Reviews For HB Prince: Year of Love
Reviewer: Ghetto DRaco Malfoy Anonymous Date: 2005.11.20 - 07:43PM Title: Chap 28 - Valentines Ball I now officially hate you. It's nothing personal, you just happened to put Harry and Ginny in an angsty position. So I just want you to know that I officially HATE YOU!!! Reviewer: Torak Signed Date: 2005.11.02 - 11:03PM Title: Chap 28 - Valentines Ball Still a fair few Americanisms creeping in, most notably "diapers"; on this side of the pond we use "nappies".
Other than that, the usual still applies. Oh, and one thing I forgot to mention a few chapters ago: Hagrid's appearance was brief, but was well written and definitely in character. Good work. Reviewer: David Wolfskill Anonymous Date: 2005.06.16 - 12:17PM Title: Chap 28 - Valentines Ball Interesting; still good. Notes:
"Was his kisses that good" should probably read
"Were his kisses that good."
"She hadn't even wrote Tonks" should read "She
hadn't even written Tonks."
"whole day in her dorm. Checking everything"
should probably read "whole day in her dorm,
checking everything."
"It lie over the gown" should read differently;
possibly "It lay over the gown" (but that sounds
weird with the rest of the sentence).
Extraneous comma: "asking her a few
meaningless questions, that she answered politely."
I'm having a bit of trouble parsing "She was lovely dressed and
groomed."
"more format shot" should probably read "more
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