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Reviewer: Aragorn Signed Date: 2020.12.23 - 09:58PM Title: ii.
Not sure how many reviews you've gotten...but you certainly should be!
Reviewer: MichiganMuggle Signed Date: 2019.10.16 - 02:15PM Title: ii.
Good for Ginny! Both for pushing Harry into visiting Teddy and for standing up to Ron.
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2019.06.17 - 04:46PM Title: ii.
The ones we really miss are never going just on vacation....kutgw
Reviewer: Bluest Witch Signed Date: 2019.03.11 - 01:15PM Title: ii.
This looks very promising. I love post war fics; I too wrote one and it was fantastic. I’ll keep reading, I’m delighted to find your work.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'll look up your fic too, I'm sure it's great! <3
Reviewer: Renaugh22 Signed Date: 2019.02.10 - 11:02AM Title: ii.
As you updated on my birthday (#84)I decided to read your offering.I am glad I did. I know this story has been told a hundred times and ways but there is always room for another offering, another authors inspiration. So far you have done very well. It is an easy read;an enjoyable story well told. It is your story, tell it the way your imagination and talent leads you. I think soliciting ideas from the reader is letting others dictate your direction and your talents. If you have a Beta reader that is an experienced author then by all means take their input.
Details, details. Painting a word picture. Dialog well flushed out. Keeping this in mind will add breath and debth to you story. dialog is such a pain to write but it ads so much to the tale. Continue to write in this vain that is so easy to read. Nasty jolts and sharp kinks and bumps tend to take the story off course.
Profanity is never necessary and certaily no asset to your writing. It does not make you a more accompolished or mature writer. Using profanity is just pandering to the purient interest of the semi-literate. It demeans your charactewrs and you the writer. Always strive for the higher plain and the beauty in the well written word.
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Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2019.02.08 - 03:50PM Title: ii.
Good story, but the use of the present tense all the way through makes it feel a bit odd sometimes.
Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2019.02.07 - 07:03PM Title: ii.
Another nice chapter! Like that you brought Teddy into it! Still a lot of raw feelings and tension around the Burrow! One suggestion I'd make is to write the story like you are telling it instead narrating it -- in other words, instead of saying things like "He Says she says" use "he said she said" instead! Keep at it and don't be insecure - you are doing well! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D
