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Reviewer: LoonyHamdi Signed Date: 2011.04.03 - 06:51PM Title: Meltdown
Hi...may I say that your the reason I barely slept last night?
Well its because of your fantastic writing and how your moulding this story.... I'm new to this site and your story is one of the first I stumbled in... and I'm so lucky! Wow I don't want it to end! I'm on chapter 27 and maybe I should slow it down to drag it out you know! I get you still haven't finished the story but I hate the wait for updates :'(
thanks for writing this beautiful fic and I wish you the best XDXD
Hamdi
Reviewer: Grownupron1 Signed Date: 2011.03.16 - 02:21PM Title: Meltdown
Hermione is absolutely correct, the entire thing is incredibly stupid.
Reviewer: phunt Signed Date: 2010.07.15 - 03:20PM Title: Meltdown
Fascinating...your story has so many elements that I haven't seen in any other stories. Unlocking the core...socerers...curators...it all makes for a very compelling and interesting story. I find myself wanting more info on what exactly makes curators more powerful than others. Is it just training, or is there something that they're born with (kind of like the secret gifts of all the old families...which was really cool by the way. Hopefully they'll figure out what the prewitt gift is).
One slight complaint I have is some of the grammatical errors. It makes some lines totally unreadable, but doesn't really take away from my enjoyment of the story. And it has gotten better as you've gotten further into your story. When I saw the new chapter, I read everything from the beginning. I just needed the reminder of where we were at in the story.
Anyway, keep up the great work.
Author's Response: *cringe*
Don't remind me! I can't read most of the earlier chapters without wanting to hide! It's somewhat normal, I think, since I started this in High School, and have since gone through 4 years of college, where I do a lot of writing. Practice is a wonderful thing, and learning to structure arguments and thoughts as well, I guess. But I've made the decision not to go back and edit the first chapters before I finish the story, so it will have to wait.
I'm glad you enjoy all the original elements of the story - I put quite a bit of thought in it, and there are more things that will become clear further on. But I'll answer your question about the curators, since I already gave a few hints: a normal Curator is a fearsome warrior because of their training - the Curator Tractus (the dueling technique Harry and Ginny are learning) teach them to use their magic to improve their physical abilities, and make themselves into the best duelists around. It isn't the same as the innate abilities from the old families, because it can be learned by anyone.
But I won't say anymore - too many spoilers!
Thanks for reading, and reviewing!
Cheers,
Cathy
Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2010.07.13 - 06:50PM Title: Meltdown
Very interesting story! I just read the whole thing and I really like it! I'm glad Hermione is going along with them.
Reviewer: jediprankster Signed Date: 2010.07.12 - 02:36AM Title: Meltdown
Let me first say that your command of the English language is superb for someone who is not a native speaker. There is the occasional odd phrasing or word choice, but I see worse from those for whom English is their only language.
I just discovered this story a couple of days ago, and I must say that I am thoroughly impressed. Not only is it very engaging, and very well written, but it appears as though you have prepared a detailed outline before you started writing. Something that many fanfiction authors neglect to do. This story does not have that aimless meandering feel that many stories exhibit. Even some published classics (such as The Lord of The Rings) have this problem to some extent. The overall feel, so far, is that you know exactly where you are going with the plot, and you have all of the stops along the way planned as well. I am an avid reader and I don't get that feeling, even from published works, very often.
I am enjoying every aspect of this story, and can't wait for the next chapter. But I'm patient. I know that good writing can't be rushed. Take whatever time it takes to get it right, and I'll be here to read it when it gets here.
Author's Response: Thanks a lot, I'm very glad you enjoyed my work! I do have a precise goal in mind, and most of the important scenes plotted, even if I still have to figure out the transitions. I'm glad you can see that in the writing.
I'm about 3/4 done with the next chapter, so I hope not to tale forever before posting. Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!
Cheers,
Cathy
Reviewer: serious_blue Signed Date: 2010.07.11 - 03:53PM Title: Meltdown
I love the story and am glad you are back to writing. I understand how frustrating RL can be and don't fault you for the delays in the story. This is one of the best HP/GW stories out there and I am glad to see the update. Please keep going and write at your own pace because you have a good writing style and have developed the characters nicely.
Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the review! I'm very glad you enjoy my work. I might work slowly, but I won't be abandoning this story anytime soon, so keep an eye out for the next chapter! Cheers, Cathy.
Reviewer: seekers_destiny Signed Date: 2010.07.10 - 12:02PM Title: Meltdown
I was a little surprised that Hermione came back so soon but I knew that she'd come back. Now the research can really start! ;-)
I really like several parts of this chapter. Your description of Harry's condition after his little "tantrum", the conversation between Elektra and Michael and Ron's reactions during the final conversation. You also manage to keep some subplots active and increase the interest for future chapters. Top marks!
errata:
he new he had to get out of that room
he knew he had to get out of that room
if one didn’t know just how very dangerous
if one didn’t know just how very dangerous it was
Harry took a tentative seep
Harry took a tentative sip
Dracon hesitated
Draco hesitated
straitened a little in their sofa
straightened a little on their sofa
Verb
straiten, distress (bring into difficulties or distress, especially financial hardship)
straiten (squeeze together)
but it makes you loose perspective
but it makes you lose perspective
Harry and her had spent the last few days
Harry and she had spent the last few days
his voice loosing the lightness
his voice losing the lightness
Neville’s answer was cut shore
Neville’s answer was cut short
Author's Response: Thanks for the review (and the corrections - english isn't my first language, and things sometimes slip through). I'm glad you liked the chapter! I wasn't sure, at first, about how to handle Hermione, but chose to start resolving some conflicts, instead of creating new ones. I hope it wasn't too abrupt. Once more, thanks for reading! Cheers, Cathy
Reviewer: hgromance Signed Date: 2010.07.10 - 11:20AM Title: Meltdown
I was so happy to see an update to this story. I'm glad Harry is finally letting the others in on the secrets. I'm also glad you didn't allow Hermione to be gone for very long. They really need her researching skills. Can't wait for the nect chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing! I'm glad you approved my decision regarding Hermione (opinions are quite divided about that, lol, but I can't please everyone). I should have a new chapter soon - I have one last scene to write, but it's coming along nicely. Cheers!
Reviewer: mwinter Signed Date: 2010.07.10 - 01:32AM Title: Meltdown
I would like to see in the next chapter the Headmaster lose to Harry the legal battle.
Author's Response: That is something I'm quite looking forward to write! But I must say, you'll have to wait for chapter 25... I hope it's not too far away! Thanks for reviewing! Cathy
Reviewer: Soccer Devil22 Signed Date: 2010.07.10 - 01:16AM Title: Meltdown
I havent read the chapter yet, but i would just like to say... THANK YOU! for updating! this is the first fanfic I ever read and I was sad too see it on hiatus for soo long. ~Jeffery~
Author's Response: That is so nice to know! Even if sometimes I cringe when I think about the first chapters of this story, lol. And TWWF was never really on hiatus - but I'm a slow writer especially with a complex story like this one, and RL is busy. I hope you enjoy the chapter! Cheers, Cathy
