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Reviewer: BuffyRose Signed Date: 2016.01.21 - 05:16PM Title: Dungeon: Discussions

These are by far my favorite fan fiction stories. I do hate the hint of slut shaming though that seems to occur in all fan fiction. Bad girl = dressed "slutty" aka revealing. Sex = bad. Sex and revealing clothes go hand in hand. I had sex at 15 and was wearing a baggy hoodie that day. Not that I would judge someone who wanted to wear more revealing clothing. the idea of Ginny being a virgin is comical. But otherwise I seriously love this serious the characters for the most part really sound in character and it mostly sticks to canon and it's just everything I look for in Harry Potter fan fiction

Author's Response: I don’t think I’m guilty of those things, particularly not the sex = bad thing. As for the clothing, Different boys react differently to a girl's clothing choine. I hope I showed that. If I didn't, I'm sorry.
Your view of Ginny differs from mine. "I did" does not equal "everyone does" and I strive to give different characters different attitudes.
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Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2014.04.29 - 04:49PM Title: Dungeon: Discussions

I would bet that this particular HTML issue is not of your making, as I think it is precisely the same glitch that bites me in the derriere several times.

What I was going so say in my abrogated message was that if you start an HTML tag on the hard left of a new line, there is a chance that the parser will insert a single blank character somewhere in the first word (usually the HTML command itself) which disrupts the command. So, I have started just automatically inserting a single blank character before any HTML tag. This ensures that no tags begin on the leftmost character of a new line.

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Kudos to Amelie / Ginny Guerra if she has been able to foster some of your best writing. She apparently did a great job with some of Count Westwest's writing. His material was racier than I prefer, but he wrote some very concise, compelling and entertaining fiction. So it's interesting that you seem to be suggesting that the quality of your writing is more a function of quality of beta-reading than of maturation or simply getting in a groove? Thus far I have been going it alone, relying on self-editing, which I can cultivate by leaving several weeks between initial draft and subsequent proofing session. If I read it when I'm sufficiently grouchy, I can often catch some stylistic issues, but I suppose it's better to rely on someone whose role/duty is to be grumpy :)

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I appreciate the fact that you've taken the time to respond to my rambles. However, my intention is to give back a little, rather than take. Definitely don't let me come between you and your writing!

Author's Response:
Thanks. I have used a lot of betas, some better than others, but Amelie has been a constant in my Harry/Ginny stories for almost five years (she deserves a medal). I hope that my writing has improved, and that it will continue to improve. I listen to reviews, and I correct my mistakes, I hope that I continue to learn. I also experiment a lot (Hunters and Prey and Tales of the Battle are two examples of me playing around with voices – so is Strangers at Drakeshaugh).

I tend to work in a similar way to you. I write, rewrite, leave for a while, rewrite again, and then send it to beta’s. When I get it back, I usually rewrite again.

-N-



Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2014.04.22 - 07:41AM Title: Dungeon: Discussions

Hah! I see that there is also a problem when one tries to talk about HTML tags inside one of these review messages (see sudden truncation of my previous message). Anyway, long and short of it is that the parser garbled your closing center tag in this chapter, leading to spurious text centering through the final 30% of the text. I assume you've figured out the tricks for working around the parser's amusing little glitches, but if not then feel free to drop me a note.

Author's Response: The HTML problems are often of my own making. I’ll fix this one asap. -N-



Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2014.04.21 - 07:45AM Title: Dungeon: Discussions

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As you've probably noticed, I'm making my gradual way through much of your work. It has seemed to me that your writing really blossomed in terms of quality sometime around 2011, essentially progressing from good to excellent over a fairly short period of time. I wonder what the inspiration was?

Anyway, this chapter seems to be right in the transitional stage -- the plot intricacies are suddenly a lot more intriguing than what earlier chapters of Schoolgirls had afforded, although the writing style is still a bit greener than later work.

NOTE: I know it's been years since this chapter was uploaded, and I'm guessing that you've probably long since figured this out on your own, but just in case this is at all helpful to know: there's a glitch in the SIYE HTML parser such that sometimes when you start a new line with the "

Author's Response:
Thanks for the (oddly curtailed) review.

Almost since I started submitting stories Amelie (Ginny Guerra) has been beta reading for me (the very early stuff was done by Spenser Hemmingway). I submit my stories to other sites too (fanfiction.net and Mugglenet Fanfiction). At the time Mugglenet were extremely strict (that’s no longer the case) so I was also using a second beta for that site. I had a few, but in 2011, I began using Soraya. She pulled no punches, and she used to send me reams of comments, “this bits too slow” “delete this section” etc. I didn’t always agree with her, and sometimes she asked me to delete stuff I knew would be important in later chapters, but she made me think, and she raised my game. I miss her.-N-



Reviewer: GREYWOLF Signed Date: 2010.06.14 - 09:25AM Title: Dungeon: Discussions

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A very interesting take on human nature. Despite the kindness Fenella was shown by Harry and the ofther members of the DA, she feels she must use subtrifuge to accomplish their purpose. All she has to do is ask. Will she realise that? Can a slytherin change its spots?

Author's Response: What a perceptive review and what a good question. You’ll find out soon. :-)



Reviewer: destin4fl Signed Date: 2010.05.23 - 11:06AM Title: Dungeon: Discussions

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excellent a story within a story good job.

Author's Response: Thanks. Exactly how important is this interlude? Wait and see. -N-



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2010.05.21 - 06:40PM Title: Dungeon: Discussions

they are all barking up the wrong tree and fenella is trying to help but the rest are not helping any...kutgw

Author's Response: Is that what you think? Hogwarts students trying to break into the Ministry ... It's unheard of ... no wait, that's wrong (-; -N-



Reviewer: Ginny Guerra Signed Date: 2010.05.21 - 11:05AM Title: Dungeon: Discussions

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This one came out quickly!

Author's Response: Yes, expect the next chapter soon N



Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2010.05.21 - 08:31AM Title: Dungeon: Discussions

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very enjoyable chapter as always
I like the way that it's written and I look forward to reading more :)

Author's Response: Thanks This little sidways excursion into the Slytherin Common Room will prove to be important. N




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