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Reviewer: piltad Signed Date: 2008.09.18 - 12:43AM Title: Prongs
Very good though don't know about the ending though I mean sounded to me as if it was just one you need to be a bit more discreptive for your readers since to me sounded like one of them and that didn't make sense and than you end it on a bad not to I think no a bunch of ppl freaking out but just one person coming up and giving a chocolate bar seems like no one was even bothered by what was going on and do hope that you let Harry have some fun and pull some pranks wish JK would of had him do that.
Reviewer: CodeRomance Signed Date: 2007.08.06 - 09:39PM Title: Prongs
right ok that was a bit lame...but for the most part it was good!
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Reviewer: Ginny_Weasley568 Signed Date: 2007.04.21 - 06:07PM Title: Prongs
Nice Work! I love this story so far.
Reviewer: JPotterNY Signed Date: 2007.03.16 - 06:16PM Title: Prongs
Looking good so far!
One typo I'd mention... '“,” she whispered.' about 5 line from the end
Reviewer: morgie Anonymous Date: 2006.03.22 - 03:14PM Title: Prongs
Ahhh, young love. Yes, i can find fluff at the most unoppertune time.;) It's a gift.
Reviewer: Dianne Anonymous Date: 2005.08.16 - 10:50PM Title: Prongs
Good chapter for sure. One type o I noticed was .. they walked about ten minutes down Diagon Alley when the air around them turned cold and THE sun got almost blocked out. (you had 'he' instead of 'the' I do stuff like all the time!! Also, there's a repeat in the ending that may be just the way it ended up getting posted, but no big deal at all. I like the action in this chapter and the fact that you seem to be moving right along as far as the pace of the story goes. A Dementor attack in the second chapter is sure to keep your readers interested, myself included. Some stories take too long to get on with things and this isn't one of them, thankfully. I don't know how wise accepting a chocolate bar from a stranger is...but that's what makes stories interesting for if readers question every little aspect, they wouldn't be able to enjoy anything would they? Fred and George were perfect in this chapter and I really love their characters so I hope you can fit them in some more in your story. So far, so good!
Reviewer: hattiepotter Signed Date: 2005.01.04 - 07:27AM Title: Prongs
Another great chapter - loving the end! There's quite a lot of dialogue but that's more interesting anyway so I don't actually care! On to the next chapter after lunch!
Reviewer: Lourdes Anonymous Date: 2004.12.31 - 01:43AM Title: Prongs
Good chapter
Reviewer: purebloodwitch Anonymous Date: 2004.08.11 - 11:52PM Title: Prongs
Jod well done on captivating the impossible hracters of Fred And George weasley.
Reviewer: Elizabeth Anonymous Date: 2004.04.18 - 01:47PM Title: Prongs
it's very difficult to write fred and george in character. but you've done it flawlessly! lol! Ginny would never *punish* Harry, would she? Heh
Reviewer: rach Anonymous Date: 2004.01.10 - 08:49PM Title: Prongs
aww this is real good! update!!
Reviewer: lizzie Anonymous Date: 2004.01.09 - 07:32PM Title: Prongs
perfect! Go on please! the interesting part is near? as the job until now was great, I am terribly mad at reading what is coming! lizzie
Reviewer: Angie Anonymous Date: 2004.01.09 - 11:19AM Title: Prongs
Great job, I just love Fred and George and you did a great job writing them. Keep it up. Cheers
Reviewer: Ana Anonymous Date: 2004.01.08 - 08:43PM Title: Prongs
This would sort of seem like book 6 except it is going very very fast. But if there's another good part coming up..I'm up for it! Keep it up!
Reviewer: MythWeaver Signed Date: 2004.01.08 - 04:28PM Title: Prongs
Again, very excellent chapter! I look forward to more!
Reviewer: Belle Anonymous Date: 2004.01.08 - 02:51PM Title: Prongs
This reminds me of how JKR would start off the sixth book!! Wonderful stuff, Fire! Please keep up the good work!
