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Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2016.01.23 - 04:48PM Title: 4: Settling
Leading us on quite a mystery with this story.
Author's Response: There are many mysteries in the original books, so there needed to be one in this story, too. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with me. Happy reading.
Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2012.05.05 - 07:14AM Title: 4: Settling
Oh goodness, who on earth is doing this? Can the healer still carry out the foreign spell check that was missed. I'm presuming that the original admittance form was not "found" until it was too late fir this to be rectified? Or that was the plan anyway.
I'm trying to work out if dracos sudden addition to the allowed visitors list is going to prove important, you've certainly made sure it stands out. At first I thought that might mean trouble but I actually lihd to think that Draco might actually save Harry at some point.
Ginny is close to collapse and it was interesting, and made sense when the physiotherapist explained it, that Harry is making all these demands and being surly and uncooperative to give himself some control over the situation.
Author's Response: In my preparation for this chapter, I wrote out the entire development of Harry's friendship with Draco and I can tell you that their friendship will be a significant factor later in the story. Right now, Ginny is feeling guilty that the last time Harry was in hospital, Draco wasn't allowed in to see Harry because she hadn't authorized his admittance to Harry's ward. In the meantime, Healer Stilwell will do everything he can to get Harry back on his feet, so he'll enlist the services of the physiotherapist to help Harry and Ginny learn to live with Harry's disability. Thanks for reading and leaving your review.
Reviewer: alzzu Signed Date: 2011.06.17 - 05:29PM Title: 4: Settling
And the plot thickens... I'm sort of glad I didn't start reading this when you first started posting. I may be a little late to the party, but now I at least get to just move on to the next chapter after cliffies like this one.
I really like your take on Ron so far. And that line when Ginny's talking to the receptionist, about how "the first week after an injury for magical people and the first month or more for Muggles is often the most mentally taxing on the family of victim" -- it would be really neat if you could compress a month of healing to a week, wouldn't it? But then again, even if you know the extent of the damage sooner and you heal faster, would the mentally taxing part be any easier in just a week? Or would it just start sinking in then? Sorry, I get a little too contemplative when I'm tired, and again, it's past midnight over here. Maybe I'd just better keep reading, since after the last paragraph it looks like I'm not going to get to sleep any time soon.
Author's Response: I'm with you on waiting a few weeks to see how a multi-chapter story is going to be recieved so that when I get into it I don't have to wait until the next update until I have to; you're right about the fun of getting to forge ahead after a cliffie appears at the end of a chapter. Also, I think we're both alike when it comes to needing to make myself exit out of a website when I'm reading multi-chaptered stories. I often find myself clicking the "next" button just so I know what happens in the story. Nine times out of ten, I end up reading an extra chapter because the story is too hard to close. Hopefully, you eventually did get some sleep after reading the next chapter. Thankds for reviewing.
Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2011.05.02 - 10:51AM Title: 4: Settling
Ah, ha! So there is something sinister going on here beyond Harry's apparent injuried! A very emotional chapter but it's got me very eager for the next update! Great work.
Author's Response: Sinister, indeed. Healer Stilwell is just beginning to unearth the heart of Harry's problems. More on those next chapter. Thanks for reviewing. See you Thursday...
Reviewer: sweetdreamer285 Signed Date: 2011.04.29 - 01:56AM Title: 4: Settling
Your story has struck a cord with me for a reason. My own father has been put on (similar to Harry's) disability early this year and the first few months have been filled with fear, uncertainty and high emotions, not to mention tons of paperwork.
Happily, Dad's recovering marvelously; hoping your Harry here gets a happier conclusion as well.
PS. A-ha! So there WAS foul play involved in St. Mungos. Can't wait till the next episode!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for sharing your personal experiences with me. I'm glad your dad is doing so well; you'll just have to keep reading to see what happens with my Harry. Congratulations on picking up on the hints of foul play at St Mungo's. As they say, this is just the tip of the ice berg. Until next Thursday...
Reviewer: GoDons Signed Date: 2011.04.29 - 12:16AM Title: 4: Settling
Oh no!
Author's Response: Oh, yes! Please come back next week for Chapter Five. Thanks for the stars.
Reviewer: annep Signed Date: 2011.04.28 - 06:54PM Title: 4: Settling
Good job on this story; I especially enjoy the multiple viewpoints as you show how everyone is coping with Harry's injury.
Healer Stilwell's discovery of records tampering is disturbing. Why hasn't he contacted hospital administrators or the auror office? Considering the identity of the auror under his care, I would have thought that Stilwell would have reported the irregularities by now.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you like the story. I'm having fun writing it and am glad you like the format I've chosen. To answer your question about the paperwork, occasionally, forms do get misplaced and it's the responsibility of the Healer who discovered the problem to see that the patient's records are properly maintained. Healer Stilwell, as department head, knows his responsibilities as well as he does his procedures. When the form first went missing, it was just a minor annoyance which Stilwell thought would be cleared up quickly. When that didn't happen, he tried to get the original back immediately and he followed up on his original complaint with the records office until the form was returned to the folder. I think it is safe to say that once he noticed the differences between the original and the copy, he did report his findings at least to the records office administrator. There will be more about the form next chapter. Thank you for your concern. I appreciate your thought-provoking review.
Reviewer: Rosina Ferguson Signed Date: 2011.04.28 - 06:01PM Title: 4: Settling
I am really loving this story. Thank you so much for writing a story set in this time frame, there are so few out there that are worth reading.
My only reservation is that, as a Brit, I wish you would have your story read over by a Britpicker before posting. I know its a point of trivia but it irks me when I read things like Devonshire! The county is usually just referred to as Devon and the shire only added when referring to the Dukedom ... not a common occurance.
Also as someone who works for the National Health SERVICE and has done for over 20 years, I would like to say that no one is EVER asked to fill in insurance forms when someone is admitted to hospital. The only information that is ever requested is medical history, prescription history and contact information. We use PAS forms, PAS standing for Patient Administration Service. They only ask for relevant information like Doctor (please use GP and not MD - not that you did) and next of kin.
Your story line still works though because when a patient is admitted via A&E (Accident and Emergency) Admission forms can still be incorrectly or incompletely filled in which can result in errors in patient care. My own job is as an X-ray secretary where poor dictation can easily result in mis-treatment. A missed off "no" for example. "No ..... seen." when reporting a film or reporting on outcome of a physician examination. Plot point possibly?
Anyway, I feel that you have got James spot on in this chapter. A sense of responsibility towards fellow Gryffindors as well as to his Dad, even a touch of the marauder by not letting Albus in on the cure. Wonder if that is clue as to how to treat Harry?
Roll on the next chapter.
(Contact me if I can help with Britpicking, I would be only to pleased to help, especially in view of all the many hours of please I have had from reading your numerous fics.)
Author's Response: Thank you for writing to me about the mistakes I've made in this chapter. Your constructive criticism is something I can learn from and apply to future chapters and the writing of those I edit for. Please look for a personal message from me as I appreciate your offer of Britpicking help. I'm so glad you like James in this chapter. I like to think that he's trying very hard to be mature and the one his brother and sister can lean on while still retaining his sense of childish playfulness. Sirius and James, Sr. would have been proud of him and the prank, I think. Until next Thursday...
Reviewer: Emlyn Signed Date: 2011.04.28 - 05:27PM Title: 4: Settling
They must have great security. Not only does the opposition know where Harry is, they are able to get on the grounds and get close enough to observe him and injure him. Hopefully what Healer Stilwell has discovered will make a difference. Another good chapter. The tension is mounting. I'm glad there are people around to help Ginny cope with the stress.
Author's Response: Before you criticize hospital security too quickly, I'd like you to consider all the possibilities of how the opposition might learn of Harry's whereabouts. I'm interested in what you come up with. As a hint, all I'll say is that there are clues everywhere in these first few chapters that you might have missed due to the how emotionally involving the plot is. I'm glad you like the story and the fact that Harry and Ginny are surrounded by people who are willing to help them. Thank you for reviewing. Until next Thursday...
Reviewer: hot48cricket Signed Date: 2011.04.28 - 03:42PM Title: 4: Settling
Questions answered lead to more questions!!! Hopefully Stilwell can remove whatever is making Harry not recover!
Author's Response: You're absolutely right about the questions. And until they're all answered, there will still be a mystery to solve. All I can say about your wish is... wait until next Thursday... Thanks for reviewing.
Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2011.04.28 - 02:09PM Title: 4: Settling
It is emotionally draining reading this story, but I think the last couple of paragraphs gave us a big clue.
Author's Response: I agree that this story is emotionally draining because it's been emotionally draining to write! And you're correct, this chapter was full of clues... and anything can be a clue to this mystery. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Reviewer: Birlan Signed Date: 2011.04.28 - 02:00PM Title: 4: Settling
Interesting story. I'm a little surprised that Harry doesn't have some form of visible protection at the Groves--both as a celebrity and as somone, who has many enemies(presumably). He's completely vulnerable without a wand or some form of bodyguard.
As for Ginny, I like how you show her uncertainty in dealing with Harry. Its incredibly difficult for families and friends in that situation--she isn't going to want to use her usual approach when Harry is so devastated and disabled. And I like how you are giving the explanation for why Harry is acting as he is.
My only question is why does it matter where the Groves is--if wizards can apparate or take the floo, couldn't the Groves be in the Orkneys, and its just as "close" to the Burrow by floo as if it is nearby physically? That's probably a comment more about JKR however than your story since she keeps suggesting that physical proximity matters to wizards more than it should.
Oh yeah, and why is Draco on the friend's list? Just kidding. Its your story and if you see that happening, I'm not complaining.
Thanks again and I look forward to hearing more from this story.
Author's Response: Because The Groves is mostly a Muggle facility, it was thought that "hiding" Harry there was protection enough. The Ministry made a mistake in assuming that because he seemed fully protected at St Mungo's, so even though they're going to provide extra protection in future chapters, it's very much a case of closing the barn door after the thestral escapes. And to address your question about the location of The Groves, I decided it had to be somewhere within resonable driving distance because of how Harry was to be transported between St Mungo's and the new facility: due to his numerous and recently healed injuries, his physical condition didn't warrent transportation by Floo and definitely not by Apparation. I also chose Ottery St Catchpole as the location because I discovered by accident that Ottery St Mary (the village JKR renamed for her books) actually has a hospital and it seemed appropriate to me to put The Groves in its place. As for Draco being on Harry's Approved Visitors list, the reason will be made known in a few chapters. I appreciate your thoughtful review.
Reviewer: ladyginny89 Signed Date: 2011.04.28 - 09:53AM Title: 4: Settling
OH MY GOD! Harry better not die or I'm gonna bawl my face off! I can't wait for more!
Author's Response: I'll ask you one question... would there be eight plus more chapters (and counting) if Harry was going to die? You might need to cry over other things in the story, but killing the hero isn't one of them. Until next Thursday... Thanks for your review.
Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2011.04.28 - 07:12AM Title: 4: Settling
Poor Harry! Well, I didn't cry reading this chapter so that is a plus. I hope Healer Stilwell can get to the bottom of this or at least let someone know what is wrong.
Author's Response: Poor Harry, indeed. He's definitely the victim here, but because Healer Stilwell is dedicated to getting to the bottom of the mystery, the answers will be unearthed. I'm glad you didn't cry this chapter. Thanks for reviewing.
Reviewer: Miss Weasely Signed Date: 2011.04.28 - 06:17AM Title: 4: Settling
Really liking the story, however, the one thing that irked me was Ginny's reaction to Harry's outburst. It seemed OOC on her part to let someone else pull up Harry for being so unreasonable. I understand her reaction in this situation would not be the usual Ginny reaction, but the meek, 'Thank you' seemed very out of place.
That aside I love the emotioanl nuances of this story, It's beautifully written. Really looking forward to the next update.
Author's Response: On of the reasons Ginny seems out of character is that in real life people aren't themselves in times of crisis like this. There is so much uncertainty, so much that is unknown and unfamiliar that it's very hard to act like yourself. Besides, in the scene you're referring to, the person chastising Harry for being unreasonable is the person he's going to be working with on a daily basis, a sort of teacher/student relationship. If Ginny were to jump in and not let the 'teacher' be the authority figure, Harry would most likely take advantage of the situation and compromise his own healing by thinking he can get away with being sullen and uncooperative. This happens all the time in real life, too, and because I'm trying to make the story true to life, with Harry's injury a main element and not just a means for furthering the action, there will be situations you'll probably not like at all. Please continue to tell me about them. What I explain to you may help another reader. Thanks for reviewing and I will see you next Thursday.
