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Reviewer: Abraxan Signed
Date: 2009.05.30 - 02:58PM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
Very funny so far! I'm enjoying it! I like how Ginny overcame her shyness to finally talk to Harry, and how he finally relaxed with her as well. And Luna to the rescue! Fun!
Abraxan
Reviewer: yentila22 Signed
Date: 2008.11.20 - 12:16AM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
It is a lovely story .I agree with you about Ginny and Harry being normal 10 and 11 year olds . Thank lyou for writing them the way you have ...on to Chapter 2
Reviewer: Spenser Hemmingway Signed
Date: 2008.04.22 - 11:29AM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
Hermione blush or giggle...? Hmm, I don't suppose she would do either in those days. I magine that her cheeks were a tad bit pink when Harry and Ron reacted to seeing her at the Yule Ball years later. She would also giggle when she read this first chapter. It's great. It is amazing how much the twins accomplish through simple trial-and-error...error in this case. Luna's solution was perfect, and I loved the way you characterized the girl. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks! Eric B.
Author's Response: Thanks! I agree, it took Hermione a while to loosen up enough to blush or giggle - I hope being around Ron enough finally got her there. The twins are a lot of fun to right, when I can get their voices right inside my head (happening more and more these days, yikes). And I though Luna really needed some credit, finally. She can't always be wrong!
-Mel
Reviewer: somethingwicked Signed
Date: 2008.04.19 - 11:21AM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
awwww..I loved that.
Author's Response: Thanks! I am glad you liked it.
Reviewer: Bunny_Kitty_Forever Signed
Date: 2008.04.18 - 07:34PM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
I like the first chapter. It was really cute!
Reviewer: dougal74 Signed
Date: 2008.04.15 - 11:29AM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
WOW great start...I look forward to reading the rest of your installments.
Reviewer: hms42 Signed
Date: 2008.04.08 - 10:45PM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
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Reviewer: tear_away Signed
Date: 2008.04.08 - 10:41AM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
Right so that was a good chapter and the prank the twins pulled was a great way for Harry and Ginny to get over their embarrasment of how she feels and to start becoming friends. I am interested to see how they prank the twins and what happens when Harry writes in the diary. It should be quite an interesting final chapter. Good luck in the challenge I think you'll do well.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review - I am into the second chapter and it is turning out to be quite interesting when Harry first writes in the diary. Hopefully it will stay interesting as I work everything out!
Reviewer: luckyshot572 Signed
Date: 2008.04.06 - 12:04AM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
Brilliant story so far. It really was absolutely priceless, and I'm so glad too, as I think this might actually be my favorite challenge so far, I'm really glad the first submission was so good. I think you managed to keep everyone really in character, especially Ginny which I think is great because alot of authors, to me at least, don't quite capture her right. And great job on Luna too, I know alot of people say they have a terrible time trying to write her, but you do so wonderfully. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review - I am glad you like the story. This challenge gave me a lot to think about, and I can't wait to see how others address the issues. Somehow I wonder if I made it all a lot more complicated than it needed to be. Oh well, the next chapter is in the works!
Reviewer: GREYWOLF Signed
Date: 2008.04.05 - 03:46PM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
So is this the first time Ginny has met Luna? She's a favorite of mine. I hope she's involved in the prank in some way.
Author's Response: Yes, this is how Ginny meets Luna, at least in my challenge category universe. And don't worry, you have definitely not seen the last of her. I just hope I do her justice - she can be difficult to write convincingly without resorting to making her sound like a total idiot, which she obviously is not.
Reviewer: Leonheart666 Signed
Date: 2008.04.05 - 12:01PM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
An excellent start!
Luna and her jar of dirt is priceless. And for once something of hers was true! Not to mention how Voldemort is allergic to Harry's toy broomstick. Deathly Hallows would have been a short book if only Harry knew that.
In chapter 2, watch your punctuation. In particular, watch where your speech marks go. Many times I saw something like:
“Harry was indignant. “What do you mean? I just spent two hours on her arms and legs — they are perfectly clean . . .”
added speech marks at the start. It looks really untidy, and it's so noticable with it being at the start of a line. Go back over your work and check for little mistakes like these, and next chapter will get a 10.
Good work though
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I really wanted Luna to get something right, for a change.
I fixed all the punctuation and quotations - thanks for the heads up. I was working on submitting this piece when the site was having problems and it kept logging me out and losing my edits. It should be all right now.
-Mel
Reviewer: hgfan1111 Signed
Date: 2008.04.05 - 10:02AM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
Wonderful story. I like how you're determined to not alter canon too much with this Challenge. i think it'll make it different than the other stories that I envision being posted for the Challenge.
Love the section where Ginny rambles on about her thoughts of how meeting Harry Potter would be. That is just so...Ginny...to me. And it confirms what Ron told Harry about how she never shut up.
He He. Your Luna is a hoot. I can't write Luna to save my life, but you've managed quite well. She's brilliant, Mel. i love this brand of nonesense mixed with absolute honesty and observations. It fits perfectly with what I imagine Luna to be. Even if I can't get her straight in my head.
I do have to say, though, my absolute favorite scene...hang on, I'm still giggling....
I can absolutely see the part where Ginny is whining and begging her mother to help her erase the words while Harry, hunched forward and squinting through his glasses, steps toward her, peering at the green writing on her face.
He He He. Absolute perfection. That's all I can say. I know I'm going to be back later today to read it again. And maybe once more after that. ;) Luv, Andi
Author's Response: Thanks Andi - and for your messages to me - I think it is all fixed now.
I am glad you liked Luna - I was really worried about writing her because I have seen her done so well by others, and I don't think she is my strength. But I am happy with the way she turned out. Glad you liked it - now I need to go focus on other writing - like about enchanted cookies and Prof. McGonagall's tartan underwear!
-Mel
Reviewer: Pooky Anonymous
Date: 2008.04.05 - 09:57AM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
I absolutely loved it! Very original, very unique, and extremely funny. Your Harry and Ginny are very realistic. And of course, how could I not love Luna, and her jar of magic dirt!! The part was freaking hysterical! I can't wait to read chapter 2. Keep up the great work and please update soon!
Chris (Pooky)
Author's Response: Huge praise, coming from you - I am really glad you liked it. This Harry and Ginny are pretty close to my "real" ones, so you will probably see them again in other stories. But then again, maybe Ginny will grow up and join a group of sneaky girlfriends to use their feminine charms to get back at a group of boys, thereby interrupting the attempts of one of them to attempt, fruitlessly, to write a dissertation . . .
-Mel
Reviewer: Dragyn Signed
Date: 2008.04.05 - 09:44AM
Title: Ginny Plus Harry Equals Love
Great start, cant wait for the rest :)
Author's Response: Thanks! Chapter 2 will be here . . . well, before the end of April!
-Mel
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