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Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2010.09.25 - 06:33PM Title: Confrontations
The portraits in this secret room puts a bit of a dampner on things. but at least they get to spend time together. i know you said you would try to use events from canon so i am wondering how much of dean and ginny you are going to use.
Reviewer: txreina Signed Date: 2008.02.17 - 07:55PM Title: Confrontations
OMG that was one hell of a shocker. I guess I kind of knew that Stepan's son would also be a target like Harry but I never guess that they would be related to Dumbledore.
Reviewer: Demosthenes03 Anonymous Date: 2006.07.03 - 08:25PM Title: Confrontations
HAHAHA!!! Dewey cheatum and howe....puns...so much fun....i've read the prequel and this so far into the story, its great. i really enjoy it...i usually don't like the super power Harry and all, but you pull it off well.
Reviewer: ComJim Signed Date: 2006.06.21 - 12:53AM Title: Confrontations
LOL Dewey Cheatem and Howe. I love it. Great Story so far.
Reviewer: Rain Signed Date: 2006.04.21 - 09:17AM Title: Confrontations
I am soooo in love with this story! Please keep writing and updating it....i am dying from anticipation here....you have definetly "passed the addiction" on to me :)
Reviewer: lucky_black_cat Signed Date: 2006.04.15 - 05:19PM Title: Confrontations
You have created a wonderful original character. I really like Stephen Hunter, how he seems so cold and distant to others but that's really his mask, a means to hide from the pain of the loss of his family. I specially liked his comment about 'being summonned like a house elf', it made me laugh. He says things without meaning them to be funny, but they are - he's got the best sense of humour. Please update soon, I can't wait for the next part. Thanks! -Sonia
Reviewer: williow Anonymous Date: 2006.04.15 - 10:25AM Title: Confrontations
ooo!! yay!! with all the changes to this site i only just found this chapter and i am soooo excited!! i've waited so long!! i think i'm gunna have to come back and read it again to properly digest all that happen (was too excited first time round!)
Reviewer: Xfactor Anonymous Date: 2006.04.10 - 10:53AM Title: Confrontations
Excellent chapter. I'm glad they are going to be getting some alone time. At least we now know why Stephen and Dumbledore are at odds. Update soon!
Reviewer: Mariposa Signed Date: 2006.04.08 - 01:33AM Title: Confrontations
Yea! A new update! I hope things are going well for you and your family :o)
OK the portraits in the room bite! and I thought that thier bond was a legally binding marriage. Anyways besides that I'm glad Dean got obliviated and that got H/G to spend some time together. Hunter's story is so sad but its cool he gets to be such a great mentor for Harry. And I can't wait to see Remus again but thats beside the point. Great chapter and I'm eagerly waiting the next.
Mari
Reviewer: kbhend Signed Date: 2006.04.07 - 12:15PM Title: Confrontations
Hi,
First I want to say how much I like your writing and to thank you for sharing your work. I hope you won't mind some questions/concerns I have.
It almost seems like the story has been written by two different people divided either on island vs post-island or divided on pre-HBP vs post HBP. The earlier half of the story seems to be much stronger than the second half. There are a number of reasons:
1. You seem to be "forcing-in" things from HBP that are not really needed (the scene with Harry and Ginny and Dean for example).
2. the continued separation of Harry and Ginny seems absurd to me. You have written over 100,000 words of the "woes of Harry being separated from Ginny" and still decide to continue it upon their return in an almost comical manner. Isin't it time for Harry and Ginny to move their relationship along. I hope the "separation" business is not the main vehicle to move the plot ahead.
3. Ginny seems out of character when she decides to date Dean and is just *using* him and even recognizes that.
4. Dean gets obliviated without any concern for his rights or feelings on the matter with no one really complaining or speaking up about it. So much for Dean being a friend!
5. Harry/Quetzl the upcoming defeater of Voldemeort can not even beat Stephan in a simple duel, and is completely brought to his knees by Ginny and Dean's kiss. This seems very strange after you spent the time to build up a "super-Harry" on the island with lots of training, fighting lethifolds, winning in a magical contest against an expert foe, etc.
6. Snape's almost normal conversation with Harry seems out of place completely given that a potions "master" must surely have recognized that Harry was under a potion (and decided to lie about it) if Stephan could easily see that fact. Since Snape is Voldemort's potions maker, Snape probably was the one to brew it. Please don't try to redeem Snape in any way. As JKR said, he is a "horrible person" and most probably is only out for himself (and has been all along).
All of these issues seem to make the second half much weaker than the first half, at least to me.
So ... IMHO please don't feel tied to using HBP points, your original story is stronger without them. And please stop the separation woes of Harry and Ginny from driving the plot and instead move their relationship forward. Over 100,000 words of separation is enough.
All of the above is just my 2 cents, so feel free to ignore it completely :-)
And as always, thank you for sharing your story!
Kevin
Reviewer: Sibling Creature Signed Date: 2006.04.07 - 08:48AM Title: Confrontations
I thought the whole separation thing was idiocy... but pretending to date someone else, who thinks its for real, seems like its asking for trouble... still.. at least they'll get some alone-time now, even if they won't be unobserved... :-)
It's also good to finally learn a bit more of Stephen's story.
Thank you for posting, I was beginning to wonder if you'd abandoned SIYE for PS altogether. I look forward to your next chapter. :-)
Reviewer: melindaleo Signed Date: 2006.04.07 - 07:33AM Title: Confrontations
Awesome chapter, KEDme. I really like this one. I loved Harry's reaction and how it's emotions that still get the best of him. Very fitting. I also liked how you portrayed Dean sympathetically. He really has no clue, poor boy. I also liked how it was Ginny who refused to give up and walked Harry through rebuilding the wall. I can't wait to see their "detention".
Reviewer: Chreechree Signed Date: 2006.04.07 - 04:27AM Title: Confrontations
Well, we knew that Stephen blamed Dumbledore for his wife and son's deaths, but I was surprised that they were targeted because of the prophecy. That must make Stephen's relationship with Harry all the more bittersweet. Oh, and Stephen has never been to their graves? So sad. The family connection to Dumbledore is an interesting twist as well.
Snape. Why on earth does Dumbledore try to include Snape in issues having to do with Harry? It's not as if by including him he can hope to make Harry and Stephen (and the rest of the Order for that matter) warm up to this kind, misunderstood, and repentant soul. No. Snape, the cruel and bitter man that he is, has no interest in trying to get along with anyone at all. He antagonizes the situation just as much if not more than Team Harry does, so he clearly has no interest in a civil level of interaction. Didn't Dumbledore learn his mistake after the occlumency fiasco?
Poor Dean. Your line about the rift that one boy didn't understand and that the other couldn't forget was wonderfully precise. Dean thinks Ron and Harry are being overprotective and unreasonable but has no clue that he has no business pursuing Ginny. I believe I said in my last review that Ginny needed to be careful. It's not fair to lead him on. Look what it did to Harry - even though he knew better he still can't always control his emotional response. Harry doesn't need the added stress of watching his bonded partner even pretend to date someone else. No wonder it was so disastrous for Harry. Leave it to Stephen to give them detention so they have an excuse to be together. I hope he disappears and let's them have some unsupervised (by teacher or by portrait) alone time.
Well, you've done it again. This chapter was exceptionally entertaining. This story continues to keep me utterly enthralled. I simply adore it. Keep up the excellent work, Kathy!
~ Christine
Reviewer: quine Signed Date: 2006.04.07 - 03:48AM Title: Confrontations
*squeals* UPDATE! Thanks for easing our suffering slightly...just slightly...
Reviewer: gemz1313 Signed Date: 2006.04.07 - 03:23AM Title: Confrontations
This was a brilliant chapter. deffiantly worth the wait.
I feel so sorry for harry, when he walked in on dean about to kiss ginny, it must have been heartbreakng even if he knew deep down that she was acting.
I don't really see why ginny didn't tell harry earlier that she was going to let dean ask her out. but never mind! at least now harry and gin get to spend some time together alone.
Poor stephen, no wonders he's not best friends with Dumbledore! that was a great twist!
Really well written, i hope the next update is just a little bit quicker!
10/10
Reviewer: witowsmp Signed Date: 2006.04.07 - 01:20AM Title: Confrontations
Great chapter. Ginny's going to have to find another way to hide their relationship. Dating Dean will only lead to trouble because Dean genuinely likes her and will want to snog her. She should just say she doesn't want to date anyone. If any boys don't like it, she can hex them.
Reviewer: Ima Quidditch Fan Signed Date: 2006.04.07 - 12:36AM Title: Confrontations
The Ethelred the Ever-Ready statue cracked me up! Excellent chapter, very funny, some sadness/angst and great fluff. What more could we want - well, more! Thanks again for the wonderful update.
