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Reviewer: beryl Signed Date: 2011.06.07 - 07:44AM Title: Chapter One: Messages
Back to correct a typo in an earlier review. Its "MS. Word", not "Ms. Word."
Reviewer: Ginny Guerra Signed Date: 2008.10.03 - 08:55PM Title: Chapter One: Messages
The story feels right, but watch your spelling, especially with canon, such as names like WEASLEY.
Reviewer: piltad Signed Date: 2008.06.02 - 02:01AM Title: Chapter One: Messages
well it is a very well written story really like how descriptive you are. But one thing that did make me cringe was the whole Luna letter just didn't sound like her just wasn't luna enough. Though I did really like your Harry/Ginny stop gap of luna for now it looks like I haven't really ever seen any that go that way.
Reviewer: Silver Cat Anonymous Date: 2005.07.05 - 01:17PM Title: Chapter One: Messages
Good story. I am enjoying it, and it's very good for your first try
Reviewer: Wispy Veil Anonymous Date: 2005.04.25 - 07:40AM Title: Chapter One: Messages
Out of all the Harry Potter fanfics I've read, your description of Harry's physical appearance (2nd paragraph of your story) is by far the best. It's well-worded, a good visual image, and concise. I know that may seem to be a rather small thing to comment on, but to me it's the small things that make a story stand out (that's why JKR is so excellent!)
Reviewer: AKA_Hagrid Signed Date: 2005.03.03 - 07:53PM Title: Chapter One: Messages
Truly an amazing story. I think I scared my wife while I was reading the battle scene. I just sat there with my jaw unhinged. Still am, come to that :-) Really looking forward to the sequel.
Reviewer: Hexnut Anonymous Date: 2005.01.29 - 05:43PM Title: Chapter One: Messages
Harry has now gone, what, a year and a half desperately longing for Ginny and stubbornly refusing to tell her a thing about it? If I were her, when he finally does get the balls to say something about it, I'd be pissed off all over again for wasting so much time. Or is he going to wait until she's married and has kids? Sorry for the rant, I've liked your story enough to keep reading but this is getting frustrating.
Reviewer: blaubaerin Anonymous Date: 2005.01.13 - 06:33PM Title: Chapter One: Messages
Wow, this is your first story?! I nearly cannot believe it because your style flows so easily and it all seems to continue JKR's storyline naturally. Everything is very well-described and feels... right. I really like how you have Harry confiding in Luna, many authors just tend to forget about her even though she had such a powerful scene with Harry at the end of the last book. All in all great job! I'm looking forward to reading the other chapters when I've got more time.
Reviewer: Gillian Anonymous Date: 2005.01.13 - 04:01PM Title: Chapter One: Messages
I just started reading your story and I love it already! The first three paragraphs are brilliantly written! Very descriptive, and JK stylish! Amazing job so far!!
Reviewer: Lourdes Anonymous Date: 2004.12.05 - 01:46AM Title: Chapter One: Messages
Excellent first chapter. Very descriptive. Well thought out. There is just one error. Harry, in your story, is 16, not 17, therefore, he cannot do magic in a month's time and will not be free of the Dursleys until the 31st July year after your chapter 1 summer time. Apart from that, very well done indeed.
Author's Response: Ah. Slight misunderstanding here. He is 16, since this is just before his 6th year, but when I said free of the Dursleys it was because he was due to leave for the Burrow at that time, so he is free of them for another year: maybe I should have made that more clear. Thanks for the complements, though :) -Tom
Reviewer: emmamoonpotter Anonymous Date: 2004.12.02 - 04:49PM Title: Chapter One: Messages
Good start to your story. I enjoyed the insight into Harry and his ability to open up to someone and voice his problems. Surprised it was Luna, and now Harry believes Luna likes him. I would suggest to look over your story before you post, it contained a few spelling errors and run on sentances. All in all a good story. I will look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Oh dear. I didn't mean to suggest hear that Harry believes Luna likes him. I'm trying to make him rather clueless about what anyone else might be feeling. Looks like I failed ;) -Tom
Reviewer: destin4fl Anonymous Date: 2004.12.02 - 03:26PM Title: Chapter One: Messages
good job you have set the tone for the next chapter well... misunderstandings and teen love and angst! waiting for the next chapter
Reviewer: Heidi Anonymous Date: 2004.12.02 - 03:23PM Title: Chapter One: Messages
I get down on my knees!!!!! That was great, I really loved the story as well as your writing style. Keep it up. So if you've finished the 2. chapter where is it????
