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Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2015.09.06 - 01:45PM Title: Chapter 2: The After World

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Oh the Malfoy family. Is this post Goblet of Fire? I am trying to decipher how old they all are.



Reviewer: CharLee Signed Date: 2015.08.02 - 08:47AM Title: Chapter 2: The After World

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Reviewer: DukeBrymin Signed Date: 2013.09.30 - 02:10PM Title: Chapter 2: The After World

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Very intriguing.



Reviewer: freshwater Signed Date: 2013.09.01 - 10:02PM Title: Chapter 2: The After World

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They walked....fifty miles.....to Hogwarts, dragging Harry's dead body?

The whole Fidelis Anima is pretty deus ex machina, but I could go with that for the sake ot the creativity of it. But walking 50 miles, in one night?

Author's Response: Thank you for pointing out that hole, I will fix it.

Author's Response: I have fixed the distance. It is now three miles.



Reviewer: Spenser Hemmingway Signed Date: 2013.08.21 - 08:13AM Title: Chapter 2: The After World

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Your story is getting interesting. I will admit that it's putting me in mind of the application of the Resurrection Stone from Deathly Hallows. I'm not sure if I just the Malfoys to be completely changed yet, but, either way I foresee some plot bunnies springing in. Their interaction with Ginny is especially well-handled. A fifty mile walk back though--ouch! Once again, I can't wait to see where this goes and especially what this new magic involves.



Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2013.08.21 - 05:32AM Title: Chapter 2: The After World

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That is a very interesting idea. I hope you finish the story.



Reviewer: I Love Ginerva Signed Date: 2013.08.18 - 04:30AM Title: Chapter 2: The After World

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Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2013.08.16 - 08:55PM Title: Chapter 2: The After World

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Interesting chapter.
I am enjoying reading this story and wish you luck for the challenge.
I hope that, even though the challenge has ended, you will finish this story.



Reviewer: ProfessorBinns79 Signed Date: 2013.08.16 - 05:15PM Title: Chapter 2: The After World

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It is unfortunate that you didn't finish (or at least get further along) this story before the challenge ended. As usual, you have some interesting ideas, but (also as usual) they will depend on how well you can explain them so that the story makes sense. I've found your earlier efforts wildly creative, but you've not yet managed to attach one well enough to canon for me to really be able to latch onto it and understand and enjoy it fully (I'm thinking here mostly of "The Middle," which I see has been taken down. That was you, wasn't it? If not, my apologies for critiquing you based on another author's work.). I had trouble placing this story in the timeline, but I'm now guessing fall of Harry's sixth year; however, it definitely has some AU aspects. If you continue the story, you will need to explain any divergences from canon.

So far, this is my favorite of your stories. If you continue, I will be interested to see how Voldemort and "Tom" both exist (Did the Chamber incident go differently, or was it something else?) and how Harry can be brought back. I will also look forward to finding out whether this "Fidelis Anima" will end up with characteristics normally associated with "Soul Bonds" or if you go a different direction with it entirely.

Thanks for participating in the challenge. I was really hoping more people would write something for this one.



Reviewer: seekers_destiny Signed Date: 2013.08.15 - 09:17PM Title: Chapter 2: The After World

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First I want to say that overall I thought this chapter was pretty good. However, I have a lot of things to point out. First, Lucius says that they are about 50 miles from Hogwarts. It would a LONG walk back - try days. It's bad enough that Ginny can't seem to do a proper weightless (I thought it was featherweight) charm but neither of the Malfoy parents can do one? when you had Draco helping her and acting almost friendly I got the creepy feeling you might be using him helping her to establish a connection between Draco and Ginny. Fortunately, I don't think this is the site for that. The dialog got a little repetitive. You've gone AU on why Harry would survive an attempt to kill him by Voldemort but I assume that is on purpose based on Dumbledore's reaction. I thought for sure that Lucius knew that Ginny was Harry's match based on their insistence on Ginny's influence. However, based on the last conversation Lucius doesn't appear to know.




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