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Reviewer: skeet500 Signed Date: 2008.08.07 - 06:48PM Title: Setting up Lily and James
so i think it started off very funny. harry and ginny are still, well, basically exactly the same. i thought the whole thing was very cute and funny
Author's Response: Thanks! As you can see, this whole thing is a big set up.
Reviewer: Spenser Hemmingway Signed Date: 2008.07.13 - 09:13AM Title: Setting up Lily and James
Chocolate biscuits?! You are wonderful…especially if you’ll get Molly to share the recipe. It looks as if you’re giving us a unique setting for this story. I really do think that it will be difficult for neither one to interfere, especially with a bet on the line. Now what would that be--neck rubs perhaps? Your characterization of the children is right on, and of course he’s going to play with that after being told not to. You obviously have children of your own. Eric B.
Author's Response: Oh yes, chocolate biscuits. Molly actually borrowed my own recipe - if you say please, I might leave a plate of them in the SIYE employee lunchroom.
And yep, my kids were the rather unwitting models for this story. Thanks! -Mel
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Reviewer: Sovran Signed Date: 2008.06.28 - 01:03AM Title: Setting up Lily and James
Since posting my own, I've read several challenge stories, and all of them have been pretty good. I have to say, however, that yours made me laugh the most, without doubt. You did a nice job of creating a believable (and vaguely mysterious) setup in which the story could play out on its own, per the challenge parameters. That, in turn, presented loads of opportunities for truly hilarious interactions. The bit where the kids 'tell' Ginny about her second pregnancy was especially good. And, of course, the MST3K feel of the entire story was an excellent touch.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review-considering the source, I am extremely flattered that you enjoyed it. I have to admit, I purposely set up a situation where I could focus on the parenting aspect of the situation, and of course, the humor, without getting too bogged down in the "changing the future" aspect. I'm glad it worked believably.
Reviewer: Sundevil6 Signed Date: 2008.06.24 - 07:25PM Title: Setting up Lily and James
too good , must read more!
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you are enjoying it!
Reviewer: Abraxan Signed Date: 2008.06.11 - 02:58PM Title: Setting up Lily and James
Wow, you're off to an interesting start! Can't wait to see what happens next!
Abraxan
Reviewer: drawjones Signed Date: 2008.06.06 - 07:53PM Title: Setting up Lily and James
Very interesting take on the challenge story. This leads to a whole plethora of questions and the potential for a very humorous outcome for our dear friends. I'm eagerly looking forward to finding out the answers.
Author's Response: Thanks! There is something about the challenges that makes me want to write humor. Even though there is no humor category this time, I just couldn't resist the plot that came to me.
Reviewer: hgfan1111 Signed Date: 2008.06.06 - 06:35PM Title: Setting up Lily and James
Once again, Mel, you've attempted a style I wouldn't touch with a ten-foot pole. And succeeded. I'm very intrigued by the lesson that might be in progress.
And the kids fighting...I almost yelled at my kids, then reailized I was *reading* an argument. ;)
Looking forward to the next chapter. As always.
Author's Response: Hehe Andi - and I could never write anything that makes people think and debate like you do - I figure, if you can't make em cry, go for a laugh. The lesson is an interesting one indeed, but it won't be apparent until the final chapter. Thanks!
Reviewer: Coco Signed Date: 2008.06.06 - 05:23PM Title: Setting up Lily and James
I like it, nice twist off the challenge.
It's fun to see Harry and Ginny as parents and passing on the finer points of life: tricks, laughter, fun; all the
things that make the world go round with a smile.
Look forward to the next chapter.
Thank you for the entertainment!
Author's Response: I think you will like the next couple of chapters - Lily and James have definitely picked up a few tricks in their six years - thanks for the review!
Reviewer: hjp74 Signed Date: 2008.06.06 - 04:23PM Title: Setting up Lily and James
this sound very promasing & defenatly a very diffrent take on the challenge hopefully the next chapter will explane whats going on but it seems like harry & ginny are taking part in some sort of parenting class experament though iam not sure why oh well it still a fantastic read & iam looking forward to the next chapter.
James
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I am enjoying all the guesses about what is going on. So far, no one has gotten that close. I actually changed the title from what I had originally planned to make it less obvious what was going on. More will be revealed soon.
Reviewer: melipy Signed Date: 2008.06.06 - 02:43PM Title: Setting up Lily and James
That's a very interesting beginning. I can't wait to read the next.
Author's Response: Thanks! It should be submitted tonight.
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2008.06.06 - 02:42PM Title: Setting up Lily and James
ah fun age to be a round see what the kids can get in to ./....this shoul dbe fun to see what u have planed...kutgw
Author's Response: Thanks! Yep, kids this age can get into a lot. More to come . . .
Reviewer: FredsGirl Signed Date: 2008.06.06 - 01:49PM Title: Setting up Lily and James
Ooh, I wonder where this is going. I already love it!
This is cute, Mel!
Jen
Author's Response: Thanks Jen! Chapter 2 is ready to be submitted; I just have not had enough time to actually get it done.
Reviewer: Ellery Signed Date: 2008.06.06 - 01:22PM Title: Setting up Lily and James
What about a disillusionment cham on the parchment and quill, although she then wouldn't be able to see it to write.
Author's Response: Hmmm, didn't think about that - I kind of assumed that if she was disillusioned, and touching the parchment and quill, they would take on her disillusionment too. Yeah, that's it. Thanks for your thoughts!
Reviewer: harrypotterspirit Signed Date: 2008.06.06 - 01:01PM Title: Setting up Lily and James
Well, this is mysterious. You've caught my curiosity. Playing tricks on brave 6 year olds....mmmmm!
Author's Response: Thanks! Some questions, but not all of them, will be answered in the next chapter. I have a couple of kids around this age, so I have been trying to channel their spirit here.
Reviewer: hopeless romantic Signed Date: 2008.06.06 - 10:31AM Title: Setting up Lily and James
You already know what I think of this: ABSOLUTELY AWESOME! Hope you update soon! :)
Author's Response: Thanks Iva! Chapter 2 is finished and Chapter 3 is more than halfway. . . Not long to wait!
Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2008.06.06 - 09:40AM Title: Setting up Lily and James
Oh, I want more! I certainly hope you update soon because I want to see what sort of trick Ginny and Harry are playing on their children. And to think that Molly is in on the fun just gave me the giggles; all any curious child needs is an adult to forbid them from doing something and the first thing you know he/she has either broken the thing or gotten him-/herself into trouble. This makes me wonder what sort of lesson Ginny and Harry are trying to teach James and Lily. Hmmm.... The argument over the vaclune sweeper is very well done and sound just like many of the arguments I have witnessed over the years.
Good luck in the writing contest.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I am having lots of fun writing Lily and James, and taking a lot of inspiration from my own kids. I think you will be quite surprised to see exactly why they went into the Pensieve, but teaching them a lesson would have been a good idea too. I appreciate your thoughts!
Reviewer: Ginny Guerra Signed Date: 2008.06.06 - 08:12AM Title: Setting up Lily and James
Interesting beginning.
Update soon, please!
Author's Response: Thanks! Update coming soon!
