SIYE Time:14:32 on 30th July 2021

Reviews For A Tale of Two

Reviewer: nayin1704 Signed Date: 2018.07.21 - 09:32PM Title: Prologue

I can't wait to read the next chapter and hopefully you'll finish this story.

Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2018.03.15 - 02:13PM Title: Prologue


I agree with your other reviewers. You need to do something about your spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes. They detract from the story and leave the reader with the sense that you don't care about what others think of your writing. I was also disappointed that the first thing I read was your author's note that stated that you doubted that you'd finish the story in time for the deadline. My question to you is this: why bother submitting the story if you know you're not going to finish it on time? The rules clearly state that all stories must be marked as "complete" by the end of the submission period.

That said, you have an interesting beginning to your story. I hope you will eventually finish it so that your readers will have a sense of closure to your tale.

Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2018.03.14 - 11:22PM Title: Prologue


I hope you are able to finish this in time for the challenge. Interesting concept, can't wait to see where you go with it. I have to agree with the other reviewers - find a good beta or proof reader.

Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2018.03.09 - 09:01AM Title: Prologue

P.S. If you want me to do the checks for you, please send me an email:

Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2018.03.08 - 01:26PM Title: Prologue


Interesting start, I'm curious where they'll end up. The name Malfoy in the summary, already makes me fear the worst.

Did you ever consider registering for a free account on Grammarly? It's quite helpful. You could verify and correct basic errors in your text within a few minutes. For Harry Potter stories you could even change the settings to British English. For advanced checks, you'd need the premium version but I think it's not necessary.

I did a short check, and Grammarly found 10 spelling errors, 7 grammar errors, as well as 3 punctuation faults.

Reviewer: Ranma-sensei Signed Date: 2018.03.08 - 01:46AM Title: Prologue


I like your story - in concept.

In practice, it is in dire need of a second and thrid once-over by you or your beta.

Still, I'm gonna watch this.

Keep narrating,

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