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Reviewer: seaswimmer Signed Date: 2011.06.16 - 10:26AM Title: Chapter 9

I'm enjoying your story and your take on it all (although I tend not to be a great fan of swords and knives and things - I'm just a bit of a purist about pure magic I guess!) One comment though: you have your own voice and way of telling the story. I know there are times where you want the same things to happen as did in the originals; but that shouldn't stop you telling them your way. When you paste in JKR's words, because a lot of readers know the stories so well it stands out very clearly. Since you probably know the stories just as well - if not better! - it might be an idea to write your version of the passage and then go back to check it out; that way you could keep your story in your voice but still be sure that you've been true to the original before sharing with us.
Well done on what you're doing!


Author's Response: Thanks for the advice and the kind words. I've taken them into account, and I'll most likely take your advice for all but some of Dumbledore's speeches at the beginning of the year. Truly, thank you for the words as they made me rethink a few things for later on in the series. Thanks for the reviews.



Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2011.06.15 - 10:35AM Title: Chapter 9

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I doubt Harry will have a quiet year somehow... :)
looking forward to reading more

Author's Response: Does he even know what a quiet year is? Lol. Thanks for the review,



Reviewer: hot48cricket Signed Date: 2011.06.13 - 07:14PM Title: Chapter 9

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Awe, come on! Let Ginny prank Ron - that's what siblings do!!!! lol

Author's Response: Haha. Who says she didn't on her own? ;-P Thanks for the review.



Reviewer: zeta_one Signed Date: 2011.06.13 - 09:58AM Title: Chapter 9

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As you said, not much happening this chapter, but stuff that needs to be in for the story to progress.

Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: Yup. Thanks for the review.



Reviewer: dshadel Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 07:42PM Title: Chapter 9

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Good chapter, as for the song as I was reading it I had to wonder how you keep coming up with them. Out of the 100 and 100 of storys I have read the vast magorty of authers just skip them, i love how you do your own and make them fit the story so well. Looking forward th the next update

Author's Response: I wrote the Songs from fourth year on all at once, just getting them out of the way. I just feel that I should have them as they not only add to my plot with the hints and clues but also make it a Harry Potter story. Thanks for the review.



Reviewer: jojo99 Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 04:04PM Title: Chapter 9

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Nice work. I'd like to see Ginny prank Ron - no matter what Harry says!

Author's Response: Haha. Who say she didn't in the end? :-P Thanks for the review, Jo.



Reviewer: harryluvsginny Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 12:48PM Title: Chapter 9

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I don't even know what to say about this chapter except that I really liked it. :]

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and that's enough. :)



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 11:35AM Title: Chapter 9

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I am going o bet a thousand galleons that Harry gets involved in the Tri Wizard Challenge.

Author's Response: Don't think I'm gunna take that bet, mostly because I already know what's going to happen. Maybe someone else will take it? :-P Thanks for the review.



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 10:27AM Title: Chapter 9

Well at lease they are making head way but Harry was right about warning the group about Ron...kutgw

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.



Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 08:32AM Title: Chapter 9

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I liked your rendition of the sorting song.
Good chapter all over.
Looking forward to the next update.

Author's Response: Thanks. The songs weren't really all that easy to write. Thanks for the review.



Reviewer: LeprechaunJV Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 07:59AM Title: Chapter 9

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Good Chapter - new blood to the group.

What of the Marauder maps on the journals - would they not be viewed and identify the wrong person polyjuiced as Moody. Or is this the real Moody.

Look forward to your update.

Author's Response: I'm not going to answer that question, mainly because the story will answer how the Maps are used eventually. Thanks for the review.




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