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Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2023.11.04 - 10:31PM Title: Chapter 58

Detention with Dolores. Ugh! So glad the Hush Putty is such a success and that Harry and his fellow detainees are able to shake off the whispers within a few minutes of leaving their incarceration. Teenagers are such good actors!

I'm glad Harry is happy that the Slytherins are succeeding at the defensive spells they're learning, especially the Patronus Charm. His conversation with Blaise and the other Slytherins made me smile because he readily praised their efforts and found a topic they could all agree upon. Harry's conversation with Blaise about taking o a leadership role is very well done. You take the viewpoint of both Harry and Blaise into consideration and show both sides equally so that the reader understands where each is coming from: especially Blaise's need to either stay neutral or actually choose a side. That's a big decision for someone their age, considering the ramifications if Voldemaort does win eventually.

Finally, it's interesting to watch Harry learn that other people need to think about protecting others and not just him. Harry has learned a little about what it's like to be a Slytherin, I think.

Well done.

Author's Response: The conversation between Harry and Blaise was one I spent lots of time refining and going back to edit, so I'm thrilled that it worked well for you. I'm not personally a fan of Draco, but having a complex and nuanced Slytherin was something I really wanted to do. I like examining Blaise as a way to better understand the broader setting. I think you're right that Harry learned a great deal from the conversation. Thanks for the great comment!

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