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Reviewer: mrsmeggiepotter Signed Date: 2007.08.29 - 02:49AM Title: Chapter Thirteen: Admission No Review Reviewer: Chreechree Anonymous Date: 2006.01.18 - 09:40PM Title: Chapter Thirteen: Admission OK, I was going to wait until I was finished with the entire story before reviewing (since I'm reading it in one sitting), but I have to stop and comment now. First of all, I love this story. It is very well plotted, well written, and simply entertaining. You've managed to make Draco and Snape sympathetic figures (something lots of fics attempt but, in my opinion, don't often successfully manage to do). Harry's agonies are well portrayed. The reason I'm compelled to remark now, however, is the brilliance of this last scene. I too love to welcome a storm, so I relate strongly to how alive it can make you feel. The fact that he told Ginny then, in a moment where he feels empowered and invincible, rather than during the stereotypical serious and somewhat helpless moment he even foresaw himself, was inspired. What an exhilarating moment you've written. Brilliant! Reviewer: XiaoXiao Anonymous Date: 2005.01.14 - 01:34AM Title: Chapter Thirteen: Admission Very nice. I do wish he'd just tell her how he feels, though. I have a feeling she'd react differently than he thinks. Reviewer: Neely61 Signed Date: 2005.01.13 - 09:00PM Title: Chapter Thirteen: Admission Do we want a sequel? You're kidding, right? Ya know, I've read probably hundreds of HP fanfics through all genres and I have to say yours has been, and still is, one of the most enjoyable. Don't even think about giving up on this! Reviewer: Serpentspawn Signed Date: 2005.01.13 - 07:57PM Title: Chapter Thirteen: Admission *gives Lourdes the Evil Eye* Oy! You're stealing -my- big brother and beta-ee! *grabs Tom and shoves him into a lock-box* There. Now he can't do anything. *blinks* Oh, crap, he can't -do- anything! *opens lock-box and gives him a free internet-connected computer, restockable fridge, self-emptying chamberpot and puts the bill into Lourdes account* There you go. No you can keep writing! *to Lourdes regarding the bill* Sorry, I still need to get that paycheck for being a lawn ornament since I was born....:D Reviewer: Lourdes Anonymous Date: 2005.01.13 - 12:01PM Title: Chapter Thirteen: Admission Excellent. Just one: he was instead of he were. Just a slip of your fingers, I am sure. A short way of saying "what needs to be done" is "needs must" and that was from a New Zealander ! You are really trying to use shorter sentences. Very well done. Short and sweet maketh drama and intrique. Better short sentences than prolific use of colons, commas and semi-colons. Trust me. I am a fan of yours and these do distract if overly used. Rarely, very dramatic. Grammatically, short sentences. I would encourage you to do a sequel. You have a wide range of vocabulary. You research material and you tend to use difficult words. I think you should vent these and channel it into writing. I just have one reservation. Ginny is behaving like an unreasonable bundle of emotinal erratic female. Sorry. Perhaps that was over the top but I am still confused about Ginny's personality. Be it as it may, excellent storyline. Well done. | |||||||
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