Reviewer: MerlinzBallz Signed
Date: 2013.08.17 - 05:31AM
Title: The Swiss Valley of the ICWW
The piece had picked up a little bit in your story which I appreciate. It seems for awhile there you were so detail oriented with every minute detail. Frankly I was surprised that you weren't informing us of the color and consistency of Harry and Ginny's bowel movements.
Now then, the Rothschild family, frankly they are more evil than Riddle and I find it curious you keep mentioning them. Their empire for many intents and purposes runs the world and many believe they are leaders of the New World Order,.or illuminati if you will. The family has caused more suffering them any other family on the planet and I am not sure if you glorifying.their "greatness" by paint their wealth onto Harry, our perhaps villifying them. It SEEMS most likely you might be ignorant to who they really are and what they actually do.
That being said, carry on!
Author's Response: I appreciate a detailed review. I am trying to cut. I started this story at another site, and eventually abandoned it to start over. A good brutal Beta reader would help. I’ve had a couple, but am still looking for a good long term one to help me prune. For Your Information, I have cut chapters from the previous story, and am going through the next story trying to cut out material that is not needed.
I knew who the Rothchilds were when I named the old Regents. I’m personally not much for conspiracy theories. Any theory that the Jews or the Masons or some other group REALLY controls the world does not seem to be based on fact. I think life is much messier than that. One of my favorite sayings is that, “For every problem in the world there is a solution that is simple, obvious, and wrong.” I think conspiracy theories are a lot like that, a re-writing of history that makes everything simple, obvious, but the theory is just wrong.
My Rothschild family may have been connected with the old banking family a very long time ago, but not recently. They will disappear from the story at the end of this story, and I don’t believe they are even mentioned in my next 4 stories in this series.
Jet LaBarge
Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed
Date: 2013.08.15 - 09:00AM
Title: The Swiss Valley of the ICWW
Good chapter.
Loved all the house elf information.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: House elves, Goblins, and the relationship between them is a central theme in the story.
I hope you like the conclusion to this part of the story, and the start of the next.
Thank you.
Jet LaBarge