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Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2014.05.15 - 03:24PM Title: Chapter 2: I Choose You
I can understand hermines concerns about going back but Harry needs his little slice of heaven. Kutgw
Author's Response: Harry definitely does. I think Hermione needs an anti-anxiety potion most of the time; then again, its her worrying that keeps Harry and Ron safe most of the time.
Thanks for reading and revieiwng,
MNF
Reviewer: MyGinevra Signed Date: 2014.05.15 - 02:20PM Title: Chapter 2: I Choose You
Very enjoyable to see your Marauders like this, Mutt, from an outsider's point of view, yet someone who was not quite an outsider. Their old personalities, the ones from your great novels, are there but not too strong, as they would be to someone like Harry, watching from a physical and emotional distance.
Author's Response: You know how I feel about these characters; even the canon ones are mine now (although I might need to wrestle a few away from JKR). Writing them is so comfortable and so easy, doing something like this was actually a bit difficult, as I couldn't give too much away. Thanks, MNF
Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2014.05.14 - 09:21PM Title: Chapter 2: I Choose You
Excellent story! To be honest, I was grumbling mightily that by August 1998, Harry was not yet ready to take Ginny on this peaceful, fulfilling experience... but I am forcing myself to be objective and congratulate you on a well written piece!
Author's Response: Harry is only three months out from the Battle of Hogwarts. I know people tended to fall in love quickly in the HP world, but from a mental health standpoint, three months is a rapid time to get over all that had happened to Harry. I think he and Ginny would still be in early phases of their relationship, and that if he was going to be so vulnerable, he'd want Hermione with him. Just my thoughts on it
Glad you enjoyed it otherwise, MNF
Reviewer: Hippothestrowl Signed Date: 2014.05.14 - 10:30AM Title: Chapter 2: I Choose You
This is well-written, although I was confused by the detail together with lack of clarity of some situations. I thought Harry and Hermione were hunting Horcruxes and staying at a cottage? Then I wondered if the cottage start is already in the past? Also, was the 'castle' part of the Potter estate? Ironically, Harry's parents seemed like ghosts in this account and I missed them completely on first reading, especially Lily's entrance (which is normally a wedding highlight for me.) I think it was because of a kind of indirect reference to them instead of direct, and especially without any dialogue. Compare Pettigrew who was solid, defined, described, and had a voice and a place, and a purpose.
That apart, it is a good overall descriptive piece and maybe the next chapter will bring it together for me.
Author's Response: I'm sorry you got confused about when the story started. The date, August 1, 1998, is clearly stated on the first page of the first chapter. The final battle has taken place, and Harry has already taken over the properties and finances of the Potter and Black names. That is how he and Hermione have ended up at the cottage, they're living there to be away from the public.
The castle was a Potter family property, again as referenced in the bold part before the chapter text began.
Harry was witnessing things, which might be why James and Lily seemed so far away. He knew he couldn't interact with them, or any of the Marauders really. That he had any interaction with Peter was simply a fluke which he couldn't really avoid. He and Hermione went back with express intent NOT to change anything.
I hope you do find the next chapter more helpful,
MNF
Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2014.05.14 - 12:40AM Title: Chapter 2: I Choose You
I think it is very sweet that Harry wanted to see his parent's wedding. Why Hermione? I'm a bit disappointed that he didn't take Ginny.
Author's Response: I can understand your disappointment, but I in my mind, Harry has deeper trust with Hermione than he does with Ginny. It isn't that he loves Hermione, because he doesn't, but he does trust her completely. I think their time on the run made it okay to be vulnerable in a way he's just not comfortable with Ginny yet. If you really stop and think about it, they only had a few weeks together as boyfriend and girlfriend and they're weren't that close before then. Sorry to have disappointed you some. Hope the last chapter makes up for it.
MNF
Reviewer: Trucker Signed Date: 2014.05.13 - 07:29PM Title: Chapter 2: I Choose You
All life, all love ends with pain, disasters, problems, death... but to live without love would be far, far worse than any pain, disaster, or problem... and it would still end in death.
Author's Response: This is true, but I know from the drama my life has been the last few months, love is the only thing which makes the pain, disaster or problems worth living. Glad you appreciated the chapter, MNF
Reviewer: Lokken Signed Date: 2014.05.13 - 04:56PM Title: Chapter 2: I Choose You
Very nicely done! Bravo!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it. One more chapter to go.
MNF
Reviewer: Lokken Signed Date: 2014.05.13 - 04:54PM Title: Chapter 2: I Choose You
Very nicely done! Bravo!
Author's Response: Thanks. MNF
