Reviews For Return of an Alpha
Reviewer: seaswimmer Signed Date: 2011.06.16 - 10:26AM Title: Chapter 9 I'm enjoying your story and your take on it all (although I tend not to be a great fan of swords and knives and things - I'm just a bit of a purist about pure magic I guess!) One comment though: you have your own voice and way of telling the story. I know there are times where you want the same things to happen as did in the originals; but that shouldn't stop you telling them your way. When you paste in JKR's words, because a lot of readers know the stories so well it stands out very clearly. Since you probably know the stories just as well - if not better! - it might be an idea to write your version of the passage and then go back to check it out; that way you could keep your story in your voice but still be sure that you've been true to the original before sharing with us. Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2011.06.15 - 10:35AM Title: Chapter 9 I doubt Harry will have a quiet year somehow... :) Reviewer: hot48cricket Signed Date: 2011.06.13 - 07:14PM Title: Chapter 9 Awe, come on! Let Ginny prank Ron - that's what siblings do!!!! lol Reviewer: zeta_one Signed Date: 2011.06.13 - 09:58AM Title: Chapter 9 As you said, not much happening this chapter, but stuff that needs to be in for the story to progress. Reviewer: dshadel Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 07:42PM Title: Chapter 9 Good chapter, as for the song as I was reading it I had to wonder how you keep coming up with them. Out of the 100 and 100 of storys I have read the vast magorty of authers just skip them, i love how you do your own and make them fit the story so well. Looking forward th the next update Reviewer: jojo99 Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 04:04PM Title: Chapter 9 Nice work. I'd like to see Ginny prank Ron - no matter what Harry says! Reviewer: harryluvsginny Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 12:48PM Title: Chapter 9 I don't even know what to say about this chapter except that I really liked it. :] Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 11:35AM Title: Chapter 9 I am going o bet a thousand galleons that Harry gets involved in the Tri Wizard Challenge. Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 10:27AM Title: Chapter 9 Well at lease they are making head way but Harry was right about warning the group about Ron...kutgw Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 08:32AM Title: Chapter 9
Reviewer: LeprechaunJV Signed Date: 2011.06.12 - 07:59AM Title: Chapter 9 Good Chapter - new blood to the group. | |||||||
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