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Reviewer: Aragorn Signed Date: 2015.06.17 - 09:22PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
I recall this from several years ago. Look forward to where you've been taking it!
Author's Response: Hope you like where the story goes, too! Thanks for taking the time to re-read the first installment!
Reviewer: Aragorn Signed Date: 2014.04.05 - 11:20PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
Nicely done...
Author's Response: Thank you
Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2012.12.31 - 05:01PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
Nicely done. I think you captured Molly's character perfectly!
Author's Response: Thank you. I was afraid she may come across as too overbearing, so I'm always happy to hear I managed her character and the situation she has been placed in well.
Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2012.11.25 - 05:04PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
I'm definitely interested to find out if Harry does end up at The Burrow...
Author's Response: We'll see...:)
Reviewer: Spenser Hemmingway Signed Date: 2012.11.21 - 11:10AM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
A very dramatic hug; I liked it. I'm glad that Molly is avoiding the hysterical mother routine that might be expected. That is not to say that she's not demonstrating appropriate concern. You've given us a couple hints amore bout what's coming, and I think it's going to be nice. I'm also glad that Molly reconsidered Ginny and Luna. One point however; Molly would know very well who Hagrid is since he's been at Hogwarts for fifty-some years. I'm looking forward to whatever is coming now.
Author's Response: I never recall Molly flying completely off the handle - sure she gets upset, but there's always a modicum of control there. I had someone else mention the point about Hagrid and I suppose when I wrote this I wasn't thinking that Hagrid was more than likely the groundskeeper at Hogwarts when Molly attended. I think I will rewrite that scene a bit to reflect that. Thank you for brining it to my attention.
Reviewer: Unrequited Signed Date: 2012.11.18 - 01:40PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
No Review
Author's Response: Thank you for the stars!
Reviewer: gryffins_door Signed Date: 2012.11.01 - 10:38AM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
Nice start - some unique twists on a well-used theme. I had my doubts about this challenge, but the scene with the doe at the end of the meadow chapter was worth any number of overdone cliche's, so thanks for that. One note on this chapter: Hagrid and the Weasleys (except Ron and Ginny) would be no strangers since Hagrid was at Hogwarts during their schooling as well. You may want to fix that. KUTGW!
Author's Response: I agree it's a well-used theme and I hoped I was able to add a bit of a twist to it, glad you thought so too. I was thinking that perhaps Hagrid may have never personally met Molly, since it's not usual for parents to actually visit Hogwarts. At least, that seemed to be the case in the books. The only time I recall the Weasleys visiting is if one of their children was sick or to support Harry during the Tri-Wizard tournament. Thanks for commenting!
Reviewer: Aragorn Signed Date: 2012.10.25 - 09:01PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
A promising premise. Thanks.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: cateyes033 Signed Date: 2012.10.25 - 01:57PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
Really great so far, I hope to see more.
Author's Response: Thank you and thanks for the stars.
Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2012.10.24 - 10:28PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
Great start to your story. Looking forward to reading more.
Author's Response: Thanks!!
Reviewer: alterdream Signed Date: 2012.10.24 - 02:28PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
Oh, excellent :) I can't wait to learn "what just happened" hehehe. Everyone's character seems believable enough although I would have expected the twins to try to make some fun of the situation.
Author's Response: I think even the twins are overwhelmed at this point. Glad you liked it and thank you for commenting.
Reviewer: Lunzatis Signed Date: 2012.10.24 - 12:30AM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
Great two first chapters to what seems to be a great story so far. I understand this story was started for the challenge but I truly hope that you'll continue this story even after the challenge ends. I eagerly await the next chapter.
Author's Response: Glad to hear you are enjoying this story so far. It has been fun to delve into a different world and outcome for Harry and Ginny. Hope you enjoy the rest just as much. Thanks for reviewing.
Reviewer: DukeBrymin Signed Date: 2012.10.23 - 11:36PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
Great chapter, absolutely wonderful! And of course, we're all dying to find out what happened from Ginny's point of view.
Author's Response: Thank you. I am so glad to hear you enjoyed this chapter. Ginny's POV coming soon.
Reviewer: Emlyn Signed Date: 2012.10.23 - 09:10PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
I love the way you morphed into this. It would be nice if Molly actually heard what was being said to her. Glad to see that Dumbledore was at least a little concerned about Harry's living situation. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Oh, that's nice to hear! I was hoping the leap wouldn't be too jarring. I wanted to keep the story interesting and also to add to the suspense of what happened when Ginny woke up. I am afraid all Molly can think about at this moment is the danger Ginny may be in, and that is quite understandable.
As for Dumbledore, it was always annoying to me that he continued to send Harry back to an abusive home simply for his own protection. Surely, he could have come up with a better way to keep him out of harm's way. After all, he never really did such a great job of that while Harry was at Hogwarts either, so what difference did it make where Harry actually lived for a couple months out of the year? Simply negligent on his part, and he's lucky Harry didn't turn out to be a psychopath just like Voldemort.
Reviewer: seekers_destiny Signed Date: 2012.10.23 - 09:04PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
The prologue seemed promising but I'm not sure what it had to do with the rest of this story (or at least this chapter). This chapter had some good banter during the breakfast scene and the shopping trip was also pretty good. I'm hoping you have something new to bring to the soul bond story as it seems like there have been many. You ended with a pretty good hook though. I'm anxious to find out what happened from Ginny's point of view.
Author's Response: I hope it will all become more clear to you in the next couple of chapters regarding the potion. Remember, Dumbledore has already stated that the potion is not the cause of the soul bond itself, but merely opened Ginny's eyes sooner to what might be. Not to mention, that Ginny and Luna used a cauldron that Luna hinted to never having been scoured properly. Who knows what magical essences and residual ingredients from past potions still lingered that were mixed with the potion Luna and Ginny brewed.
I also hope you will find my take on soul bonding to be a bit different than others, or at least Harry and Ginny's initial reaction to it. I tried my best to breathe some new elements and ideas into a very over-used and abused topic. Did I succeed? I suppose only the readers will be able to tell me when it is all said and done.
Reviewer: cartman1701 Signed Date: 2012.10.23 - 08:00PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
Fantastic story you have so far. I never get bored with soul bond stories, unless they are horribly written. Your portrayal of Molly is a good one. At this point she has no emotional attachment to Harry, all she knows is some boy possibly harming her daughter. Keep up the good job and I look forward for the next update.
Author's Response: Thank you and so glad to hear you liked my portrayal of Molly. I really was hoping readers would feel she was in character and that I hadn't made her too overbearing. Thanks for reviewing.
Reviewer: Old guy Signed Date: 2012.10.23 - 05:26PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
Excellent start. I look forward to reading future chapters.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. Hope you like the rest as well.
Reviewer: smokeylovegood Signed Date: 2012.10.23 - 05:14PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
An interesting story thought out and told well. Molly will never learn to stop blowing up and being over protective. One issue - check your use of "irregardless". "Irr" means "not" so you are saying "not regardless", it's irrespective or regardless.
Author's Response: Molly is a mother, of course she is going to be over-protective at times, especially if she thinks her children are hurt or could be. Thank you for the grammatical note - I made that change. Thanks for commenting!
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2012.10.23 - 04:55PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
and the hits just keep on comin....kutgw.......one of thee days molly is going to rethink about blowup first question later policy....
Author's Response: Ah, but that is a Weasley weakness, or should I say Prewitt weakness, because when has Arthur ever allowed his emotions to get the better of him? The Weasley children definitely inherited that trait from their mother. Glad to hear you liked it.
Reviewer: sidnandragin Signed Date: 2012.10.23 - 04:24PM Title: Chapter One - The Encounter
I liked this chapter. I enjoyed the very concerned Molly realizing that there are forces beyond her control since her daughter decided to create and drink a potion. Leads for a very different adventure to be had by all. :)
Author's Response: Glad you liked it. Yes, Molly definitely has cause to be concerned. I think the lesson learned here is to not leave children unattended, especially magical ones because they can get up to all kinds of mischief. :)
