Ginny has become too bratty and mean in this chapter. As I pointed out to someone else, I think it would have been better to make this story a one-shot so that all of Ginny's behavior took place in a single day or two, so that her brattiness was not so over the top - but don't despair - things get much brighter in Ch. 3. Please stick with it! Thanks!
Reviewer: Alanius Signed Date: 2008.03.11 - 06:39PM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
What's this rubbish about food poisoning lasting only a couple of days? Food poisoning will last until antibiotics are taken.
Author's Response: I have actually had food poisoning that only lasted a day or two and did not need antibiotics. And they did go to see Madame Pomfrey - who knows what kind of magical medicine she gave them.
Reviewer: GREYWOLF Signed Date: 2008.03.11 - 05:41PM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
I don't want to be too critical because you've taken on a tough assignment. Harry must be amusingly clueless, but can't be just stupid. Ginny is even tougher. She can be miffed, disappointed, but cannot be mean-spirited, or vengefull. If you don't hit it right, the story loses its charm and appeal.
Perhaps one approach would be to make Ginny intentionally "dumb" to Harry's efforts in a mischevious sort of prolongation of his misery. She does of course know exactly what he's trying to do.
Loved the food poisoning. And Ron and Hermione are priceless.
Author's Response: Your idea to make Ginny aware of what Harry is trying to do is one idea I have been tossing around, and I still may use some of it, but I actually have come up with a slightly different twist that I think will work better and be (hopefully) even funnier (while allowing for some great "Chapter 10" action. This story definitely turned out to be more than I had bargained for- as you said, it is hard to put the right personalities of Harry and Ginny into words sometimes - I have a vision in my head that lets me imagine them in one way, but the way their words and actions read on the screen may make them seen quite different. I do actually appreciate even critical reviews - at least people are reading it and thinking about it.
Reviewer: justinsgrl22 Signed Date: 2008.03.11 - 05:14PM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
While this has been cute, I certainly hope that at some point soon Harry will start to get the upper hand and the tide will turn. Clueless is one thing...but he's really just looking like an idiot. It'll be interesting to see where this goes...I'd kinda like to see Harry come through and do something that leaves Ginny, Ron AND Hermione speechless with how good he's done...please?
Author's Response: Ahh, don't worry, I have come up with a plot twist that I think will make my readers happy and still allow me to follow much of my original intent to make Harry "try all twelve" Don't worry. Much less Clueless!Harry and Bratty!Ginny to come.
Reviewer: Pooky Anonymous Date: 2008.03.11 - 01:17PM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
Ok, this is ridiculous! I'm sorry, Ginny is acting like a total and complete brat!! I know that this is supposed to be a comedy, but she is over-the-top. People make mistakes, people forget anniversaries, birthdays, etc. It hurts, but GET OVER IT. It's not the freaking end of the world. Mature people in mature relationships tell each other what's wrong, and they forgive one another. You might have to grovel a little bit, but nothing this excessive. You'd think that Harry had gone out and shagged every girl at Hogwarts, the way that Ginny is responding to him. It's not like Ginny is never going to hurt Harry. I hope that when she does, Harry makes her grovel ten times worse than she is making him grovel now. It would serve her right!! In many ways Harry/Ginny fanfiction makes Harry out to be the bad guy in their relationship and that is so unfair. Women make mistakes too (Hahahaha....That's right guys, let's stand up for one another! Those blasted women! LOL!). My frustration is not with you or your story. My frustration is with Ginny and her pettiness. Come on Ginny, stop acting like a teenage punk! Grow up!! For goodness sakes!!
Chris (Pooky--Who really loves Ginny but feels likes smacking her a good one every once in a while!! Horrible, I know! LOL!!!)
Author's Response: Ginny is being quite the brat here, I agree. This is not the GInny (or Harry) that I envision in "real canon life" Neither are the Harry and Ginny in Taking the Train - I actually have yet another version of them in mind that may someday see the light of day, if I have time. I noted in a response to Andi that I based some of her behavior on a Friends episode where she manages to make Ross into the bad guy even though she is the one acting badly. That is one of the reasons I wrote the flower chapter - Harry didn't really do anything wrong, and Ginny actually starts to thaw after that - as shown by her musing that maybe he has repented enough. And quite frankly, I cannot fault her for her reaction after the back rub - if someone, even my boyfriend whom I dearly loved, had caused me to miss a review session before a possibly life altering exam, I think a three day silent treatment would have been letting him get off easy. But don't worry, most of the remaining chapters are more fun and hijinx, and a little less Ginny as brat. Harry might even get the chance to apologize so that they can both take full advantage of Chapter 10! Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: hgfan1111 Signed Date: 2008.03.11 - 12:36PM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
Woah!! Not sure I'm up for *that*...but maybe a little bit of lovin'. ;)
Author's Response: Don't worry, as you will discover in future chapters, despite all the innuendo, Harry's (and Ginny's) experience with "wand work" is still lacking. He does try to talk a good game though, doesn't he? Now I really need to go back to my real job. Somehow I don't think I can bill time spent writing fanfiction and review responses, no matter how many nice legal terms I throw in. So let the evidence show that I am going back to work.
Reviewer: hgfan1111 Signed Date: 2008.03.11 - 11:27AM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
I agree with you on the study versus backrub thing. But then again, Harry's getting a bit desperate isn't he? If Ginny's too busy, Harry, don't forget the offer's still open over here. **wink, wink** Must continue to practice my Minxy Ways. ;) I remember the Friends episode well and you're right, it was very funny.
Author's Response: Oh, you haven't even begun to see the extent of Harry's desperation . . I can be quite evil when the plot calls for it. And if poor Harry needs some help with his "wand work" before he tries to put the moves on Ginny again, I will be sure to send him your way. Just don't corrupt the poor sweet boy too much!
Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed Date: 2008.03.11 - 10:54AM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
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Reviewer: hgfan1111 Signed Date: 2008.03.11 - 10:07AM Title: Two, Three, Four, Five - Come on Harry, Stay Alive!
***claps hands for a new chapter*** But then I read it. Yeah. Harry...come on over here, you poor little thing. Andi will love you and keep you away from nasty old, time-of-the-month-acting Ginny. He He. I could use a good backrub right about now. **sigh** I do love this story but I feel extremely sorry for Harry. He just can't win, can he. Can I just say...Ginny better be ready for chapter 10 at the end of this whole thing or Harry may just beat her, Ron and Hermione with that book. ;) Great chapter though. You came up with some very original stuff that wasn't too cliched, I don't think. Although I can't give it an outstanding because I'm just not sure how much more Harry can take!!!!
Author's Response: Yeah, I am definitely making Harry pay for it more than he deserves right now. What can I say, I am a humor whore - anything for a laugh, even at poor Harry's expense. Although you have to admit, he was being kind of sneaky with that backrub thing when they should have been studying, right? Hmm? (looks pleadingly at Andi, and begs understanding). Actually, the same thing happens in the Friends episode this is loosely based on - if you are familiar with the show. Ross is being a good guy, trying to get all his friends going so they can leave on time for an awards dinner that Ross is being honored at, and his girlfriend, Rachel, is being an absolute pain in the ass, or arse, or whatever, and yet Ross is the one who totally ends up looking like the bad guy. But don't worry, they will get to Chapter 10 eventually, probably more than once, and I have lots of great things planned. But you have given me a good idea for a future chapter . . . Hmmm. Payback can be a bitch, can't it? And I am definitely feeling bad for poor Ron and Hermione - trying to be good friends and get some action at the same time. Actually, I think they should get to enjoy Chapter 10 first . . .
