Reviews For Return of an Alpha
Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2011.10.05 - 07:19AM Title: Chapter 29
Reviewer: seaswimmer Signed Date: 2011.10.04 - 12:47PM Title: Chapter 29 I was really pleased to see Harry's reaction to Cedric's death - complete, utter gobsmacked shock. It hadn't really occurred to me that we don't see it described often, until I read it here - very well expressed. Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2011.10.04 - 12:40PM Title: Chapter 29 One of the most evil cliff hangers I have come across. Are you sure your initials are not T. M. R.? Reviewer: stark40763 Signed Date: 2011.10.04 - 09:13AM Title: Chapter 29 Well, I don't know if the Minister is at the Task at all, but when Voldemort starts having his conversation with Harry, I don't see how he can deny it...though knowing him, he'll find a way. Reviewer: hot48cricket Signed Date: 2011.10.04 - 12:41AM Title: Chapter 29 Why does everyone kill Cedric? Waiting to see why! Too bad Dumbledoe hadn't researched Tom Riddle after he changed his name to Voldemort - then he'd know where the graveyard was!!! Reviewer: LeprechaunJV Signed Date: 2011.10.03 - 10:18PM Title: Chapter 29 Great chapter.......... Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2011.10.03 - 05:17PM Title: Chapter 29 yea i remember the armor and the way it worked...does not mean we all like it that way...as for the cliffy u just did just POST FAST or we send the house elves after u to make it and test me dobby is ready right now with the trick to get u to update quickly....kutgw Reviewer: Stephen Signed Date: 2011.10.03 - 04:06PM Title: Chapter 29 Ahhhhh, the pain....must update soon.... Reviewer: Jewels Signed Date: 2011.10.03 - 03:04PM Title: Chapter 29 Well I can't say I'm surprised that Cedric's dead. I had a feeling it would go that way. His death while sad, was very powerful and will be a huge rallying point for the side of light. When I first read you introducing the scrolls a few chapters ago I was a little concerned as to what that would mean for the graveyard seen. So far i think you dealt with that challenge brilliantly and I really enjoy that addition to the story. I would like to know what Sirius and Remus is doing at this time because I think that with research about Voldemort and horcruxes,they would know where the bones of his father could be found. I picture them getting ready for a rescue mission although I feel that Harry will actually escape on his own. I would like to see Cedric final request of Harry and to be picked up by the necklace and his parents to know his final request, but again you have so many wonderful plot ideas that I'm sure however you've written it will be wonderful for the story. Looking forward to Wednesday and the next chapter. I really want to know how this all plays out. Reviewer: Birlan Signed Date: 2011.10.03 - 12:41PM Title: Chapter 29 I enjoy your story--its different, creative and has a lot of good and different ideas. The only thing that I find jarring is your repeated usage of the phrase "almost twin" to describe Tracy and Harry's relationship. Its your story and its your premise and its magic so maybe its possible but every time I read that, it stops me cold. And frankly I'm not even sure what it means to describe beyond a closeness where they think the same, react the same, etc. Which really isn't that common even among twins. And I don't think they show that closeness in the story. They are very close but they don't seem to think identically. The characters that seem to react the most similarly are Ginny and Tracy--but they are like Hermione and Ginny in canon--sharing a fondness for and concern about Harry which leads them to similar attitudes towards him--even when one is romantically linked and one is not. | |||||||
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