Reviewer: DukeBrymin Signed
2011.11.30 - 04:52PM
The Shelf of Seven
"Harry paid no attention to his surrounds and instead focused on the ceiling above him" Isn't that paying a LOT of attention to his surrounds?
I can't quite picture Lucius cursing like a Muggle.
Harry doesn't have his invisibility cloak? Okay, if he lost it, why didn't he disillusion himself before entering Potter Manor?
How could he remember how large the library is if he hasn't stepped foot in there for over twenty years? How old is Harry?
"a blank page with only tall and neatly hand-written words on it" Um, then it wouldn't really be a blank page, would it?
Now he has his cloak on? When did that happen? And why was he worried about blending into the shadows?
Anyway, interesting beginning to what is most likely a redo!fic, right? Looking forward to more.