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Reviewer: Harte Signed Date: 2011.11.20 - 04:06PM Title: The Last One...

Hi - I can't review over at LiveJournal but I wanted to thank you for the new chapter. To describe Ginny as lost just seemed like the right word. Teddy was wonderful, your writing expressed a great relationship between the two. I am hoping the next chapter is the big one. Can't wait.



Reviewer: Ciscochic Signed Date: 2011.11.15 - 06:36AM Title: The Last One...

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This is an amazing story! What the heck was Harry thinking? I really hope you're able to update soon. It sounds like Ginny decided to not make the trip? I hope she pays him a visit soon, along with Jackson. That will be an interesting meeting!



Reviewer: drummersgirl Signed Date: 2011.10.20 - 06:49PM Title: The Last One...

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Reviewer: Firestorm2004 Signed Date: 2011.10.20 - 12:16PM Title: The Last One...

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I love your story, and I'm sorry you are feeling the need to move. I will be still reading it on livejournal, but I may not be able to leave comments for you there. For some reason, the site doesn't want to work completely with my computer.

I really like what you've done, and I disagree with a lot of the other reviewers. I feel this story is about redemption, and fixing a mistake made years ago. I don't think anyone can claim they haven't made a mistake before, or made a large one they wish they could go back and do over.

I urge you to keep up the excellent work, you are a great writer, and your style is among the best I've ever seen.

Don't let others destroy your passion!



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2011.10.17 - 12:56PM Title: The Last One...

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Please keep updating here. I have just read through your reviews and you certainly generate a lot of comment. It is a wonderfully original story and the characters are your own developments. I may or may not like them but they are "interesting" and I am desperate to see how you get it all to play out. I am not too sure if I am too old to find your Live Journal page!

Author's Response: I've had some time to think and cool off, and I may post here again. I've continued writing as well, so hopefully I'll be able to continue on. Thanks



Reviewer: Alifromnm Signed Date: 2011.10.17 - 11:07AM Title: The Last One...

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Really nice chapter. I have so enjoyed this story.

Author's Response: Thanks.



Reviewer: destin4fl Signed Date: 2011.10.16 - 10:59PM Title: The Last One...

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awesome simply awesome! the anticipation of harry and ginny meeting again and when harry meets jackson! simply awesome.

Author's Response: I hope that anticipation is building. It's been a long time coming. Thanks.



Reviewer: Harte Signed Date: 2011.10.16 - 04:30PM Title: The Last One...

It was so nice to see that you had posted another chapter. I like that you have Jackson want to talk to Anne. It may have been a bit too expected to have him compare his feelings with Ginny. I also like the way you are handling the meetings with Harry and his wizard friends and family. You included Tonks which was nice and leads me to hope that Remus will be included. The reunion with Mrs. Weasley would be another one of the emotional ones so it was good to separate this from Ginny's. The cliffhanger is whether Ginny will come at all. I hope that will be resolved in the next chapter.

I have read the other reviews and your responses. It will be disappointing if you do not post here again but I am glad that you are continuing the story. A similar issue came up with a story I loved by Kezzabear but due to some reviewers' inability to be mature and considerate, Kezza lost her muse and is not continuing the story. To review the reviewers I would say make your criticism constructive and write your comment only once. If you continue to have a problem with the authors story/writing then stop reading the story.

Author's Response: Remus will be there and he'll struggle with his acceptance and role in this all throughout. And yes, we shall see if Ginny comes at all :) And since last week, I've had a lot of time to think and cool down :) I'm still going to continue to write--I've already done so as time as permitted--but if I post here is still up in the air. It'll get posted, maybe just in my livejournal for a while.



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2011.10.14 - 04:31PM Title: The Last One...

Harry is going in to the unknow, but then again they all are. Ginny and Jackson need to meet on an off time and just have a weekend or week to work out all that has happen with out the help and the rest including Ron and hermione....kutgw

Author's Response: Well...the meeting may very well happen during this Xmas visit, but it def. won't be in front of everyone :)



Reviewer: Emlyn Signed Date: 2011.10.14 - 12:33PM Title: The Last One...

Good emotions in the chapter. I felt extremely frustrated with Ginny's family, especially Ron, Hermione, and Molly. She's been through a lot. Pretty much abandoned. He hasn't made an effort to contact her, for whatever reason, and to me it's not surprising she's not embracing his return to life with open arms. And I certainly don't blame her for not wanting to face him with a son for the first time in front of everyone. Harry sounds like he still has a ways to go to reconcile his two lives. He's made some decisions and now he's going to have to live with the consequences. Looking forward to seeing what happens next. Well done.

Author's Response: She'll have a lot more trouble with welcoming him back and coming to terms with his decisions than everyone else--naturally.



Reviewer: Pilargirl Signed Date: 2011.10.14 - 11:19AM Title: The Last One...

I just came in from school, sick as can be...
This was just what I needed...
there's only one problem!!
I want more!! :D



Reviewer: r3in9 Signed Date: 2011.10.13 - 06:19PM Title: The Last One...

oh and BTW, I love the Harry/Sophie's little scene on the kitchen. Sophie's really cute on how you write about her. I'm still excited to see how the story goes when Harry found out about Jackson. I think I like Jackson's character more than Harry on this story.



Reviewer: tloulee Signed Date: 2011.10.13 - 06:02PM Title: The Last One...

Can't wait for more....absolutely love this story.....

Author's Response: Thanks



Reviewer: r3in9 Signed Date: 2011.10.13 - 06:01PM Title: The Last One...

Reading with most of the reviews, I have to agree most of them. There seems to be a lot of missing from Harry's POV. I don't remember Harry thinking about Ginny, especially when all the Weasley females came except with Fleur (which is acceptable with Molly's explanation) but Harry doesn't seem to notice Ginny is missing or even asked being the only Weasley female missing. IMO, you made the readers assume that Harry still love Ginny even though I don't see any hints that he's still have these feelings or even care about her. I think his focus is on the Weasleys even though it seems obviously he knows that they've forgiven him, but there's no hint of worrying about how Ginny's reaction alone. I would have thought that Harry would think of Ginny for this chapter even just for a little.

And for other reactions from the reviews I've read, I'd say I have the same dislike for Ron, Molly and Hermione's attitude about Ginny. I may have understand little things because they never had the equal pain that Ginny had and that they're not as affected as her.

But all in all, I still love where the story goes and very interesting. Hope you don't keep too long to update!

Author's Response: Thanks. And all further updates will be via my livejournal from now on if you're looking for an update.



Reviewer: dseay Signed Date: 2011.10.13 - 04:12PM Title: The Last One...

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Must say what a wonderful chapter but now we have to wait and see if Ginny will show up. This story is absolutely wonderful and please don't make us wait too long for an update. I know that is cruel to ask of you with real life and all but honestly, your writing style and the story are just so well done that it is difficult to wait.

Author's Response: Thanks. And more than likely the upcoming updates will be posted to my livejournal (found on my bio page) from now on.



Reviewer: Pilargirl Signed Date: 2011.10.13 - 10:15AM Title: The Last One...

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I just came in from school, sick as can be...
This was just what I needed...
there's only one problem!!
I want more!! :D

Author's Response: Thanks.



Reviewer: Birlan Signed Date: 2011.10.13 - 08:05AM Title: The Last One...

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Odd things going on. I look forward to reading more and finding out if things i don't understand make sense later.

Having everyone standing in Harry's kitchen while not having told him about Jackson seems odd to me on many levels. That's not a criticism--I don't know what's going to happen.

I do understand that the decision when and what to tell Harry was left up to Ginny--but at some point doesn't their silence become lying to Harry. And Harry gets a free pass on abandoning their pregnant daughter---or sister, etc. That seems surprising even if saving the world gets you credit for good intentions.

Thanks for posting.

Author's Response: Thanks.



Reviewer: Miss Weasely Signed Date: 2011.10.13 - 07:10AM Title: The Last One...





















Guess what I wanted to say? Just because I am not writing it, doesn't mean I don't have a lot on my mind!!!

Sorry couldn't resist doing this after reading your responses :P. Maybe I have too much time on my hands today thanks to my cold...

Anyhow, a low rating for one chapter doesn't mean I am trashing the whole story or your writing. It's just to say that I did not agree with how you wrote a character. It's your version of him, but to say that your character is feeling something only in your author responses without illustrating it in your writing doesn't speak of great storytelling. You have potential and a lot of people enjoy your writing, which is why you don't get one line reviews and/or low ratings with no reviews.

Good luck with the rest. Let's hope we won't have to play guessing games with Harry anymore.

Author's Response: Thanks.



Reviewer: Green Eyes Signed Date: 2011.10.13 - 06:09AM Title: The Last One...

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Just because I find one or more characters in a scene or in a chapter to be acting in an annoying fashion does not mean I don’t like this story. (Perfectly fine people can be annoying in real life all of the time.) I do like it and I look forward to the next chapter.

That said, I am confused as to why certain characters acted the way they did in this chapter:

Harry: He should have gone to them on hands and knees, seeking forgiveness. I realize that he has a life and ties in the US, but having 20 or more people schlep all of the way to the States to come to him sends a message. It says those people are important to him, but not so important that he can put himself out a little bit and come to them.

Hermione/Ron: Yes, he was your close friend once upon a time, but he was never your lover or the father of your child. For you to so enthusiastically set the terms of the reunion with Harry – without consulting Ginny in any way – and then trying to guilt Ginny into accepting those terms, is both clueless and presumptuous.

Molly (and to a lesser extent, the rest of the Weasleys): Hello! Your beloved daughter/sister is going through a traumatic emotional upheaval, and you are just going to run off and happily spend the hols with the source of that upheaval?

I did really like Anna in this chapter. And, of course, Ginny.


Author's Response: Thanks.



Reviewer: virgie2x2 Signed Date: 2011.10.13 - 04:21AM Title: The Last One...

I read this chapter and took a break before I left this because i didn't want to review straight off my emotions. That and well I was frankly a little afraid too, for fear of being called an Idiot and uptight (by other reviewers) for not just falling down and loving every second of this fic. And I do generally love it, there is just something off that just ...irks me. I liked this chapter and like the story or I would not waist my time here. But there are certain subjects I take more seriously and certain stories that I have higher expectations for and when the writing is good and the story has such potential to be great I tend to review differently. I would never propose to tell you haw to write but there is something off with Harry's point of view in this story. In a chapter that was mostly from his side of things it is a little strange that Ginny was never mentioned, not even when everyone showed up at his house. I didn't need him to go on for paragraphs and paragraphs about it but a glance behind someone or just a sentence showing he cared might have been enough. And I don't buy it when people say they just assume he is having thoughts and missing her even though you don't write about it. This is your story right and you are a writer and I can make tons of assumptions about whats going on in his head or with others in this story but only you know what your vision is here and what direction this is going to take, for all I know he has decided girls are just not his thing and has no idea how to tell Ginny so he is just avoiding thinking about her at all. Plausible, but probably not where this is going. I guess whats lacking here is ANY emotional thoughts about the woman he loved and too many about everyone else. And when Ron went to find Jackson I was liking him a little better but him and Hermione in this chap were back to their holier-than-thou selves. Being someones friend and losing years with them is soooooo different than being the love of someones life and the mother of their child and suffering through the loss and pain of it all alone. They had each other and safely and happiness in a secure relationship where they raised their kid together, they may have missed him but it is in no way the same. And to think someone loves you beyond anything and would never leave you and to find out the did by choice has to hurt, no mater the circumstance. And to expect her to just get with the program and have a Happy Christmas with the crew and to not get why she is a tad stand offish, is a little nuts. It's like they think they are in this odd 4 way relationship or something with the amount of input they (not so gently) give.
Beyond any of this though I can not imagine that someone who obviously puts a lot of time into their writing just wants reviewers to leave a "nice story" review. I leave that for the ones I will most likely never read again and I'll forget about in 5 min. This story had me thinking about it all day good and bad.... and you know what, all chapters are not golden. There have been many a JKR chapter where I thought "WTH is this." If I never read another camping scene again it will be far to soon!!
The complaints here are all the same really (some said more gently than others), and could be fixed easily with a thought by harry here or there and one less by Ron and Hermione. Seems huge by the length of this review but Its really not. This IS a good story though and I hope you really take this review for what it is and not freak out, I'm sure there will be other reviewers to do that for you. And I really don't expect you to change a thing and that's ok ... but the review box was put here for a reason. Thanks for writing and I will continue reading .... (even if you tell me not too ; )

Author's Response: Thanks.




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