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Reviewer: noylj Signed Date: 2007.03.21 - 03:40AM Title: Chap 10 - The Party
Oh, oh, I remember a part of the story I haven't read yet...Harry keeps thinking that the twins are charming him to feel something for Ginny, whereas (perfectly with their character) they are charming one or the other not to kiss. It takes Harry forever to wake up and smell the coffee. Dumb git.
Reviewer: Torak Signed Date: 2005.11.02 - 08:18PM Title: Chap 10 - The Party
Am I seeing things, or did I just see the word "kinda" in the narrative? In dialogue, fine, but in the body text spoken contractions should never appear.
Sorry, I'm a bit of a grammar nazi, but things like that really irritate me.
Still enjoying the story, though, I just wish it was written with a bit more regard for the language... ;-)
Author's Response: Grammer Nazi's are welcome. I never turn down help. As far as the narative, I think you are referring to Harry's or other's thoughts. Yes you will find grammer errors. People that I know, don't think with proper grammer. Hopefully it won't ruin the story for you. I'm working on it. - - - Since you have continued, at least I have sparked your imagination. =)
Reviewer: Moony32 Anonymous Date: 2005.06.11 - 07:42PM Title: Chap 10 - The Party
Loved the descrpition of Ginny's dress.
Author's Response: Thank you very much... Harry liked it too.
Reviewer: Treck Signed Date: 2005.05.06 - 10:24AM Title: Chap 10 - The Party
Hmm... I'd have bet the farm that they were practicing dancing in the sheets. *Grin*
Author's Response: Harry's jaw dropped and his face went scarlet
