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Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed Date: 2008.07.06 - 12:09PM Title: Fireflies at Twilight

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Reviewer: Ellery Signed Date: 2008.06.04 - 05:55PM Title: Fireflies at Twilight

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Interesting, but at the moment it doesn't make an awful lot of sense. I'm sure things will come together as the story progresses. Well written.



Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2008.06.03 - 01:25PM Title: Fireflies at Twilight

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Oh, I want more of this story! I'm so glad the fireflies came and seemed to take away Harry's tormented dreams. I certainly hope that Harry's "rescue" by the Weasleys helps him just as much as those fireflies...

I had to laugh at Petunia sending Vernon up to make sure Harry wasn't soiling her carpets. You've captured both her and Vernon wonderfully, just as you have Dudley's annoying habit of listening to the same rap song!

You have a writing style that just makes the reader want to keep moving forward through your paragraphs. I look forward to the continuation of this story and hope you will post again soon. Two thumbs up for catching my attention with your first paragraph.



Reviewer: HGRHfan35 Signed Date: 2008.06.03 - 03:01AM Title: Fireflies at Twilight

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I think you have a captivating style of writing. Let's see where you're taking us. Good Luck. C



Reviewer: starboy454 Signed Date: 2008.06.03 - 02:14AM Title: Fireflies at Twilight

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Reviewer: Fleury Signed Date: 2008.06.02 - 11:27PM Title: Fireflies at Twilight

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Ooh! Good chapter! I'm really interested in what's to come--I haven't seen a post-GoF retelling of canon before. And I wanna know what this Pewter Owl thing is! Anyway, you set up a great base for the story, and your writing/writing style is really good. There were a couple of iffy sentences in there, but otherwise, your grammar and sentence structure were both impeccable! I look forward to reading more!

--Fleury



Reviewer: Professor_Chris Signed Date: 2008.06.02 - 09:58PM Title: Fireflies at Twilight

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Very interesting start to the story, looking forward to finding out what happens with this story and more about the fireflies.



Reviewer: swannygirl Signed Date: 2008.06.02 - 09:40PM Title: Fireflies at Twilight

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Loved this first chapter! Seems like really good idea for a story. Can't wait for more.



Reviewer: John Z Signed Date: 2008.06.02 - 05:31PM Title: Fireflies at Twilight

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Great chap,can't wait of the next one.



Reviewer: NotACat Signed Date: 2008.06.02 - 01:30PM Title: Fireflies at Twilight

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How intriguing...and what's Vernon up to?



Reviewer: calgary Signed Date: 2008.06.02 - 01:14PM Title: Fireflies at Twilight

I enjoyed this. Good promising start. I like your writing, so am looking forward toward more.

Fireflies, eh? No stretch of the imagination on what they will mean down the road a bit.



Reviewer: Macsr71 Signed Date: 2008.06.02 - 11:00AM Title: Fireflies at Twilight

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Well, a promising start - good humor although I suprised Vernon didn't have a bit of a fit over the door slamming in his face. Fireflies eh? wonder just what type of magic you have cooked up with those.




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