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Reviewer: NoTagBacks Signed Date: 2011.10.13 - 02:46AM Title: Last of the American Girls

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So, do you consider this chapter the best you've ever written? It's one of the best I've read. You made me really care about two completely original characters. No I'll be up all night reading the rest of the story you've written so far.



Reviewer: borokat Signed Date: 2011.04.22 - 03:30PM Title: Last of the American Girls

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Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed Date: 2011.03.19 - 08:07PM Title: Last of the American Girls

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How in the world is this a Ginny/Harry story? She got pregnant, got over Harry, married someone else, had another kid and moved on with her life. If Harry suddenly comes back to life, why would we want her to get back with Harry? Why root for them since she doesn't seem as special as Ginny Potter in canon?

As for this world-- it does not seem British. They eat pancakes (American), she named her kid "Jackson", which is a trendy American name and she got married and divorced to a man who wasn't her baby daddy--very Muggle and nothing like what we know of Rowling's Wizarding culture. This seems less like the world of Harry Potter and more like an American romance novel

Author's Response: If you've read closely...you'll realize that Ginny has in no way gotten over Harry and that was the main reason things didn't work out in her marriage. And I am American, so any oversight or language use isn't intentional--I'm not going to look up every single word to make sure it sounds 'British' just to appease everyone. This also takes place in the years of 2015-2016....so who's to say that the same trends you point out haven't developed. Plus....this story is AU...I've never set out to emulate and follow the Potterverse to a 'T'. If you don't enjoy the direction...that's fine. I'm going to to continue to write as I've intended.



Reviewer: ebonydawnpotter Signed Date: 2010.06.14 - 05:06PM Title: Last of the American Girls

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Another excellent chapter! I just can't imagine why Jackson's falling for Anna... XD I mean it isn't like she's similar to Ginny in any way... I guess the old adage that daughters fall for men like their fathers is also true in the flipped case?

Great banter/dialogue once again, it flows nicely and lets the story progress without relying on description.

I look forward to more chapters!

Author's Response: I think we'll find that Anna is similar to Ginny in a lot of ways ;) Thanks and hopefully you won't have to wait too long!



Reviewer: Harte Signed Date: 2010.06.11 - 04:51PM Title: Last of the American Girls

Cute story. I like the personality you have given Jackson, it is like Harry but with the confidence which comes with being raised by people who love you. You must have a teenage son or brother. The description of Ginny with her son in his messy bedroom and him sleeping until afternoon as something which is very close to home for me.

I would like to comment on Greywolf's review. Your summary clearly states sexual situations so there should not have been any surprise. I usually see if a story has at least 10 reviews per chapter before I read it so without his 4 or more reviews I may not have read this story - thank you Greywolf. As you stated he also commented on St. Margaret's story. He is clearly in denial when he says no warning. Also, I love, love, love St. Margaret's writing so you are in good company.

I look forward to your next update. Thank you for sharing your story!

Author's Response: I actually don't have a brother (or son ;) at all. But I have to best friends who are guys and I guess you can liken it to having to brothers ;). Thanks



Reviewer: GREYWOLF Signed Date: 2010.06.10 - 09:34AM Title: Last of the American Girls

Sorry I wasn't clear enough. While there are many kinds of love, I'm talking about the real deal. Absolute committment to another. Obviously that does not lead to an amiacable divorce. I just don't think Ginny, as writen by JKR would settle for that type of relationship.
Oh and I went back and checked carefully. There are no warnings about illicit sex, so to you and Margarate I have to say liar liar pants on fire.

Author's Response: Nowhere in either story did we lie about what what you were to get. You were warned that there were sexual situations in my story. You were also warned that it was not appropriate for anyone under 13. Nowhere in this story do I show or describe Ginny and Harry having sex, only that they have. What you get is the end result--a child. So how that in any way is not within the ratings or I did not warn you of implied sex, is beyond me. If you have a problem and need to resort to childish name calling, please don't read on.



Reviewer: destin4fl Signed Date: 2010.06.09 - 10:25PM Title: Last of the American Girls

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i like this... but i was hoping for more Harry. i am a big fan of yours and am hoping for H/G reunion on this side of the veil... breathless and perched on the edge of my seat.



Reviewer: harrypotterspirit Signed Date: 2010.06.09 - 08:49PM Title: Last of the American Girls

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Nice introduction to Anna. The accident was just bad enough but not over the top. Living on the coast, where kids jump off wharfs 20' high into shark infested waters, this incident wasn't overly dangerous. Their reactions to the skimpy bikini and a buffed physique seem natural. Glad you have some time to write. We have missed your contributions.



Reviewer: GREYWOLF Signed Date: 2010.06.09 - 11:01AM Title: Last of the American Girls

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I was surprised by the content of this story after reading the labels.

I always find it sad when H/G have sex outside marriage because it adds an element of tawdriness to their relationship. Althought one could certainly understand their secombing to the temptation to comfort one another in war time, it would have been much more romantic had they married first.

Chapter 2 was a real downer because I think it very against Ginny's character to marry a man she does not love. Plus it was contrary your having Jackson grow up without a father. I thought the story would be better if you had left this out entirely.

Now chapter 3 was much better and very romantic though I did think the scenario for their kiss a little odd. Most people are not in the mood for romance after a near drowning, needed a little more time there I felt.

I'm not sure if I should continue your story. Given my views what do you advise?

Author's Response: The content shouldn't have suprised you because I very clearly warned of sexual situations and mild language in the warnings. Never do you get explicit sex scenes between Harry and Ginny that would warrant a R rating. If your confused as to the ratings, please read the SIYE guidlelines for ratings and you'll see that it falls completely within that. And if we are to literally understand their relationship and take into account JK Rowling's own comments outside of the series and in interviews about the "passionate" nature of their relationship, I don't believe it's totally out of character for them to have had sex before marriage. IN this case, it's kind of essential to the story...seeing as I needed Jackson to exist. And in chapter 2...nowhere do I say that Ginny doesn't love or never loved Paul. IN fact, she found love in him when she never thought she would again. It is only after understanding that it wasn't that same intense and completely true love that she once had for Harry, that Ginny makes the consensual decision with Paul to divorce. And I think being able to let someone go so that they too can be happy is also a part of love. It happens all the time. And the point was never to have Jackson "grow up without a father," it's to show the effects of him growing up without "his" father. If you've never grown up in a step-parent situation, it may be hard to understand. I didn't want Ginny going 17 years of being single and completely horrible or have Jackson the same way. They both had a pretty good life up until now, but both are missing the one person they wish more than anything was still there. And chapter 3...it was the adrenaline in the near-drowning situation that led to the kiss. That totally vunerable moment for both of them opened up the floodgates and allowed them to act on the feelings they'd both secretly been harboring. And if your upset with the "implied" pre-marital sex in the beginning of the story and the relationship choices for Ginny and Jackson, I don't know what to tell you about the rest of it. I see you already hit St. Margaret's Win-win for the same thing (although, again you were warned there too and I see nothing wrong or explicit about it). At this point....I'll continue to do my thing...you do yours.



Reviewer: Aragorn Signed Date: 2010.06.08 - 06:35PM Title: Last of the American Girls

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You really are a wonderful writer. Nice that you're going to have more time.

Yes, there is part of me that hopes, from his total disappearance at the beginning, Harry will make his reappearance at some point in the story...but I am unattached to that possibility...which is quite a shift for me. Basically, I trust you as the storyteller.



Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for your kind words. And thank you for entrusting me with holding the reigns of this plot...I hoping and anticipating that most people will enjoy whats to come ;)



Reviewer: Phx tears Signed Date: 2010.06.08 - 02:24PM Title: Last of the American Girls

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Aw! That's really cute! But I can't get my hopes up - what tragedy will you throw at this new couple? You've always got something up your sleeve.

I didn't think you'd take us so deep into Jackson's relationships and life but it's interesting, cute, and hopefully it has a purpose :)

I don't know if I said so last chapter but I'm glad you got Ginny married off with a nice bloke and you ended their relationship on good terms. There are soooo many fics with Ginny getting married after Harry's death (or when he's alive) and then having a row with them because of abuse or their jealousy of Harry. Thank you!

Good job!

Author's Response: I do tend to throw a curveball every once and a while, don't I? But It's all in good fun and entertainment I assure you. Adding Anna in as Jackson's love interest was something I needed to do to build up his character and give him some real personality. And plus, Anna is just plain fun to write sometimes ;) And thank you for the comment about Ginny's failed marriage. I didn't want this to be some horrible sob story about how horrible her life has been since losing Harry. It really isn't going to be that :). Will there be tears to come? Yes! I assure you that lol



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2010.06.08 - 11:58AM Title: Last of the American Girls

some times women forget men think 3 feet down when in sight of a beautiful woman...kutgw

Author's Response: Ohhh...I think most women are very aware of what men think about ;) Thanks!



Reviewer: thisgrlrox Signed Date: 2010.06.08 - 11:24AM Title: Last of the American Girls

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I like the playfullness and banter between Jackson and Anna. I'm interested to see how this plays out in the story as it's reminiscent of another couple. Nicely written and I'm looking forward to more.

Author's Response: It they remind you of another couple, that's a good thing ;) Thanks for reading. And I promise you won't have to wait another 6 months for the next chapter!




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