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Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2016.10.20 - 12:20PM Title: Chapter 17 Triwizard Champions

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I absolutely love Neville's defense of the house-elves. His grandmother seems to have done a wonderful job of teaching him about and to respect the elves under their care. I'm very glad Neville suggested Hermione go talk to them, and even shared his own stories with her, because unlike in canon, she actually listened and decided that she needed to get to know her subject better before trying to force her own views on an unwilling subject. My son and I have had several conversations about this very subject and you've managed to cover every aspect we've discussed succinctly and happily, to my satisfaction!

GRRR! A meddling headmaster always gets my hackles up! I know he likes to have a finger in every pie, but Anna doesn't need anyone needling their way into her mind or her past!

All in all, well done.




Author's Response: I'm pleased you liked the conversation about house-elves! I rewrote that section several times trying to get it just right. Hopefully, Hermione being willing to listen and have a bit of patience was believable. Yes, indeed, the headmaster likes to get involved in everything! Thank you so much for this review!!!



Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2016.10.17 - 04:07PM Title: Chapter 17 Triwizard Champions

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ANOTHER TERRIFIC CHAPTER! I REALLY AM LIKING HOW YOU INTERWEAVE CANON WITH AU! GLAD TO SEE NEVILLE AND ANNA TAME HERMOINE AND SPEW ! VERY INTRIGUED BY ANNA AND THESE ABILITIES IN HER COMING TO LIGHT! VERY CURIOUS! ::D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! I just had to include a bit about SPEW, and Neville seemed the obvious choice to fill in some facts for Hermione!



Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2016.10.15 - 08:17PM Title: Chapter 17 Triwizard Champions

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Oh, Anna’s reactions to an unforgivable is surprising ... on the other hand, it’s probably not, right?
I suppose that Dumbledore will simply forget to look into Anna's family history to understand her abilities. He’s a busy man, isn't he? In the books, he never properly tried to prevent damage from his students, especially from Harry (and especially when Malfoy is the culprit). So why should he do it now.

You already said that you'll stick to the canon. Hence it was to be expected that Harry is one of the champions. Now I'm curious how his friends will react. I suspect that Ron will turn his back to Harry, just like in the books. Hermione will try to convince Ron to believe Harry. But she'll not be able to support Harry because she's too busy with convincing Ron to believe Harry. Anna will probably believe that Harry has no interest in participating the tournament. Because of her dark background, she could probably assess Harry better than anybody else. However, she's not close enough to him to tell him that she on his side. Neville and Ginny? So far, they didn’t really care for Harry and I don't see a reason why it would change.
On the other hand, I don’t think that Harry should worry, in canon he survived the first task even without the help of his so called friends, right? Well, Anna is the main character of the story, so I guess that she'll be the one who'll help Harry at the end.
... and now I'm really curious how well I've guessed, lol.


Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review! Dumbledore is indeed a very busy man, and as brilliant as he is, he does tend to miss things. I am generally sticking to canon, although I must admit we will be straying occasionally rather soon. Your guesses are of course quite close!



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2016.10.15 - 05:45PM Title: Chapter 17 Triwizard Champions

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Not unexpected, but it makes things look interesting for the future.

Author's Response: Yes, indeed, dragons will be coming up soon. Thanks for the review!



Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2016.10.15 - 09:11AM Title: Chapter 17 Triwizard Champions

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I really liked the scene where Neville and Anna explained to Hermione about the house elves

Author's Response: Thank you very much!!!




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