Reviews For Harry Potter and the seventh year
Reviewer: hhhhhhhhhh Anonymous Date: 2005.10.04 - 01:54PM Title: Summer at the Dursleys m Reviewer: hhhhhhhhhh Anonymous Date: 2005.10.04 - 01:54PM Title: Summer at the Dursleys m Reviewer: LuckyHP Anonymous Date: 2005.08.11 - 03:03PM Title: Summer at the Dursleys Keep up the very good work! Reviewer: Professor Scroll Signed Date: 2005.08.10 - 11:30PM Title: Summer at the Dursleys The story is very disjointed and therefore hard to follow. If you don't have a beta, you need to find one. There are many run on sentences, grammatical errors and areas that a beta could help you with. If you fleshed it out a bit, added description and emotions, you have the basis for a interesting story. Try not to rush your way through the telling of it. Take your time and lead the readers on the path with words. Reviewer: what? Anonymous Date: 2005.08.10 - 08:26PM Title: Summer at the Dursleys I'm sorry, but what are you trying to say? | |||||||
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