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Reviewer: Jill Anonymous Date: 2005.06.05 - 11:38PM Title: Chap 22 - Christmas Ball
You've done an excellent job of being true to Rowlings writing style, with your own flare. Keep up the good work, especially the really good "extra details" that make this fanfic not just about Harry and Ginny, but how they interact with the whole world of Harry Potter.
Author's Response: Wow! Your review is very kind. =)
Reviewer: David Wolfskill Anonymous Date: 2005.06.03 - 05:13PM Title: Chap 22 - Christmas Ball
OK; Ginny's conversation wiith Harry about the
dress going to the Ball is officially Weird. :-)
Umm.... instead of "They would look well," may I
suggest "They would look good?"
I think "that the would wait" should read "that
they would wait."
Umm... "all the more greener?" I could believe
"all the greener," or "all the more green," or
perhaps "even greener."
Perhaps "I've got an idea" instead of "I got an idea?"
OK; story is basically good (notwithstanding some of the above notes), but Harry's realization (up at his dorm, at the end of the chapter) seems awfully sudden.... And we don't even see much about Ginny's reaction to their time together....
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. You are really good at grammer. I appreciate your comments. - - - Harry KNEW he got hit again immediately, because of his previous experience. =)
Reviewer: oceanblue Anonymous Date: 2005.06.03 - 03:50PM Title: Chap 22 - Christmas Ball
i wish he would just wake up and realize that he needs her to be stronger and defeat voldemort....and i hate the new ron i cant believe he would date those girls or do whatever he does with them......any ways i love your story hope you write another part soon!!
Author's Response: Ron is still in a "learning stage". There will be more about Ron later. =)
Reviewer: Treck Signed Date: 2005.06.03 - 07:33AM Title: Chap 22 - Christmas Ball
Wonderfull. Are Ron's dates related to the Malfoy's? Sounds like they had Dracos IQ (Or lack thereof)
Author's Response: =)
