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Reviewer: piltad Signed Date: 2008.06.03 - 12:24PM Title: Chapter Fourteen: The Best Birthday
Well had a slight slip up there the Prefect choosing happens before 5th year not after but still good story.
Reviewer: mrsmeggiepotter Signed Date: 2007.08.29 - 03:03AM Title: Chapter Fourteen: The Best Birthday
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Reviewer: XiaoXiao Anonymous Date: 2005.01.16 - 01:12AM Title: Chapter Fourteen: The Best Birthday
*sigh* Nothing ever goes perfectly right for Harry, does it? Not even gaining his majority. Ginny is so in love with him, even if she doesn't know it yet. About the Arthur stuff...well, I've got an idea, but I won't say anything. ;-)
Reviewer: amulder Anonymous Date: 2005.01.15 - 02:46PM Title: Chapter Fourteen: The Best Birthday
Hmm, while Harry may have "lent" Ron his broom, I think actually that he "leaned" against the wall... ;-)
Oh, and a prefect badge for Ginny? But those go out in 5th year, and this is for 6th.
Author's Response: The first is a mistake: I meant leant, not lent. As for the other thing, it's all explained in the next chapter. Tom
Reviewer: Lourdes Anonymous Date: 2005.01.15 - 01:56PM Title: Chapter Fourteen: The Best Birthday
I do not think smashing your head against the computer will help, dear. Actually, I have read over 100 fanfics in nearly 3 years and yours have very few errors, mostly grammatical with emphasis on punctuation and tenses. You also tend to write very very very long long sentences, almost a paragraph's worth. However, you have been trying really hard to minimise these errors. Your strengths are: creativity, originality, research, good vocabulary, imagination, description. This chapter, for example, aptly decribed scenes, character, emotions and conversations. It depicted depth of appreciation for humanity, love, goodness, evil, fear, redemption and confusion. Well done.
