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Reviewer: Ginnykins Anonymous Date: 2007.07.09 - 04:44PM Title: Harsh Words
Another excellent chapter! I'm glad the dementors were burnt to smithereens! I'm wondering though what the outcome will be regarding security in Azkabhan.
Reviewer: natjbrown Signed Date: 2007.02.26 - 10:39PM Title: Harsh Words
This has been a fascinating story. Thank you so much for writing it. I find myself checking often to see if there is a new update yet. Definitely deserving an "O" for Outstanding. I can't wait to see what happens next.
Reviewer: werekitten Signed Date: 2007.02.26 - 06:03PM Title: Harsh Words
Thats an amazing story (so far!)! I just started reading it, and I've barely left my computer since I started. I love the scenario, its great! The only thing that dissapoints me is that Ginny agreed to stay at Hogwarts in the first timeline, but that had to happen in order for her to die. Otherwise, its great, and keep the updates comeing!
Reviewer: ephemeral11 Signed Date: 2007.02.06 - 12:02AM Title: Harsh Words
Amazing story. I'm in love and you're saving a bunch of people from the tension of waiting for book 7... but even so I think I might be hard pressed in deciding against a chapter from JKR or from this story... hehe
Thanks matt! looking forward to new updates. :)
Reviewer: ephemeral11 Signed Date: 2007.02.06 - 12:01AM Title: Harsh Words
Amazing story. I'm in love and you're saving a bunch of people from the tension of waiting for book 7... but even so I think I might be hard pressed in deciding against a chapter from JKR or from this story... hehe
Thanks matt! looking forward to new updates. :)
Reviewer: Aadarshinah Signed Date: 2006.12.29 - 08:59PM Title: Harsh Words
I have barely slept these last twenty-four hours, reading this fic. I must say, it is probably one of the best things I've read, fan fic or real fic. I'm dying to know what happens next. I'm curious as to Dumbledore's reaction to Rita's artical, let alone what happens when he does finally find out what Harry did.
Again, codos on the wonderful fic.
Reviewer: moshpit Signed Date: 2006.12.13 - 05:01PM Title: Harsh Words
I've been reading NoFP for a while, but haven't bothered to leave a review. Unfortunately, I don't always keep up with your updates -- not a slight intended, it's just that they require me to sit down and think, something most fanfic doesn't do. I don't like feeling rushed when I want to be sure I'm catching nuances in a story.
Seeing your A/N at the end of this chapter has left me pondering a few things. On the whole, I think your writing style is quite good, and it's clearly discernible how you've matured as an author during the course of this long story. I really liked the writing quality of this last chapter ... the prior two or three felt, and please excuse me here, rushed or somewhat sub-par for your normal standards. It's a real bear keeping the story interesting, while fitting it into the "serials" nature of fanfic. Overall, I think you're doing an excellent job, and deserve the accolades you've earned. But I'm also really pleased that this latest chapter is an up-swing back to your usual standards. It's a pleasure to read.
As for the negative reviews and what not... well, it seems like the price of being popular. While it must be very irritating and frustrating to you, it's about the most back-handed compliment you could receive. If your writing was less good, if your story plot less original and less well constructed, you probably wouldn't be experiencing such things. Can you imagine what JKR or Robert Jordan or George R. R. Martin must receive in the way of mail? I would hope that publishers have a giant recycling bin for the bulk of it and never actually relay such rubbish.
In sum, please do keep writing on this story. Ignore the idiots if you can, and do the writing you want to do and enjoy doing. I much prefer a slower update cycle with your higher quality of writing than trying to appease the sheep if it means lower standards. It's a great story, and you've led to such a huge collection of copy-cat works it's kind of silly.
Thanks for writing and sharing.
Reviewer: VelvetMouse Signed Date: 2006.11.21 - 05:02PM Title: Harsh Words
Wow, I am really impressed. This is a truly original take on a time travel fic. I love the genre in general, but time travel fics tend to make my head hurt and have plot holes big enough to drive a truck through. This, however, has done neither.
I particularly love your spunky Ginny, which does seem very much in character with how she could have been, and how Harry must balance his physical age with his blended mental age. I also am very intrigued by which events you deem "necessary" - the ones that are going to happen no matter how screwed up the timeline gets.
I can't wait to see what happens next!
Reviewer: Chunky Signed Date: 2006.11.10 - 09:12AM Title: Harsh Words
Nice go so far. Since I did read your Authors Notes, I wil tell you honestly and true what I think about this thingy, hopefully, together with the others not threatening your life for a story this dark, this helps you to keep going on like this.
Lets do this in the usual pro/contra way... too lazy to figure out something new :P
Things little Chunky really liked:
- First of all, this story is based upon something others would call a "worst case" scenario, while I think its rather the only possible outcome of a conflict between 50, maybe 100 Order Members, Civillians and Hogwards Pupils, lead by Dumbledore and the Boy who lived and vast force of fanatical murderers, power mongerers and simply vicious arseholes [Language Chunky! ;)] lead by the most evil and powerful Wizard ever "lived" if you like to call it that way
- second of all: I did honestly not like the Harry Potter of the first four books. He was childish and imature and hardly a good friend. He kept secrets, he lied to his friends, he acted stupid on purpose. YOUR Harry on the other Hand is - of course - the same, but he learned through his mistakes. Though it cost the life of everyone he ever loved and cared about, he finally came to sences. Yes, people might now claim I am not a real Fan, these people are free to threaten my life NOW.... kay that has to do it. On with the Review :)
-Your style of writing is a very interesting one. You put in some "Flowers and Pixis"-Scenes, how I like to call it, and then ruin the whole thing with a by-the-way mentioning of a really cruel memory, like Ginnys dead body after the Hogwardsmassacre. You dont really explain what really has happened, which I really do appreciate since I am not exactly a fan of pointless violence. Also, your chapters are rather long and details. You dont rush things [except for one point I will mention in the things little chunky me hates you for :P] which I do appreciate not only a little. Maybe in school it was okay to write "as many information in as little words as possible!" but not when it comes to rewrite an epic story like the life and death of Harry Potter.
And now the things little chunky does not like :) hope to amuse you :P
- The charakter-development is way too quickly. I dont know if this is on purpose or not, but you are slowly but surely running out of pointful charakter scenes. Remember: There is still MUCH that is to do for Harry, unless you want him and his friends to face Voldemort at the age of fourteen. Be always aware of that, though I do know it is hard to hold back when you start to like your charakters, they still have a long way ahead of them. Dont rush things here. Story and charakter development must be equaly balanced for this story to make sense in the end.
- I am not sure what I might think of the rather stupid way you present Dumbledore to us... I dont know, I dont really like him myself, but such open hate he receives from you is hardly deserved. I think I am not the only one to think that, but of course I wont interfere with your story, its yours afterall :)
Thats pretty much it... became longer than I thought it would become. I hope you keep going with the story and of course that this review helps you to see things that you didnt notice before. I will keep reading this to the end, so dont disappoint me please ;)
--Chunky
And again: I will apologize for every single Spellingmistake or gramatical error I put into this, english is NOT the language I grew up with, so I am sort of handycaped in this way ;)
Reviewer: SilentKunoichi Signed Date: 2006.11.08 - 01:08AM Title: Harsh Words
This fic is sensational! I absolutely love it and can't wait until you add the next chapter. I've practically read it from the start nonstop only getting up for necessities starting yesterday and not counting sleep. )I occasionally get annoyed that Harry's friends tend to speak way to old for their age but I also understand that they have much reason to. I absolutely love the way Luna acted with Neville until his Grams started messing with them, I believe I've annoyed my family enough when laughing at your funny scenes though but it was worth it.
PAMS(Please add more soon)
Reviewer: random_chik91 Anonymous Date: 2006.11.06 - 05:52AM Title: Harsh Words
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Reviewer: Nat2830 Signed Date: 2006.11.03 - 11:50PM Title: Harsh Words
Dear Intromit,
I can honestly say that, this is quite frankly one of the best pieces of fan fiction that I have read, majority of which has been declassified from acceptable to dreadful in one fell swoop. Once I started reading I couldn't stop, I very nearly popped a vein when SIYE went off line, as I was unable to read the rest of the chapters or access your profile to find out another site future's past was located in, (which is annoying as I made it to chapter 25 before it went offline) but i got lucky when I tracked it down to another site.
The complexities of this story make it very entertaining to read and getting my head round everything is a challenge, especially when trying to figure out what changes you are going to implement next. I can't imagine how difficult it must be for you to keep everything straight.
Overall an excellent story.
I hope that another chapter is on the way though no pressure; there are never enough hours in a day.
Nat2830
Author's Response: Er... I'm not Intromit... but thanks!
Reviewer: STA Anonymous Date: 2006.11.03 - 05:13PM Title: Harsh Words
I LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ABSOLUTELY BRILIANT!!! FABULOUS!!!WONDERFUL!!!AMAZING!!! PLEASE UPPDATE ASAP!!!!!!!!!!!!! I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!!!! THIS IS AN AMAZING STORY!!! I LOVE IT!!! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!
Reviewer: Chreechree Signed Date: 2006.10.28 - 04:57AM Title: Harsh Words
You get nasty emails because you don’t update quickly enough? Seriously? Bad form, people, bad form! I think they must believe that you have nothing else going on in your life but writing this story. You have to eat too.
First of all, Accio-ing the Dementors into the wards was supremely satisfying. Listen to the foul things sizzle. Thank you for that. The reunion between Sirius and Remus was touching just as the twins “adoption” of Sirius when they learned he was a Marauder was hysterical. Very, very clever of Sirius to remove the bones of Tom Sr. and replace them with twigs. That will make things much more, er, complicated for Tom. I do like the idea of Norbert eating Nagini. I’m thinking that Fawkes might take care of Nagini because of the traditional part of phoenix mythology about the snake being its enemy. That being said, I won’t complain if we get to see Norbert helping Harry out in the last book. And Sirius managed to get all the Horcruxes with little trouble. I sincerely hope that he is correct about the cup, and that its removal was not in any way detected. Ah, I love Sirius, and I can’t tell you how gratifying it is to see him be able to help Harry like I know he wanted to do in canon. The Order hasn’t reformed, but he’s certainly performed a most vital task. No more feeling useless.
I am very wary about Harry’s aggressiveness during the interview. It’s not that I disagree with his reasoning for going on the offensive, but I do worry that the repercussions will be worse than he anticipates. Caution is often warranted. This might be a bit too much too early. Hard to tell though. Ah, it’s getting so much tougher with the divergent timelines. I look forward to seeing how things play out in their third year and discovering just what those Dementors are up to. Wonderfully entertaining as always.
Reviewer: Larry Signed Date: 2006.10.28 - 03:04AM Title: Harsh Words
Please let me apologize for not commenting sooner, but this is one dynamite story.. From the first moment I started reading it I have to admit, I couldn't put it down. What a superb read. Thanks for an outstanding story, I'm really looking forward to the next updates. Regards............
Reviewer: twotrips Signed Date: 2006.10.27 - 09:06AM Title: Harsh Words
Great story! I like the way you write, you take the reader into your world and
you make it shine brightly.Very vivid. Mind movies! Thanks so much.
Reviewer: Enchantedgurls Signed Date: 2006.10.26 - 07:18PM Title: Harsh Words
Excellent chapter, as always. I liked that last line. Please update when you can. I sincerely can't wait.
Reviewer: TheDarkLord Signed Date: 2006.10.26 - 09:37AM Title: Harsh Words
Hey, Thanks for the Respose. I wanted to ask one thing though.
The reason Harry was forced to lie to Remus about Sirius was because Snape or Dumbledore could get into his memories when he was weakened from his transformations. So, it seem to me that Remus learning Occulumency would not serve much purpose since for Occulumency to really work, the person has to be completely alert.
You could say that Remus could use Protego as Harry did after the Troll atack. But I sincerely doubt Remus would be able to keep Dumbledore out like that.
PS: ' I'm immune to Imperio - I'm married ' - Damn. Guess I have to Beg then :-). Please Update Soon.
Author's Response: He can also avoid Dumbledore like the plague. And Harry was theorizing about occlumency and the werewolf transformation - he has no way of really knowing for sure, does he?
Reviewer: Flavia Signed Date: 2006.10.26 - 04:26AM Title: Harsh Words
I think when people are clamoring for updtes, it's meant to be a compliment,
not as a rude order, or attempt to run your life. I know that I find waiting for
updates to be nearly intolerable. Nearly :-)
Fabulous chapter as usual - but my favorite part was how you linked Peter
Pettigrew's capture into the corruption and present actions of the Minsitry.
You show with every installment that not only are you thinking ahead, but
that your plotting is eminently superior.
